https://padlet.com/24sanand/lpyhug24xh4y Made with a wish on a star, so be positive and kind with reading. Thank you for reading! en-us 2018-12-05 15:18:11 UTC 2018-12-07 15:20:40 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Brightnessdown.png 24hbaik https://padlet.com/24sanand/lpyhug24xh4y/wish/312253645 I absolutely loved the vivid description used to describe the moment of your brother walking for the first time.  Also, I love how you slowed down time so the reader can imagine the scene happening as if they were actually there.  You can improve on the flow of your story more, maybe add more transition words...]]> 2018-12-07 14:59:13 UTC https://padlet.com/24sanand/lpyhug24xh4y/wish/312253645