https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3 Copy and paste ONE (two max) example(s) of using ETHOS in your persuasive letter. I will respond to you by tomorrow before class with feedback! en-us 2019-02-25 18:01:07 UTC 2019-02-28 01:38:19 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474048 Kids walking to and from school are highly susceptible to the weather. But in the Lincoln Public Schools Snow Day Policy you say “Calling a snow day is probably not as critical a decision as the ones we make about instruction and budgets.” Are children's lives really less important than instruction or the budget? 

***Seth, you have a very strong tone in this letter! I am excited to see the product you create! Instead of saying, "You say," I would change it to something a little less up front and personal. Also, consider changing "really less important" to wording that is a little more intense and emotional. Let me know if you need assistance with this! Also, I wasn't sure if you were thinking about adding in a part where without students, the budget and instruction automatically irrelevant. This might b e a good place for it!***]]> 2019-02-26 17:01:59 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474048 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474051 "My name is Tyler Schumacher... looking to explore a degree in Sports Management at an exemplar university"
***Tyler, this sentence is short and sweet! Consider finding an alternative word for "exemplar". This word feels a little out of place. Consider using thesaurus.com for more ideas on word choice. Let me know your thoughts!***]]> 2019-02-26 17:01:59 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474051 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474345 I want people to have justice and feel safe to be out and don’t have to worry about the things that might happen. There are many things that happen in the news and some of them are really crazy. It would be devastating to see if my families and friends get into that situation. If they do I want to know how to help them and what to do to help them. I don’t want to see my relatives get their life ruined because of a mistake that the judges made and the law made. 

***Pa, this is an excellent use of the third strategy for ethos! It is upfront, sincere, and demonstrates your desire to advocate for those around you. You are establishing your good character! Your second to last sentence is pure! I would love to see you take a chance at improving your word choice in this letter. For example, consider changing "ruined", "crazy", "worry", and "help". Also, consider being more specific in terms of what kinds of relatives and so on. Let me know if you need help with this!***]]> 2019-02-26 17:02:29 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474345 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474389 My name is Gabriella Silva. I am a Junior at Lincoln High School and will be graduating in 2020. I love Lincoln Public School, it gives students so many opportunities and experiences. Lincoln High was actually my first contact with an American high school and I am really happy to be part of this big family. On the beginning of this semester, I realized that I really like Math and that I could use that to pursue a career related to that subject, and that is the reason why I want to become a Software Engineer. I also care very much about healthiness and that is the reason why I am writing to express my thoughts about the lunch program at school. My preoccupation about healthy food is a reflection of what my parents always thought me and also what I learned in health class and biology, which is that eating healthy food is important because it is something that gets inside the human body and that could have good effects or bad effects depending on what is being ingested."

***Gabi, this piece of ethos is powerful and intense! You present a well-rounded thought of your journey. Is your letter about improving lunch programs at LHS? If so, I would omit the part where you talk about wanting to be a software engineer (THIS IS A AWESOME THOUGH! I did not know that!) The reason I would omit this section is because it doesn't really synch with your topic. This is a great overall use of ethos! Well said! Let me know if you need more assistance with this or another piece of ethos in your letter.***]]> 2019-02-26 17:02:32 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474389 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474420 I don't have any ethos yet, but I will be using my own situations to help prove my point.
***Great plan of attack, Alonzo! Let me know if you need assistance with this in the near future.***]]> 2019-02-26 17:02:36 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474420 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474424 My name is Marina Joseph and I am a junior at Lincoln High school. LPS has been a part of my life for as long as I could remember. I moved to Nebraska in 2008 where I attended Roper Elementary school. I came into Roper surrounded around tons of people that spoke Arabic as their first or second language. Which was the exact same thing that I noticed at Lakeview elementary school, park elementary school and now Lincoln high school..  
***Marina, you have so much experience when it comes to this topic, and I am so excited to see the product you create for this letter! This is a great example of true ethos. I would omit the sentence in this post. The reason is because that sentence is "telling" the audience about your experience; however, in the next several sentences you "show" the audience your true experience. I would also consider combining the 3rd and 4th sentence for more concision (will we talk more concision next week!). The only piece this ethos is missing is the lesson you learned. You discuss observing that many students around you were speaking Arabic; however, there aren't any conclusions/observations/reflections make about this experience. Add that part, and it is complete! Let me know if you need any assistance with this!***]]> 2019-02-26 17:02:36 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474424 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474456 My name is Yulia and come from Ukraine, Odessa. I am doing my exchange year in the US and live in Lincoln, NE. I am a junior at Lincoln High School. Life and culture is different from my home country and I noticed one big difference that has attracted my attention. It is the maternity leave conditions. First, I heard about it from my host mother and after the research I found out that ...
***Julia, you are providing a lot of insight into this discussion, and I am excited to see the amount of "amazingness" you create! The only item I would suggest changing is how you mention "I noticed one big difference....it is maternity leave." It is a bit too choppy without any cohesiveness and connection. Consider switching when you mention this discussion with your host mother and maternity leave. Introduce this idea of maternity leave with more of a narrative approach to make it more flowy. Let me know if you need assistance with this!***]]> 2019-02-26 17:02:40 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474456 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474538 I am writing to express my feelings about the gospel of Jesus, why we should go out into the world and tell them about the good news of Jesus Christ. 
When I was awaken by God from the darkness around me I felt the love of God flowing through me with the most peaceful feeling I have ever felt. All the anxiety, pain, stress, worries, doubts, and feeling of unlikeness fade away.

