https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk Write your feedback for Student Response 2 . Please be specific. Please Include your name. en-us 2021-02-11 02:20:49 UTC 2021-04-27 12:16:03 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192207342 Fernando ]]> 2021-02-11 13:47:47 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192207342 anamariah2 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192212400 The student did a great job including one of the vocabulary words Savagery. The student didn’t have a a lot of reasoning towards their question.  Like they didn't include a lot of reasons why the question is savagery. I want the student to realize their mistake, to realize where they had trouble with answering the question.]]> 2021-02-11 13:48:50 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192212400 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192223895 brandy]]> 2021-02-11 13:51:07 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192223895 nicolew60 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192300376 The student don’t site the exact evidence and answer the question properly but he did good at the stating the question that was asked.]]> 2021-02-11 14:05:33 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192300376 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192490158 The student did  an incredible   work counting one  of the  vocabulary word "savage" ,The student didn’t have a a part of thinking towards their address. Like they didn't incorporate a part of reasons why the question is savagery. I need the student to realize their mistake, to realize where they had inconvenience with replying the question.]]> 2021-02-11 14:38:07 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192490158 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192490901 The student did a good job including one of the vocabulary words which is Savagery. I see that the student didn't cite evidence and explain instead the student just put "I think" which is not a quote/evidence. They also didn't have a lot of reasons why it was savage. Next time the student should learn from their mistake and know where they had trouble with the question. And they need to be confident about their answer.]]> 2021-02-11 14:38:15 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192490901 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192494576 The student did a good job with there response by including vocabulary we've learned like the word savage. However the student did not include a quote from the text and instead said there was evidence in the say talking about savagery.]]> 2021-02-11 14:38:52 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192494576 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192499081 The student did good in explaining(student 1). They explained the poem and provided evidence. They used the word "wild animal" which you automatically think of savagery. ]]> 2021-02-11 14:39:41 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192499081 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192502258 In the student sample 2  he or she used the right vocabulary savagely but they didn’t give a quote on what line that should savagely so the student should have went back and check the questions because now we don’t know what stanza he or she used ]]> 2021-02-11 14:40:15 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192502258 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192540946 The students did a great job using one of the vocabulary words the only problem i see is that the student didn't cite any evidence and used the words i think which is useless next time the student should learn to double check or triple check his work]]> 2021-02-11 14:46:56 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192540946 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192554386 The student's work was a really good response to the question, the problem I see with the work is that the student didn't cite evidence. Also instead of citing evidence the student used "I think" which is not the term used, you must cite the evidence to be sure and show whoever reads the response where you got the information from. - Justin Ali]]> 2021-02-11 14:49:08 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192554386 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192702123 The student did well using the word savagery, but this student didn’t use citation to back up their claim that the poem mentions savagery. Also, the student didn’t explain their evidence on how their "quote" mentions savagery. They are missing quotes, citation, and an explanation.

