Two memos by Business Writing https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb Business Writing skills en-us 2019-08-29 09:45:33 UTC 2023-05-31 21:42:47 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.pics/1/image.webp?t=g_auto&url=https%3A%2F%2Fpadlet.net%2Ficons%2Fpng%2F1f642.png MEMO A BusinessWriting https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/378211734 2019-08-29 10:06:56 UTC https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/378211734 MEMO B BusinessWriting https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/378211845 2019-08-29 10:07:31 UTC https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/378211845 Group 3 https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/382030489 Ellie
Henry 
Sharon
Memo 1
Not pad detail to attention
Not very clear 
Too wordy 
 grammar is not the best 

Memo 2

Clear objectives, much easier to understand. The structure is clear.]]> 2019-09-10 09:03:31 UTC https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/382030489 Maddy, Chloe, Vanessa and Greta greta_biggi https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/382031281 Memo 1 is arrogant, not clear and there is a lack of presentation.
The subject is short but unclear.

Memo 2 even thou doesn't have an introduction has a better structure, there is a clearer focus and an actual proposition. ]]> 2019-09-10 09:06:30 UTC https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/382031281 M sharronmcintyre25 https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/382031540 2019-09-10 09:07:23 UTC https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/382031540 Memo 1 is just one big paragraph and has no commas. memo 2 has a much better structure https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/382031724 2019-09-10 09:08:01 UTC https://padlet.com/BusinessWriting/lv6b9cm51kdb/wish/382031724