https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt 5th Period en-us 2017-05-11 14:33:24 UTC 2025-11-16 13:43:13 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171299717 In essay one the student uses an high standard vocabulary as well as the rhetorical device imagery. She helps the reader depict a actual image of the store. ]]> 2017-05-11 16:08:39 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171299717 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171300047 Having a good essay could possibly get you accepted into Ivy League schools that have acceptance rates ranging from 13.96% to 4.69%. ]]> 2017-05-11 16:09:44 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171300047 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171300632  Very discriptive of surroundings and feelings. Ex: "arms flailing and chubby legs fluttering" ]]> 2017-05-11 16:11:51 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171300632 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171300691 The Essay is Well written,very descriptive, it also uses extensive vocabulary. The essays are able to tell a story about an experience in their life.]]> 2017-05-11 16:12:01 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171300691 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171300843 The essays connect an event to a larger picture such as how certain traits they possessed were improved by an event.]]> 2017-05-11 16:12:28 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171300843 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171301015 Each of the essays use very descriptive language, like the first paragraphs usually set the scene of the story. The story is written like the writer is talking to the reader.]]> 2017-05-11 16:13:04 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171301015 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306001 The essays uses descriptive imagery and high-leveled definitions. Each description provides alot of detail to understand about the story.]]> 2017-05-11 16:29:38 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306001 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306016 I like how they pick a very basic topic and expand on it ]]> 2017-05-11 16:29:41 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306016 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306330 In article 2 Altenburg writes his story using direction to illustrate a sense of direction of his home .]]> 2017-05-11 16:30:50 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306330 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306468 Each essay is VERY descriptive. Each writer successfully was able to stretch out a simple action and turn it into very specific detail. Also in each essay they told something that they learned from this experience of theirs, and how it effects their life.]]> 2017-05-11 16:31:21 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306468 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306470 the essays are written as narrative stories with overly detailed descriptions. show don't tell. there is a lot of imagery, so the reader actually feels and sees in their head what the writer is saying. ]]> 2017-05-11 16:31:21 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306470 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306509 Advanced writing/word choice 
Very descriptive and specific when explaining 
Tells about a deeper meaning ]]> 2017-05-11 16:31:32 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306509 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306586 They are using strong words (diction) and everything flows together they are not all over the place ]]> 2017-05-11 16:31:47 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306586 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306935 2017-05-11 16:32:50 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306935 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306968 2017-05-11 16:32:56 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306968 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306992 The first writing turned a simple everyday activity in to insite in an adventure. It has structure but is more detailed  narrative. They tend to focus on how their feeling in the moment. The third essay is my favorite because I can relate in a way ]]> 2017-05-11 16:33:01 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171306992 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171307035 Uses advanced diction
Well Structured 
Written descriptively 

The experiences he was comparing when he was running from the symphony compared to his heartbeat to the imagery he was using to have the image of his home town and his surroundings as he was running at night
The last dealt with his experiences of having a very unstable relationship with his mom and his experiences that made his story very relateable to those who have dealt with the same experiences ]]> 2017-05-11 16:33:07 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171307035 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171307916 The 1st one is more descriptive about her surroundings and how she felt towards them, the second one is talking about his run and how it made him feel, but it doesn't seem as descriptive as the 1st one. ]]> 2017-05-11 16:35:44 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171307916 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171308275 All 3 were very well written but the first one caught my attention more because of how detailed it is. ]]> 2017-05-11 16:36:57 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171308275 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171308319 2017-05-11 16:37:08 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171308319 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171308538 Elevated Language 
Imagery ]]> 2017-05-11 16:38:00 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171308538 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171309500 Students who have academic achievements and participated in extracurricular activities have a greater chance of getting into college. ]]> 2017-05-11 16:41:01 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171309500 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171309750 In article 3 Kenworthy writes his life story including the reality of summiting college admissions. He describes his college essay writing skills and the steps it took to get there , instead of including stating a strategy and not explaining . He also ends on a positive note expressing the lesson he learned .]]> 2017-05-11 16:41:48 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171309750 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171310478 The essays were all very descriptive they catch the reader's attention by using mostly emotions. They focused on a specific time in their lives that was important to them ]]> 2017-05-11 16:44:10 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171310478 https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171310512 Article 3 is more personal and emotional ]]> 2017-05-11 16:44:16 UTC https://padlet.com/tnhruby/l93vau5idxrt/wish/171310512