https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93 1. Which response is better? Heart the better response. 2. Make a post about what you would fix about the weaker response. 3. Make a post about what you think the better answer does well. Here's the prompt for review: 1.Defines the climax and identifies where it is located in extended fiction. 2. Identifies the climax of "Allegedly." 3. Explain how the author builds to the climax in the rising action and what literary devices she uses. *Use at least one of your own similes within this response (bold it). *Use at least one sentence with parallel structure within your response (Italicize it). en-us 2020-12-18 02:05:06 UTC 2020-12-18 15:04:35 UTC hello@padlet.com masterythomasmccullough https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1030057221 Imagine being in a dark room that is stark quiet besides a pounding wind and soft light. The snow has fallen making it eerily quiet. You need to escape the house, but know there is someone lurking about. And to make matters worse, the person you can't locate has demonic intentions. This is how the author builds tension toward the most intense turning point of the book - the climax - nearing the end of the novel. Besides the setting, the description of Sarah adds to the ominous mood. The author describes Sarah's eyes as "cold as snow" and then later "just like a ghost, snow-white skin glowing." We see the author is using diction, repetition, and similes to describe this character. If eyes are the window to the soul, then the simile of cold eyes reveal a deep seated evil in Sarah. Additionally, the author uses "snow" twice. It's interesting that snow is falling all around outside, while she uses "snow" to describe Sarah. This indicates Sarah is all around - moving stealthily as a "ghost." The diction of "ghost" also implies death and danger. We can see this combined with the setting, builds a mood akin to a horror film. The descriptions build like legos - stacking upon each other - until there is only one option. The legos fall. And that is the climax - Mary's fall down the stairs.]]> 2020-12-18 02:05:06 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1030057221 masterythomasmccullough https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1030057223 The climax in extended fiction comes about 75 percent of the way through the story and is the most intense turning point. In "Allegedly" the the climax is when Sarah (New Girl) pushes Mary down the steps. Sarah is like a villain in a horror movie. The author builds to the climax in the rising action by using motif, mood, tone, character development and figurative language. It says, "The door creaks like an air horn as I peer into the hallway. Nothing but blackness, an eerie graveyard, the stairs a million miles away." This helps create tension and build suspense, which is the purpose of the rising action.]]> 2020-12-18 02:05:06 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1030057223 pc127541 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031371082 I think this person better than the first response. Although both defined climax and quotes from the novel, This person has parallel structure and the commentary of the quotes was way more thought out and is clear to the reader.]]> 2020-12-18 14:50:52 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031371082 mm115083 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031374415 this response is the better one due to it going more in depth into what the climax is with the details that help crate it. the author defines quotes, fig language, and moods that connect to characters and settings leading to the climax.

]]> 2020-12-18 14:51:46 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031374415 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031375977 This one gives more specific details,getting into depth about the climax,and is describing more of the figurative language,and is]]> 2020-12-18 14:52:11 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031375977 dm118519 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031377481 straight to the point
but needs the parallel structure and cite evidence better

]]> 2020-12-18 14:52:27 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031377481 ar127431 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031380108 To start i would add some type of figurative language most likely a metaphor in the start of option 1. Option 2 does very well when explaining the quotes it uses.]]> 2020-12-18 14:53:05 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031380108 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031380869 Option 2 is better because it's give more details and explains more how the author uses the figurative language.  What I change about the first option is that it needs more description ]]> 2020-12-18 14:53:16 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031380869 mf127106 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031385150 This option is better because it has way more details then option 1. This option also goes farther depth in the climax.Even though they both got the climax and good evidence, option 2 has better commentary and parallel structure.]]> 2020-12-18 14:54:25 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031385150 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031386174 i think option 1 is better because it gets straight to the point and everything is clear]]> 2020-12-18 14:54:42 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031386174 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031386532 this one is better - brianna]]> 2020-12-18 14:54:47 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031386532 tj112682 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031387718 I think this option is better then 2 I say this because although 2 is longer, that doesn’t automatically mean it’s correct. I feel like this one gets straight to the point, and even though it’s shorter, it has more important information and elaborates more.]]> 2020-12-18 14:55:07 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031387718 pc127541 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031391522 2 things. 
1) No parallel structure 
2) No context. This context is the rising action.]]> 2020-12-18 14:56:06 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031391522 kp115159 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031397046 Because not only does it have a good claim but also evidace to back it up and good one to and also the order she or he wrote in is good. Khup]]> 2020-12-18 14:57:31 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031397046 dm118519 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031402105 followed the criteria well and has strong evidence for their claim]]> 2020-12-18 14:58:48 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031402105 mf127106 https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031402115 One thing option 1 didn't have that option 2 had is no parallel structure. Also the context is mixed in the rising action a little bit.]]> 2020-12-18 14:58:48 UTC https://padlet.com/masterythomasmccullough/m235xahr2sh3fq93/wish/1031402115