Prelims Example B by https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9 en-us 2021-02-25 13:47:43 UTC 2022-06-03 10:13:06 UTC hello@padlet.com Really clear and specific thesis from a vague question, giving them a clear entry https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039365 2022-06-03 10:10:11 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039365 there is a lot of good context about Joyce which proves they know a lot https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039390 2022-06-03 10:10:14 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039390 they mention a lot about paralysis in intro but don't follow it up https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039659 2022-06-03 10:10:35 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039659 Signposted very clearly, you expect things to be said and then they are https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039705 2022-06-03 10:10:40 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039705 references the question on representation of urban life specifically whilst forming a clear argument https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039766 2022-06-03 10:10:46 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210039766 referencing Dublin and city a lot which shows an engagement with the city https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210040022 2022-06-03 10:11:10 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210040022 the point about paralytic interpretation is not (yet) developed in the following argument, nor is made directly relevant to the prompt https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210040187 2022-06-03 10:11:28 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210040187 the thesis is very clear, appears at the end of the paragraph and is well signposted https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210040705 2022-06-03 10:12:19 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210040705 Opening quotation allows them to build an interesting thesis that connects the idea of paralysis to 'urban life' in the question https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210040726 2022-06-03 10:12:21 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210040726 Brought in theory smoothly without getting too bogged down https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210041235 2022-06-03 10:13:06 UTC https://padlet.com/michaelmayo3/l26udz7gr4o9xgs9/wish/2210041235