***Say, I am really looking forward to reading this product you are creating! Your second mini paragraph here is powerful and intense with word choice and emotions. It is brilliant! However, I am missing more of the "here's what I've been through, here's where I'm at now, and here's what I learned." By doing this, it will show your entire reflection and journey with God. The more rounded you can sound, the better! Also, is there a more eloquent, story-like way of introducing your first paragraph? Let me know your thoughts, and we can work more on this!***]]> 2019-02-26 17:02:50 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474538 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474590 my intentions on writing to you is to continue the conversation on repealing capital punishment. I have grown up and proceed to love my State, and over the past years I, like many of my peers, have become more and more aware of the turmoils that grows surrounding the Capital Punishment debate. As a community, the death penalty is below our standards of living “The Good Life” that we stand so close by. 
****Nyayien, this is a very strong use of ethos in your letter. You have strong words that stand on their own but aren't overdone. You demonstrate your love for the state of Nebraska, and you have a tone that is very conversational and not demanding. The last sentence is absolutely killer and original! The only items I would consider changing is "continue the conversation". My thoughts are to change it to "continuing a dialogue about repealing the death penalty in our state". Using dialogue is a bit more unique that conversation. Also, I would specify the population of "peers". Do you mean teenagers? LHS students? A certain political group/agenda in mind? Clarify who you are grouping with, and it will be much clearer. Let me know your thoughts!***

]]> 2019-02-26 17:02:54 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474590 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474748 My experience with this crucial topic is my parents were actually part of this when they started their journey into the US. They would tell me that they had to pay thousands of dollars just to have a better life. They would often get beaten or threatened if they didn’t pay upfront. Their way of living and becoming successful and put to so many obstacles. 
I am 17 years old and come from a family hard working, unique heredity, and someone who takes “no” as an answer. I am someone who is hardworking, someone who approaches with a passion and pushes themselves no matter what obstacles are in front. My experience with this crucial topic is my parents were actually part of this when they started their journey into the US.

***Ashley, this use of ethos is very powerful and upfront. Your vulnerability is amazing! The only item I would change would be taking out the phrasing the "tells" more than "shows". For example, instead of saying, "My experience with this crucial topic is..." Phrasing the sentence as such sounds too much like a speech. Also, I would strongly encourage you to improve your word choice just a little bit more. For example, considering change "hardworking", "pushes themselves", and "someone who doesn't take no for an answer". The more original and unique you can be the better! This would be a perfect place to incorporate pathos, as well. Let me know your thoughts and if you need more assistance!***]]> 2019-02-26 17:03:11 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474748 https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474860 The way that I have experienced being transgender varies vastly from the way in which my transgender friends and acquaintances have experienced their own personal gender identities, but this does not mean we do not deserve the resources to medically transition.

***Elliot, I am greatly looking forward to reading the product you produce in the end. This sentence is crafted in a way that shows the importance of the individual and the community. I think this set of sentences is missing an extra element at the end of "medically transition". Consider adding, "but this does not mean we do not individually deserve the resources to medically transition in a way that makes us feel whole and authentically ourselves." You can definitely switch up the wording to fit the tone of the letter; however, I think if you truly show that transitioning is unique for each individual but should be offered to the extent that person may personally need to feel complete. Let me know your thoughts! We can definitely work on the phrasing in class together, as well.***]]> 2019-02-26 17:03:23 UTC https://padlet.com/mpribnow/li7ds981e7j3/wish/335474860