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      <title>Practice Writing Commentary by Gretchen Monroe</title>
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      <description>Put your name at the top of a pad. From the draft of your paper, pick one of your drafted paragraphs, or at least pick one piece of evidence you used in a paragraph. Copy and paste it here. FIRST: underneath, write down all of the different parts of the evidence you could focus on, just like we saw on the GSS. THEN: write some commentary about one of the parts you focused on, following the model in the GSS.</description>
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      <pubDate>2023-12-11 13:46:08 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Types of Commentary</title>
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         <description><![CDATA[<p>Simpler Terms*</p><p>Draw a conclusion</p><p>Think forward, backward, present</p><p>Give consequence</p><p>Tell the cause and effect</p><p>Find a trend</p><p>Compare and contrast<br>Tell why it matters</p><p>Show how it proves your position</p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 13:48:42 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Olivia Lovegrove</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821425505</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>“Usually, at the end of a Final Four run, <mark>your best players leave</mark>,” Cunningham told me. He pointed out four of the Tar Heel players on the practice court — Bacot, Love, R.J. Davis and Leaky Black, a long-limbed defensive specialist. All of them started on last year’s team, and all of them <mark>returned for another year</mark>. “In each case,” Cunningham said, “<mark>NIL was at least partially the reason</mark>.”</p><p><br/></p><p>NIL is at least partially the reason</p><p>NIL keeps athletes returning to play in college instead of going professional. </p><p>This matters because it can keep college athletics at the highest level because the best players aren't leaving to go professional. </p><p>It also is beneficial for the athletes because it will help them stay in school and get a degree. </p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:28:51 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Mya Vest</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821426829</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>"Additionally, block scheduling has been utilized to (a) address current <mark>accountability</mark> demands; (b) simplify the <mark>school structure</mark>; (c) <mark>improve educational outcomes</mark> among all students; and (d) provide the <mark>flexibility</mark> and <mark>organization</mark> needed to produce the best schools in the world (Edwards, 1993)."</p><ul><li><p>school's need to be held accountable for their responsibilities</p></li><li><p>this aids in the greater development of school structure</p></li><li><p><strong>narrowing down the amount of subjects studied each semester in order to improve educational outcomes</strong></p><ul><li><p>--&gt; If students are struggling to balance studying seven or eight subjects each day, the educational outcome may not be as successful as the educators or the students strive for them to be. Narrowing down subject matter to three or four subjects per semester allows students to put more of their focus towards the tasks at hand, which are related to the subject matter of their study. It is naturally easier for students to put more effort and focus towards their schooling when there isn't as much to juggle academically. </p></li></ul></li><li><p>incorporate block scheduling in order for there to be more flexibility in students' schedules and simpler organization in their school schedules</p></li></ul>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:29:55 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Jasmine </title>
         <author>jasminegrace</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821427141</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>"Hands up, don't shoot. Michael Brown. We're all familiar with this story. I suspect most of you also know that hands up, don't shoot is not a thing that happened, <mark>that there were two separate federal Justice Department investigations </mark>into the shooting, and it was determined that what was expected, <mark>what was told to us that happened there didn't in fact happen.</mark>"</p><ul><li><p>address the spread of misinformation</p></li><li><p>highlight how the story was twisted</p></li><li><p>contrast the true story to the lies in the media</p></li></ul><p>The story of Michael brown was skewed in the media to further an agenda. What was told to the public was the story on an innocent black teen shot by a racist white cop. However, investigations into the story revealed that that was not the case.</p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:30:09 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Elisabeth Berrier </title>
