Sentence Clarity by Jesse Arnold McDowell https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar First, write your group name in the title. Second, recreate each sentence according to the clarity tip provided. en-us 2016-11-10 19:22:36 UTC 2016-11-11 00:03:25 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Brightnessdown.png Subordinate Clauses jessemcdowell65 https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136866736 Not as clear (subordinate clause embedded in the middle): 

Industrial spying,because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information, is increasing rapidly. 
]]> 2016-11-10 19:31:23 UTC https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136866736 Use Active Voice jessemcdowell65 https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136868140 Sentences in active voice are usually easier to understand than those in passive voice because active-voice constructions indicate clearly the performer of the action expressed in the verb. In addition, changing from passive voice to active often results in a more concise sentence. So use active voice unless you have good reason to use the passive. For example, the passive is useful when you don't want to call attention to the doer; when the doer is obvious, unimportant, or unknown; or when passive voice is the conventional style among your readers.


Not as clear (passive): 

A decision was reached to postpone the vote. 
]]> 2016-11-10 19:34:32 UTC https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136868140 Use parallel constructions jessemcdowell65 https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136868494 When you have a series of words, phrases, or clauses, put them in parallel form (similar grammatical construction) so that the reader can identify the linking relationship more easily and clearly.

Not as clear (not parallel): 

In Florida, where the threat of hurricanes is an annual event, we learned that it is important (1) to become aware of the warning signs. (2) There are precautions to take, and (3) deciding when to take shelter is important. 


]]> 2016-11-10 19:35:18 UTC https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136868494 Active Verbs jessemcdowell65 https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136896623 Choose action verbs over forms of to be 

When possible, avoid using forms of be as the main verbs in your sentences and clauses. This problem tends to accompany nominalization (see above). Instead of using a be verb, focus on the actions you wish to express, and choose the appropriate verbs. In the following example, two ideas are expressed: (1) that there is a difference between television and newspaper news reporting, and (2) the nature of that difference. The revised version expresses these two main ideas in the two main verbs. 

Sentence:
One difference between television news reporting and the coverage provided by newspapers is the time factor between the actual happening of an event and the time it takes to be reported. The problem is that instantaneous coverage is physically impossible for newspapers. 
]]> 2016-11-10 21:17:12 UTC https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136896623 Table: Jackson, Abby, Paige https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136912080 Active Verbs:
"One difference between television reporting and the coverage provided by newspapers is the time factor between the actual happening of an event and the time it takes to report it. The problem is instantaneous coverage is physically impossible for newspapers"

Active Voice:
"They reached a decision to postpone the vote"

Subordinate Clauses:
"Industrial spying is increasing rapidly because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information"

Parallel Constructions:
"In Florida, where the threat of hurricanes is an annual event, we learned that it is important to become aware of the warning signs, to take precautions, and to decide when to take shelter."]]> 2016-11-10 23:44:33 UTC https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136912080 Table: Nicole, Kennedy, Catherine, Maddy, and Garrett nepetrov https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136912129 Active verbs: One difference between television news reporting and the coverage provided by newspapers is the time factor between the actual happening of an event and the reporting of the event. The problem is that instantaneous coverage is physically impossible for newspapers. 

Active voice: The "committee" reached a decision to postpone the vote.

Subordinate Clauses: Industrial spying is increasing rapidly because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information.

Parallel Constructions: In Florida, where the threat of hurricanes is an annual event, we learned that it is important to become aware of the warning signs, to take precautions, and to decide when to take shelter.

]]> 2016-11-10 23:45:33 UTC https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136912129 Table: Simon, Cyrus, Daniel, Kevin https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136912195 Active Verb:
One difference between television news reporting and the coverage provided by newspapers is the time factor between the actual happening of an event and the time it takes to report the event. The problem is that instantaneous coverage is physically impossible for newspapers.
Active Voice: 
A decision was reached by Kevin to postpone the vote. 
Subordinate clause: Industrial spying is increasing rapidly because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information. 
Parallel Constructions:
In Florida, where the threat of hurricanes is an annual event, we learned that it is important to become aware of the warning signs, take precautions, and decide when to take shelter is important. ]]> 2016-11-10 23:46:57 UTC https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136912195 Table: Chandler, Grace, Lexi https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136912298 Active verbs: One difference between television news reporting and the coverage provided by newspapers represents the time factor between the actual happening of an event and the time it takes them to report. The problem of instantaneous coverage remains physically impossible for newspapers. 
Active voice: The board reached a decision to postpone the vote.
Subordinate clauses: Due tot he growing use of computers to store and process corporate information, industrial spying is increasing rapidly.
Parallel constructions: In Florida, where the threat of hurricanes is an annual event, we learned that it is important to become aware of the warning signs, to take precautions, and to decide when it is important to take shelter.]]> 2016-11-10 23:48:46 UTC https://padlet.com/jessemcdowell65/lnk1w2h124ar/wish/136912298