]]> 2021-02-11 15:14:29 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192702123 saraa99 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192739937 the student did well by mentioning that there is savagery in the poem but the student did not include the quote, citation, and explanation. ]]> 2021-02-11 15:20:48 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192739937 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192742183 The student did a good job on including the word savagery in the response. The student needs to work on including evidence and providing more reasons why they think that way. Without the quote, they aren't able to explain why the student thought this way. ]]> 2021-02-11 15:21:11 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192742183 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192753636 The student did a good job on letting us know that the stanza was about savagery. The student needs to work on including the quote, instead of letting us know that there's savagery.]]> 2021-02-11 15:23:13 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192753636 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192762534 Student is able to restate the claim and includes the word savagery in their claim. Does not include any evidence, citation, or explanation to their response.]]> 2021-02-11 15:24:37 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192762534 byronz5 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192763796 The student did well in the matter that he was able to restate the main topic of the statement, savagery. The student needs to work on citing proper evidence with quotations and the line for which he got the quote from rather than just saying 'somewhere in the poem'.]]> 2021-02-11 15:24:50 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192763796 whitneyp13 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192764399 In the response the student stated that there was savagery detected. Although the student didn't add any citation/ evidence from the context, that would strengthen the point that there is savagery being taken place.]]> 2021-02-11 15:24:56 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192764399 eidrianm https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192764698 The student was able to use one of the vocabulary words, "savagery." But, this student was not able to provide a, citation, quote, and explanation to back up his claim.]]> 2021-02-11 15:24:59 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192764698 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192766836 The student did well in restating the question as well as including savagery in their answer. However, the student did not add any specific details from the poem that included why they were savage. As well as not explaining where in the text, included savagery.]]> 2021-02-11 15:25:22 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192766836 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192775081 The student started off right, he was on the right path. He used the word savagery and he knew that this was an example of savagery, which was very good. But he did not do the rest, he did not provide a citation, add the quote, nor explanation to back up his claim. He needs to work on remembering to include evidence and explaining his answers more thoroughly. Im sure that when he adds this to his response his grade will go up by many points. ]]> 2021-02-11 15:26:47 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192775081 joshuaf269 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192776470 The student should improve upon their response by providing us with a reason as to why they think that the poem has savagery in it, or with clear specific pieces of evidence, their response was rather unclear as they only stated that they think the poem has savagery present.]]> 2021-02-11 15:27:01 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192776470 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192777902 The student understand that there was savagery In the poem. But lacked on explaining how or which lines had it by using Quotes, evidence, or explanations. Lacked those quality's making the response weak.]]> 2021-02-11 15:27:15 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192777902 jocelync123 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192789093 The student did a good job on conveying their claim that there is savagery in one of the lines. But there is something missing, the student didn’t include the line that they claimed to be savage. I would recommend to student to insert the quote after the first sentence. For example after the first sentence write “I know this because  (insert quote). Make sure to explain why you believe savagery is in that line. ]]> 2021-02-11 15:29:05 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192789093 aryank6 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192794303 The student understood and recognized how the poem had lines of savagery but was unable to explain properly and fulfill the requirements to get a better grade as they couldn’t express/explain it well]]> 2021-02-11 15:29:56 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192794303 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192827150 2021-02-11 15:35:32 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1192827150 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193353069 In student response 1 the student didn't explain how savagery was being shown. The student did a good job analyzing the poem.]]> 2021-02-11 17:00:36 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193353069 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193407636 Student 1 should’ve been more specific and added a quote from the poem to show more detail . Student 2 should’ve also added the line they thought had savegery if these students added more information they would get more points.]]> 2021-02-11 17:09:10 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193407636 amenam https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193628325 The second student's response is letting us know that he/she sees savagery in Stanza 2. However, the student did not mention the direct evidence or citation from Stanza 2 that would let us know which part is exactly savage. They were supposed to use quoted evidence and explain in depth why savagery is shown. But overall, the student had a good start.]]> 2021-02-11 17:45:34 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193628325 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193629122 The student was able to tell us that there was evidence but they didn't tell us where or what was the evidence.]]> 2021-02-11 17:45:42 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193629122 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193629186 The student acknowledged the fact that there is indeed savagery in the stanza but, didn't explain where, what or why. They only stated that  one of the lines mentions savagery in their opinion but they should include the quotation of the exact line. After citing the sentence, they should cite where it came from and should explain what the quote demonstrates. After, explain why is it savagery and not civil. Be more specific so that the reader knows what you are talking about and not have to guess. Although, the student had a good start.]]> 2021-02-11 17:45:42 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193629186 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193630637 2021-02-11 17:45:57 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193630637 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193631834 The student didn't put down their evidence they mention about savagery which is good but they forgot their evidence and they didn't put a quote. ]]> 2021-02-11 17:46:09 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193631834 antwoinec https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193637100 The student got off a good start with his response and remember to include the word savagely in his response and added evidence. but the feedback i would give them is to add more detail in there response of savagely.]]> 2021-02-11 17:46:59 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193637100 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193643738 In the story there were some savagery but they didn't give us evidence]]> 2021-02-11 17:48:03 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193643738 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193645539 The student who wrote student response two needs to add more details and include a quote from the poem with citing. Also, their explanation is not subjective, they shouldn't be telling us their opinion, but rather telling us why the quote supports the idea that there is savagery being shown. I also think that the student could've picked a better sentence starter,  such as "In the poem 'Picture of Childhood' by Yevgeny Yevtushenko, savagery is shown."

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The response is off to a good start and using the vocabulary savage is a good as well as showing how the poem mentions ideas of it. However I would tell the student that you first need to cite the specific evidence from the text and the stanza and line in quotation marks so we know which quote you got your view of savagery from. Your explanation lacks elaborate and specific details in which part of the poem demonstrates savagery. You stated that somewhere it shows savagery but where and how exactly does it show savagery maybe incorporate the definition of savagery and how it relates to what you read. Perhaps make an inference of what is going on in the poem and how it exhibits your claim of savagery and actually answer the question which you failed to do in your response. As well as give reasoning to how what you read illustrates not being civil but acting like a wild animal. I would also tell them to look at the teachers model for help and ideas. 

]]> 2021-02-11 17:56:37 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193696151 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193743882 Mohammad Mustafa

]]> 2021-02-11 18:04:50 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1193743882 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1194376025 Student two didn’t show the piece of evidence that shows  where savage is shown . In addition the student starting point wasn’t good and the student didn’t show any evidence from the poem to represent his /her claim.]]> 2021-02-11 20:01:06 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1194376025 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1194501192 The student did well on showing us that the poem did have a example of savagery.The student didnt elaborate on what line it showed savagery or why it was savagery.]]> 2021-02-11 20:32:20 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1194501192 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1199542456 Student 2 started off a little rocky because did not say what line it is or nothing .Also she didn't give enough reason on why  the poem shows savagery and did not quote evidence  as well]]> 2021-02-13 17:10:57 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1199542456 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1209914358 The students did a good job because they was giving us a lot of background info and details so we can understand and also has vocabulary words that we can learn.- Alicia]]> 2021-02-17 06:58:12 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1209914358 mohinis3 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1217767975
It started great at the beginning but the student should use the actual quote from the poem and state it in your response, the citations and explanations]]> 2021-02-19 03:55:59 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1217767975 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1220927332 Missing citations and needed more clarity. Good claim but needs to be backed up.]]> 2021-02-20 03:56:46 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1220927332 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1222219769 The student did good on knowing that there’s savagery in the stanza but what the student needs to do is cite the evidence where specifically it shows savagery and explain why its savage - Jason dudnauth]]> 2021-02-21 00:02:59 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1222219769 https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1229975870 The student did well in identifying if the poem had an example that is considered savage but they need to be more speciic and put actual details from the poem that contains savegery, to support what they are trying to prove. ]]> 2021-02-23 06:53:22 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1229975870 angelyni https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1236553351 The student did a really good job, they were able to identify savagery and incorporate that into their response. Although they didn't include a quote or citation which would have helped build a stronger response and providing evidence to  prove their point.

]]> 2021-02-24 14:43:56 UTC https://padlet.com/wmitten/lj3q93t6hwysvsyk/wish/1236553351