         <author>elisabethberrier</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821427402</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>“The user's <mark>preoccupation with the substance,</mark> plus its effects on mood and performance, can lead to marital problems and poor work performance or dismissal. <mark>Drug use can disrupt family life and create destructive patterns of codependency</mark>, that is, the spouse or whole family, out of love or fear of consequences,<mark> inadvertently enables the user to continue using drugs by covering up, supplying money, or denying there is a problem</mark>. <mark>Pregnant drug users</mark>, because of the drugs themselves or poor self-care in general, <mark>bear a much higher rate of low birth-weight babies than the average."</mark></p><p><br/></p><ol><li><p>As stated by the Columbian Encyclopedia drugs have extremely negative effects on family life; a reasonable extension of this idea would be to assume that these effects could create a very detrimental environment for child development. Therefore, this verifies the idea that infants shouldn't be sent home with mothers who have a drug abuse addiction. </p></li></ol>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:30:21 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Elizabeth Sauberan</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821427408</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>According to Carson and Kuzik (2019), <mark>Early childhood, encompassing the first 6 years of life</mark>, <mark>represents a critical and sensitive window of time for children's development</mark> that <mark>has lifelong implications on health and well-being</mark> (Britto et al., 2017). <mark>Cognitive and social emotional development&nbsp; are&nbsp; two&nbsp; broad domains of development during early childhood</mark> (Berk, 2018; Britto et al., 2017). (p. 478).</p><p><br/></p><p>As researches who studied the effects of technology distractions on children (Carson and Kuzik, 2019, p. 478), Carson and Kuzik offer a highly-educated perspective on the importance of this issue. It is affirmed by their statement that children under the age of six are within a critically-formative period of their lives. That argument provides more insight on why technology exposure is an issue of crucial importance for young children. At that age, children are at a vulnerable time in their development. Due to that vulnerability, it is crucial that the effects of technology exposure on children be thoroughly understood.</p>]]></description>
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         <title>Abram Nelson</title>
         <author>abramnelson</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821427737</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>...and we must ask ourselves: Should we let <mark>machines flood our information channels with propaganda and untruth</mark>? Should we automate away all the jobs, including the fulfilling ones? <mark>Should we develop nonhuman minds that might eventually outnumber, outsmart, obsolete and replace us</mark>? Should <mark>we risk loss of control of our civilization</mark>?... Powerful AI systems should be developed only once we are confident that their effects will be positive and their risks will be manageable.</p><p><br/></p><p><strong>1st Highlighted Portion:</strong> propaganda, false information, how much is there already today?, is it caused by AI?</p><p><br/></p><p><strong>2nd Highlighted Portion:</strong> do we consider AI a human mind?, why would they replace us?, how fast would this happen?</p><p><br/></p><p><strong>3rd Highlighted Portion: </strong>what does loss of control of civilization look like?, could AI do this?</p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:30:37 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Eva Daniell</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821427900</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>Domota claimed that within a year of the divorce, mothers were “<mark>more anxious, depressed, angry, and self-doubting than were married mothers.</mark> They also <mark>showed comparatively less affection to their children</mark> <mark>communicated less with them,</mark> <mark>punished them more</mark> and were <mark>more inconsistent in their use of discipline”</mark></p><p><br/></p><p>More inconsistent in their use of discipline. </p><ul><li><p>With the drastic changes already going on in the child's life, it has to add a whole other level of confusion when the mother is sporadic in her discipline, responding strongly to a behavior one moment, and ignoring it the next. The child may become confused and frustrated by the mothers behavior, giving them a unstable view of justice and the world. </p></li></ul><p><br/></p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:30:45 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Audrey Winkels </title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821428029</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>“First, <mark>the bill does not cover misdemeanor offenses</mark> and is expressly <mark>limited to violent acts that result in bodily injury</mark> (and a limited set of attempts to cause bodily injury). Second, the bill <mark>requires</mark> that Federal prosecutors obtain a <mark>written certification by the Attorney General</mark> or his designee <mark>before a prosecution may be undertaken.”</mark></p><p><br/></p><p>"the bill <mark>requires</mark> that Federal prosecutors obtain a <mark>written certification by the Attorney General</mark> or his designee <mark>before a prosecution may be undertaken.”</mark></p><p><br/></p><p>Without written certification by the Attorney General, no prosecution can happen. Going through the Attorney General weeds out cases that do not apply to Hate Crime Laws and helps to regulate what is taken into court. </p><p><br/></p><p>" <mark>the bill does not cover misdemeanor offenses</mark> and is expressly <mark>limited to violent acts that result in bodily injury</mark> "</p><p><br/></p><p>Limiting the umbrella that hate crime laws cover reduces pleas on misdemeanor offenses. If no bodily injury takes place, it cannot be prosecuted as a hate crime. </p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:30:51 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Sarah Van Ostrand</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821428780</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>When we see likes, comments, or shares on our posts, <mark>our brains release dopamine,</mark> which gives us a sense of satisfaction.