Another strength in your story is this part “The old man just started to say that he was just trying to help my grandma didn't believe him so she just ignored him and walked away that same night my grandma said she was going to go some wear she never told me wear thow but I told her not to go but she said she had to I  started to cry again because I didn't want her to go because I didn't want to be left alone again, especially at night.” I like how you explained how you didnt want her to go becaues he was scared  and how he didnt know where she was going. I wish you would add more to this part “ I said no way she said why not I said i'm gonna go to jail she sed no your not she got the key again I hid under the bed and stayed there the police lied on the floor and started to talk to me I closed my eyes and facked to sleep they didnt beleve me.” I think you should add more details in how they found you and how you felt  and why she hidden you.