https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2 Leave me a comment. en-us 2017-06-22 15:36:35 UTC 2018-03-28 14:55:16 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Xmastree.png 23etedesco https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/236981706 One thing that I really liked about your piece is how you ended your conclusion. I liked this because it made me feel that I should let more people know about this problem and go out and do something to help stop climate change. - Lizz]]> 2018-03-01 15:52:05 UTC https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/236981706 23etedesco https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/236985899 A second thing that I was really impressed with was your warrants. Even though they were a little short they were really powerful and understanding. ]]> 2018-03-01 15:57:41 UTC https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/236985899 23etedesco https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/236988526 In the future I suggest that you work on varrieing your word choice. Otherwise i really enjoyed reading your piece. ]]> 2018-03-01 16:00:44 UTC https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/236988526 23ggerminder https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/237527055 Hi, I feel you did a very good job with this piece! I enjoyed how you added a bit of humor at the end towards your sister. Since this was a more serious story since you hurt yourself, but saying " I still despise my sister" I got a laugh out of it. I also enjoyed how you didn't leave any plot holes. The story flowed nicely and made sense. In the future, I suggest to show and not tell. During this story I feel you flat out told the reader hat happened instead of describing it. For exmaple, you said "I see blades of grass flying up" you could say something like "grass sprang out of the ground, and up past my shoes." Overall, you did a very good job I would just suggest being more descriptive in your actions, and emotions]]> 2018-03-02 17:58:37 UTC https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/237527055 23dmathew https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/246929232 One thing you did good was that you used a a lot of compositional risks and made the magazoine more interesting. ONe oder ting u reallly did well was that you used gud word choice to sound more sophistcated. On thing u need to impruve on is your ordur of events, its kinda confusing.]]> 2018-03-28 14:48:02 UTC https://padlet.com/23mmartoccia/padlet2/wish/246929232