</p><p>These rewarding social feedbacks trigger dopamine releases, <mark>giving us a little “high”</mark>. Over time, <mark>we start craving these social media dopamine hits.</mark></p><p>This helps explain why <mark>dopamine is tied to </mark><em><mark>motivation</mark></em><mark>.</mark> <mark>The promise of more likes and comments motivates us to keep posting content. The anticipation of funny videos motivates us to keep scrolling feeds</mark>. <mark>Dopamine makes us want more.</mark></p><p> </p><p><mark>The promise of more likes and comments motivates us to keep posting content. The anticipation of funny videos motivates us to keep scrolling feeds</mark>. <mark>Dopamine makes us want more.</mark></p><p> </p><p>Give consequence: If society continues down its path of social media gratification, the addiction will only continue to grow along with it. These apps are wired to make us want to stay on them whether it's through the dopamine we get from receiving content or through posting content and receiving attention for it. Our reliance on these apps for these hormones could and has become detrimental to people's mental state. When people can find happiness so easily and accessibly on the screen, it makes it harder for people to find joy offline. </p><p><br/></p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:31:29 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Silas Ritzema</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821429602</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>A 2007 Gallup poll found that <mark>86% of Americans would describe the cloning of humans as "morally wrong"</mark>; 59% said the same thing about animal cloning. Polling also shows that <mark>Americans do not approve of the idea of eating food derived from cloned animals</mark>. Sen. Leahy, in his letter to HHS Secretary Michael Leavitt, cites such data in arguing that<mark> the FDA should reconsider its approval of such food</mark>. "Clearly, <mark>consumers are not clamoring for this new food technology,</mark>" writes Leahy.</p><p><br/></p><p> =&gt; First highlighted portion: find a trend</p><ul><li><p>The vast majority of the American people (86%) are not comfortable with the idea of cloning because they consider it as 'morally wrong.' It raises a question: is this trend valid? Is it there to indicate a bigger problem behind the issue of cloning?</p></li></ul>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:32:10 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Gannon</title>
         <author></author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821429826</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>"<mark>Donors</mark> who once gave lavishly to their institutions’ athletics departments <mark>are forming collectives or just funneling money to players directly through their own businesses.</mark> This <mark>money</mark> is not supposed to be an <mark>inducement or a tool used for recruitment</mark>, but it’s obviously <mark>impacting potential students</mark> when they see what other students are getting at certain institutions."</p><p><br/></p><ul><li><p>Focuses on donors using their money to pay players through their businesses</p></li><li><p>NIL is not supposed to influence athletes' college decision; however, that is the direction we are heading.</p></li></ul><p><br/></p><p>NIL has caused donors to switch from donating to the university athletic department to focusing their money on paying athletes by using their own businesses. NIL was never meant to be an incentive to go to a certain school; however this is what college athletics has come to. </p><p><br/></p><p><br/></p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:32:22 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Olivia Leitner</title>
         <author>olivialeitner</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821429898</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>“<mark>Congress</mark> shall make <mark>no law</mark> respecting an establishment of <mark>religion</mark>, or prohibiting the <mark>free exercise</mark> thereof; or abridging the freedom of <mark>speech</mark>, or of the <mark>press</mark>…”</p><p><br/></p><p>-focus on how this is for congress specifically</p><p>-they can't make a law</p><p>-religion, speech and press are protected</p><p>-we have the right to freely exercise these, meaning how we wish</p><p>-explain why these freedoms matter</p><p>-draw conclusions from this amendment on whether or not censorship by social media platforms is constitutional</p><p>-compare this to amendments with the same subject matter to understand the context</p><p><br/></p><p>I focused on the fact that free exercise means we are able to use our speech how we wish. It is a tool to further out opinion and share our thoughts with other people. Understanding what "free exercise" is matters because it show us that if the government is involved in silencing someone, it is not constitutional. </p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:32:25 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Jenna</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821430093</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>“<mark>Paid