a little blurry

Flare on the tiles

A center light 

Glow of the light 

Film

Off-center 

Interesting subject

Leading lines going down towards the brickwork, interesting composition

Comes across as a little flat 

A lot of black, not enough contrast 

Blur is not ideal 

Two people are not in focus  

like the texture on the walls

Eye catching shoes

Like "weird" lighting 

Shows more depth, can see each stairs going down

Love the crocs 

Reminds of line of boots art

Light coming from next room is well-done

Nice contrast

Blacks are very rich

Shows a little bit of stairs going down, which is good details

Gives off cool tones

like the different shadows in the middle 

Wish we could see the top 

Slight tilt to the camera

Adds to chaos to the photo

Slabs are rectilinear 

Don’t like how you can’t read anything on the gravestone

Might like it more if it was cropped 

Looks like it was already cropped

Black glossy grave is cool

a bit too much totally black space 

Contrast is great 

Interesting to make church look so evil- intent 

Dot at the top

Gargoyles on the sides 

Like the building cutting into it

Little bit of light a lot of darkness- we like that 

Feels like an inverse photo

we like that’s it’s grimy

Window into a basement

Person is in a lot of basements

“I can like smell this”

Very sensory 

Really like the black surrounding window adds to creepy vibe 

it’s pretty

Evokes summer 

No things in the river 

Sunset vs scary buildings

Headlights are very cool

Irony of headlights being the less jarring light 

Sunset on railing is pretty

Cinematic

Instagram- vibes

Strong sense of perspective, extreme foreground and background 

Lovely photo 

looks like acorn

Looks like Puerto Rico towers

Very bright and dry, tans 

Feels blow out

Angle is kind of weird, a little bit sideways 

We don’t encounter this structure often 

Wish it had more dramatic edits (transformative vs descriptive)

Like the moss, it is mossy

it’s pretty funky

Lot of ‘oohs’

Looks like algae

Looks like a little creature that lights up 

Reds add depth

Blues pop out 

Look more like amoebas than flowers

It’s giving Petri dish

Mysterious vibe

it’s really long, cropped

Unique crop bc it’s vertical 

A sense of discovery 

Three different shades of blue are good

Dividing up the different colored waters 

Better maybe if they didn’t crop it 

Light tips on the top of the rocks 

Takes away things visually with extreme crop

Very bright in the crack

Very blownout, could tone down light 

Almost no black in photo- rare

seagull in the sky

Likes the center

Two people as focal point makes it better

A lot of colors towards the right 

Could possibly crop out other people 

Like the shapes of the clouds+ shadows, very dramatic 

Clumpy grass is cool

Chaotic photo of something usually serene 

Like distance between two girls and crowd

"that is so fire"

There is depth, everything seems layered 

Spotlight on the bird 

"He is the main character"

Like the texture and leaves on the ground

Different colors add the light

Feels like a scrapbook, reminds of chicka chicka boom boom

Looks like fire on top of trees, super cool

Like how the bird is framed 

Very human- like, looks like person in a bird suit without arms 

like the dog 

Shades and texture 

Cool that there are scribbles everywhere 

Painting in the drawing which is meta and cool

Couch and windows have a vanishing point, impressive 

We can see the lines, not hidden, lines are bold

Clouds are good 

Blanket pattern is very pretty 

Lot of character 

Title is great 

Balcony is great

hand details are unique 

Cool perspective 

Not very many pieces of art in 0.5 perspective 

Expression in figures faces is dynamic 

Cool that glasses are down enough to see the eyes

The back walls perspective isn’t quite right

Porch is stacked on top of logs

Where is second leg? Hidden under arm?

Second person is great with a personality 

It’s giving odyssey 

Book 3, heifer with cows 

Feels like anecdote from larger story

“Moo-ving”

Unique

Fantasy fairy tale tropes 

Wants to be longer

Needs more context

Political story

Pacing in ending is a bit rushed, wish it was more expanded

Significance of eight, possible irony with prosperity 

Narrative voice needs more control

Shock value

Emancipation ran rampant does not make sense 

“I like the violence to it”

Impaling vibe 

Very crisp snow

Shallow depth of field

Colors pop

Whimsical 

Evokes funny& violent undertones

don’t like that the entire background is blurry

Good character for the portrait 

Transition for background to goggles could be improved

The background doesn’t add anything or take anything away

If it wasn’t blurred it would take attention away from him 

Contrasting colors on him 

captures motion 

Looks like still from a movie 

Other hand in the fridge to steady himself is very funny 

Vein are popping out of hand 

The title is great

Colors match throughout 

There must be a great story 

don’t understand take me home motif

Like enjambment

Could space out stanzas to give some space

Edits: Use of commas makes sense, capitalize an I 

Build up of feeling 

Only two sentences 

Too good to be true theme  

Is candy-gram one word? 

Go somewhere idyllic- no thorns can pierce you 

love the title

Bin save that stuff, stuff is not being saved 

Composition could be improved 

Hazy light in top center, cool bc melancholic photo with trash

Trash leads up to the light 

“It’s giving gross” 

Like that irony trash cans say that trash is going somewhere, but there’s nowhere for them to go 

Trash has been there a while 

row of lights is cool

Somebody walking with a flashlight

Like that it’s grimy 

“Ghost hunting vibe”

Blurry 

It’s mysterious, he’s not looking at you 

On his eye level 

hugging or tackling each other 

“Look like they are kissing”

War vs love 

Making an yin yang shape

Makes a t shape 

“It’s giving a kind of hug”

Line of black cats fur is crisp 

High contrast between cat and wall

“They become one cat through violence and love” 

love that he’s angry 

Can imagine the other cats face 

Story with other photo 

Scratches from negative

matter/matter wordplay

A lot of repetition, adds to flow of poem 

Meta, ideas are changed when written down

Directly addressing reader

Open poem to anybody

Like that ‘they’ is undefined- the haterz

Theme is good, overthinking

edits: Get rid of first two stanzas, and end doesn’t it matter 

internal rhymes are great in first stanza

Symbolism of flower is a bit confusing 

Possible delete first two stanzas 

Skirt forced- gender/ alive, motif confusion

Grounds best friend in physical reality

Best friend/enemy/ world- same thing metaphor for loss of naiveté

I dare not destroy- formal

Natural vs. unnatural 

Memories