7th Grade Writing by Haidyn Pantano

Max B.

2022-02-01 15:15:49 UTC

I liked the word choice you used throughout your writing piece it tied your writing all together. I liked the local economic reasons you had listed in your store it shown how much of a benefit e-scooters could impact on the world. The only problem was some of your grammar didn’t quite make sense so make sure to reread it.

Mily<3

2022-02-01 17:23:38 UTC

I love your story! Every time I read something I really like I always think about what could happen next. I certainly did that with your writing piece! I kept thinking “who could it be?” “What’s gonna happen?” I thought your writing piece was extremely creative. The only thing I suggest is to expand your descriptions a bit between dialogue<3

Mily

27mhastrup — 2022-03-10 17:15:04 UTC

hi I’m back👺 I really loved your presentation! I like how you did the bullet points instead of big paragraphs, it made the presentation simpler to read. I love how you introduced someone who used the product, I thought that was very creative. My only suggestion is to not use your products name as much as you did. Even though that was the name of our product, having the same word repeated so many times could make it seem wordy.

Informative Article

27mcoppockhuegel — 2022-04-11 13:37:21 UTC

Hi Haidyn!

My star for you is how organized your article was. It was also very pretty. It was pleasing to look which makes it more attention drawing. M y wish for you is that you said how long the longest musical was. I would have liked to know that. I live your article overall though!
-Meg :)