maternity leave </mark>has been associated with <mark>decreased rates of postpartum depression, infant mortality, and readmission to the hospital for infants and mothers</mark> as well as improved attachment of infants to mothers and increased pediatric visit attendance”&nbsp;</p><p><br/></p><p>This evidence is describing the effects of having a paid maternity leave on mothers and children. If we don't give paid maternity leave, it will cause negative impacts on the lives of families. Not only physical health, but mental health is important to take into consideration. Giving paid maternity leave will cause families' overall health to greatly improve. This matters because the wellbeing of the present and future generation is not something we cannot overlook. This is why maternity leave should be paid when viewed from the family's perspective. </p><p><br/></p>]]></description>
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         <title>Annie Hueser</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821430764</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p><br/></p><p>The sheer <mark>impact of the ball </mark>has left McNabb with significant <mark>long-term physical and mental effects</mark>, including<mark> impaired vision, partial paralysis on her right side, and anxiety and depression.&nbsp;</mark></p><p><br/></p><ul><li><p>focus on the force/strength of male spiking a ball</p></li><li><p>focus on how it has impacted her and her safety</p></li><li><p>focus on how her life has changed</p></li></ul><p><br/></p><p>Peyton McNabb's experience significantly matters because of how it demonstrates the direct threat on women's safety as they compete against biological males. (I focused on Peyton's safety)</p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:33:08 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Zoe Moore</title>
         <author>zoemoore8</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821443892</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>Overseas workers are <mark>exploited and underpaid every day</mark>. “On April 24, 2013, an eight-story building in Savar, Bangladesh, collapsed, <mark>killing more than 1,100 people</mark> (Sweatshop Labor, 2013). The <em>New York Times</em> described it as <mark>"one of the worst manufacturing disasters in history."</mark> (Manik, Julfikar Ali, 2013). Many deaths such as this tragic accident happen every day in other countries. This is due to unsafe working conditions and poor management. </p><p><br/></p><ul><li><p>Focusing on the unethical practices of these companies overseas.</p></li><li><p>The tragedies that happen in the factories. </p></li></ul><p>I want to focus on the tragedies that come from the poor working conditions, and then lead into how this is unethical and this is what the U.S. is supporting when we spend millions of dollars on these companies just for them to exploit their workers. </p><p><br/></p><p><br/></p>]]></description>
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         <pubDate>2023-12-11 18:43:39 UTC</pubDate>
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         <title>Sydney Trucke</title>
         <author>sydneytrucke</author>
         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821444677</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>"Three of the reasons given by the infertile couples surveyed by van Balen and colleagues about their preference for ART over adoption—not wanting children with <mark>behavioral problems</mark>, <mark>reluctance to fill out the paperwork adoption requires</mark>, and the <mark>fear that they will be unable to adopt successfully</mark> [31]—are misguided."</p><p><br/></p><ul><li><p>Children born of IVF may also have behavioral problems</p></li><li><p>IVF requires more paperwork sometimes</p></li><li><p>IVF is less "successful" than adoption.</p><ul><li><p>IVF has an average of 4-40% success rate</p></li></ul></li><li><p>Basically, these reasons are just excuses to avoid saying that they don't want a child that isn't "theirs"</p></li></ul>]]></description>
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         <title>Dahlton Fisher</title>
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         <link>https://padlet.com/gmonroe4/lm5jm676h5ipu9bg/wish/2821444894</link>
         <description><![CDATA[<p>"The fast fashion model encourages consumers to <mark>view clothing as disposable.</mark> In fact, the average American throws away approximately <mark>80 pounds of clothing </mark>and textiles annually, occupying nearly <mark>5% of landfill space</mark> [3]. Clothing not sent directly to the landfill often ends up in the second-hand clothing trade. Approximately <mark>500,000 tons of used clothing are exported abroad from the United States each year, the majority ending up in LMICs"</mark></p><p><br/></p><ul><li><p>a new view of clothing</p></li><li><p>The amount of waste it produces</p></li><li><p>where that waste goes</p></li></ul><p><br/></p><p>Fast fashion has shifted the clothing industry from the production of built-to-last clothing, to clothing that can only be worn two to three times before starting to deteriorate. In turn, this accelerates fashion sendings, rendering trends irrelevant withing weeks. This has created the vision that clothing is disposable, usable for it's season, and then garbage following. In consequance the amount of clothing waste has vastly increased, taking up 5% of landfill space.</p>]]></description>
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