WRITING HOOK by Nurhan Çökmez

fbatuhan66 — 2021-02-19 06:13:02 UTC

(BATUHAN DOĞAN)

fbatuhan66 — 2021-02-19 06:16:22 UTC

Do you think alone traveling is dangerous, don't you? We learn new things while alone traveling. There is nobody beside. You learn everything yourself. Maybe alone traveling is dangerous but

value for experience

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travlling alone

Good introductory structure I like it

(TOLGA MEŞE)

2021-02-19 06:18:58 UTC

"If you want to learn, you have to travel." - Mark Twain Do you travel alone?

I think ıf you want to learn, you have to travel alone and doing alone travel is great.

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Good hook but where is your topic description sentnce?
thesis statment is sufficient

Çağrı İhsan Kayapınar

cagrihsankayapinar — 2021-02-19 06:19:08 UTC

Why Travelling alone is Great? Do you travel solo? What do you like about it? And if not, would ever want to try? do people light the fire of freedom by traveling alone?
Traveling alone relaxes a person from getting out of the comfort zone. You free yourself. It's good to get away from home. So it's good to travel alone.

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Good hook but too many questions. Change the third and fourth into a statement.
It's a good idea to travel alone.

Nazim Osmanov

2021-02-19 06:25:19 UTC

Sometimes he wants to travel alone with the thought of not being able to find a companion, and sometimes to get away from the people around you for a moment. In my opinion, traveling alone is a good thing. We can discover something new. I alone support travel.

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Where is your hook?
Who is he?

Miraç DAĞ

mrcdg23 — 2021-02-19 06:33:56 UTC

Kristin Addis is a traveler who travels alone. She said ''Firstly, it makes me know myself. It showed me that, I am a brave person, that I have problem-solving skills, and that I am much more social than I thought but this is nothing special to me. Everybody can try and see this.'' I absolutely agree with them!

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Good hook but state the topic and then write your thesis statement where you summarize your opinion and idea.

Oğuzhan BOZKURT

asiloguzhan1071 — 2021-02-19 06:35:29 UTC

TRAVEL ALONE
"Life is either a daring adventure or nothing!" said Helen Keller. This is true because life isn’t too long and we can’t wait for someone to travel the world. In my opinion, people should travel alone because the person can spend more time on himself and a person can spend less money. One reason that you can only do what you want. If you go travel alone, You can listen to music, you can travel faster, you can meet new people, so you will be happy. You should travel alone. Maybe your life can change.

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Great hook!
In the middle part state your topic and finally state your thesis which is your pinion. This is just an introductory paragraph.

Solo Travel(Adem Furkan)

duridu456 — 2021-02-19 06:39:12 UTC

Why traveling alone is a great idea.
''If you want to learn you have to travel alone.'' said Mark Twain. You can travel faster, more economically, and enjoy more when traveling alone, without being tied to one thing.

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Great hook and thesis statemetn but you need some exytasentences leading to the thesis statement. You have to state the topic before writing your thesis.

M.Gökberk ŞAHAN

mrcdg23 — 2021-02-19 06:39:29 UTC

Have you any thoughts about go travel alone? I think alone travel is a good idea because if people be alone probably usually find think opportunity. Also, there is a sentence said about this topic ' lonely is not shared. if lonely is shared. alone cannot be alone' these words are written by joe beck. So alone travel can seem dangerous but it is very useful.

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travelling alone (skip go)
travelling alone
if people are alone they usually have the opportunity to think
loneliness cannot be shared
. alone ( capital letter). Travelling alone can seem...

Cengizhan KILIÇ

cengizhanfurkan0106 — 2021-02-19 06:42:06 UTC

Why traveling alone is a great idea? Or why a lot of people are traveling alone?
A lot of people are choosing alone travel because if you travel alone you gain many advantages. For example, if you alone travel you pay a little money and you can go wherever you want. You can do whatever you want. A lot of people know this knowledge so they are traveling alone.
As a result, if you are traveling alone you are happy.

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Good hook!
travelling alone
little money ( skip a )
skip knowledge

TOLGA MEŞE

2021-02-19 06:49:06 UTC

Are you a student? If you student, do you use ınternet? Internet access is limited nowadays but I think, ınternet access shouldn`t be limited for students because students should able arrive everything in ınternet for knowledge.

2021-02-19 06:50:10 UTC

The Best Teacher (Adem Furkan)

duridu456 — 2021-02-19 06:59:36 UTC

Does a child learn from their parents first in life?
“Raising solid children is easier than fixing broken people,” said Frederick Douglass. Our parents teach us the basics of eating, speaking, and being moral.
our parents are our first and best teachers in our lives.

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GREAT HOOK AND TOPIC LEAD IN.
BUT CONCLUDE THE PARAGRAPH WİTH A THESİS STATEMENT WHERE YOU STATE YOUR OPİION ABOUT THE TOPIC.

Oğuzhan BOZKURT

mrcdg23 — 2021-02-19 07:01:19 UTC

SÜLEYMAN RAMAZANOV

2021-02-19 07:04:13 UTC

Our parents are a hero to us. Do you think they are a teacher? Yes they are. But they teach us life, they teach us how to be in life

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(BATUHAN DOĞAN)

fbatuhan66 — 2021-02-19 07:04:41 UTC

Are families the best teachers? Do people think family education is necessary? If people don't have a family. Are people uneducated? Children do what they see from their parents but if you don't have the family you will learn by living. This is more important than anything. In my opinion families are the best teachers.

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THE HOOK SHOULD BE 1-2 SENTENCES. Change the third sentence into a statement.
The last sentence contains your opinion that's right but do NOT start with "In my opinion, ..." ok?