https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 14:16:09 UTC 2026-02-03 16:34:47 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f970.png 28rsharlein https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1796651468 I really like how you wrote your about me in general. You had good word choice and a positive attitude. You seem like a very nice person! Your writing also had character and kept me captivated, it wasn’t flat or boring at all. I also think that how you added quotes into your writing was really cool. They were relevant, not just thrown in at random. They added another level to your writing, especially with how you really worked them into your piece. A small suggestion I have is that maybe you should go back in and change the spacing a little so it looks better. But that’s the only thing I found, the words are great! Nice job.]]> 2021-10-06 14:15:35 UTC https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1796651468 28klepkowski https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1796841804 I loved how you added quotes to your writing. I feel like I know more about you from them. I also loved how you pursue your dream and joined the drama club. This tells me that you are a really determined person. One suggestion that I have is to not list your likes. Explain why you like them so much.Overall I loved your writing piece! Good job!]]> 2021-10-06 15:04:59 UTC https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1796841804 28dlameira https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1800077650 This was great to read, but I did notice some grammar mistakes. Maybe you could read it over and correct some of the mistakes. Other that that this is very entertaining!]]> 2021-10-07 14:50:42 UTC https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1800077650 28aholm https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1923643507 I really liked how you described the trail at the beginning of your memoir. When you said, “Strong wind blowing,leaves falling like a wave.” It really gave me a detailed picture on what the trail was like. I also liked the way that you described your panic attack at the end. It was incredibly descriptive and I felt as if I were having a panic attack too. However, one piece of improvement that I can recommend is putting quotation marks around what your family members were saying. I’m still a little confused on what your inner thoughts were and what your dialogue was.]]> 2021-12-01 19:31:01 UTC https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1923643507 28jdadlaney https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1926104080 1 star is your setting at the beggining. The way you described the leaves,the air and the tents made me feel like I was there with you. Another star is the inner thoughts you added. I really like when you wrote “Is it over i thought is this how its gonna end for us.” I really felt tension and it made me wonder what will happen next. A suggestion for you is when you said “All 3 of us went into the big tent” then you started talking about your big and little cousin. I felt kind of lost because then there were 5 of you in the tent. Overall I loved your memoir!]]> 2021-12-02 21:13:23 UTC https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/1926104080 28dlameira https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/2156726654 Hi Bestay! I truly believe that you did amazing on your piece! I really loved how you elaborated and added inner thoughts throughout the whole story. Your ending was also very unique and kept me thinking and wanting more. One wish I can offer you is to go back and check for grammar mistakes. There was one where in the middle of your sentence you indented, and right after that there were un Italicized inner thoughts. Other than that small issue, your piece was amazing and addicting! Keep up the good work bestay! 🤪🤠🧋🖤✨🧸🙂✌️]]> 2022-04-25 15:01:24 UTC https://padlet.com/28jjohn/kn9n222yec7a7q6h/wish/2156726654