Narrative Essay Brainstorm: The Outsiders by Michelle Cearley https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3 Post ONE comment about what needs to be included in the draft in order to have an appropriate context with the novel and meet the rubric requirements. en-us 2014-10-07 18:23:21 UTC 2014-10-08 17:34:04 UTC hello@padlet.com lauren kelly kellyl10 https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504538 i think that you should include very descriptive details about what Randy was thinking during the " killing"

]]> 2014-10-07 19:37:16 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504538 Jeffery Johnson https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504593 The paper should include lots of detail about Pony trying to hurt Bob, and It was all in self defence

]]> 2014-10-07 19:37:40 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504593 Estefani Ramirez https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504652 I think we should add more about the characters and the scene there

 in.

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:07 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504652 Rishi Nair https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504655 I think that the draft needs to include lots of symbolism to fit in with the other parts of the book.

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:07 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504655 Rishik Barrenkala https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504657 the paper should include discriptive sentences

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:08 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504657 Bailey Gunter https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504658 I think that we should add a lot more of the chareacters  emotions to make the scenes more interesting

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:08 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504658 SHINIGAMI WOLF IS BETTER THAN YOUR GRIMM REAPER! MWAHAHAHAHAAA https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504659 It's kinda a pet peeve but... when he says 'They are just East-side..." IT NEEDS TO BE THEY'RE NOT THEY ARE! ARRGH! WHY??? T_T

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:08 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504659 Andes Alvarado https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504661 I think we should add alot of randys emotion and confusion after bobs death

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:09 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504661 Sophie McNeal https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504670 I don't think that this writer should include that "I'm in a social club with David, Bob, and three other Socs." I think that this should flow into the text and not just come out with the facts.

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:14 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504670 Trey Roark  https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504682 I think that there should be some descriptive sentences and they shouldn't all be generic. #No generic

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:22 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504682 Candice Baldridge https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504684 I think the paper should include lots of detail

about Randy's emotion

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:22 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504684 Alric Fernandes https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504699 I didn't like the Opening sentence because in just was a sudden rush

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:26 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504699 Sam Woodhouse https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504730 I think this paper will need lots of detail and dialogue

for anyone to get all 4's

 

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:43 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504730 mallory white https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504751 we should iclude more dialoge and emotion

]]> 2014-10-07 19:38:56 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504751 chloe mahone  https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504876 the writer should include good dialog and not have choppy sentences 

]]> 2014-10-07 19:40:03 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36504876 Anominous https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505028 The first half of the paper was way too good for it to be ruined by rushing:( :(

 

]]> 2014-10-07 19:41:06 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505028 Bailey Aldredge https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505048 2014-10-07 19:41:14 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505048 Bailey https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505111 It should deffinetly have alot more emotions and be more realistic

 

]]> 2014-10-07 19:41:34 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505111 Angel Williams https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505225 I think that the writer should be more desriptive.  Add more verbs and adjectives

]]> 2014-10-07 19:42:22 UTC https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505225 Some gu https://padlet.com/user_1412638330/lebaxr81c7t3/wish/36505426 I  agree with Sam

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