https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp Rewrite the 1st sentence of the passage, changing all of the negative constructions to positive ones.  What effect does it have on the tone? Share your sentence on the padlet and be able to discuss the effect.  en-us 2016-12-12 13:51:12 UTC 2025-12-30 20:59:33 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Ornamenttree.png rbush2 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/143113580 This new wording creates a more inclusive tone for the different levels of the ocean: from the shallowest to the deepest, like a family. ]]> 2016-12-12 13:59:35 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/143113580 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147142956 The water droplets in the ocean, including the deepest part of the abyss, know and respond to the mysterious forces that create the tide.

The new wording gives the effect of a clear and formal response of how the water responding to the creation of the tide is positive. ]]> 2017-01-13 19:49:35 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147142956 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147143936 "Every drop of water works together, from the deepest abyss, to form the forces of the tide. 

The negative tone makes the tide seem invincible because the negative words make subjects seem weak. ]]> 2017-01-13 19:53:51 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147143936 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147143952 "The numerous water droplets from the mysterious depths to the  calm of the surface collectively react to the mighty forces of nature that create the tide."

]]> 2017-01-13 19:53:54 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147143952 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147143971 The abundant amount of water in the ocean, inclusive of the deepest parts of the abyss, that clearly know and respond to the mysterious forces that create the tide.
the new wording makes the abbyss part of the ocean and it makes the water in ocean seem welcoming. ]]> 2017-01-13 19:53:58 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147143971 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147144284 In the deepest part of the abyss, the drop of water know and respond to the mysterious forces in the ocean that creates the tide. 

The tone makes the tide and the ocean not have a negative perspective. ]]> 2017-01-13 19:55:18 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147144284 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147144425 The many drops of water in the ocean, including the ones in the deepest parts of the abyss, know how to accurately respond to the mysterious forces that have created the tide. 

Provides a clear term on how the drops of water can accurately respond to the creation of a tide without having negative ideas or words.]]> 2017-01-13 19:55:53 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147144425 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147144659 The amount of drops in the water in the ocean, especially the one in the deepest parts of the abyss, know and respond to the mysterious forces that create the tide. 

The new tone shows appreciation to the tide without the negative effects.

]]> 2017-01-13 19:57:07 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147144659 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147145083 Every molecule of water in the ocean responds to the powerful and mysterious forces of the tide, from the deepest abyss to the gentle surface waves.

It provides a more clear term for how powerful the forces of the tide are without adding negative words or ideas.]]> 2017-01-13 19:58:39 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147145083 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147145479 The huge mass of water in the ocean works together to create one massive body that forms to make a tide.  Tides are the single most strongest forces in the sea. These tides are so strong that they can be felt more than on hundred fathoms bellow the surface.

The new tone gives it more of an informative. ]]> 2017-01-13 20:00:36 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147145479 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147145523 The vast amounts of water in the ocean, including the deepest parts of the abyss, know and respond to the mysterious forces that create the tide.

More clearly illustrates how it seems the ocean responds to even the smallest drop of water.

]]> 2017-01-13 20:00:48 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147145523 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147145537 "Every part of the ocean from east to west is moved by the tides and its power"

The way its written shows the deepness and importance of water. How strong and forceful it is, Like God or a Storm]]> 2017-01-13 20:00:50 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147145537 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147146121 The grand tide touches every corner of the ocean. The force  of the tide exceeds all others created. 

The new tone provides praise for the tide while not downplaying anything else. ]]> 2017-01-13 20:03:25 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147146121 https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147146153 The countless amount of drops of water in the ocean, including the deepest parts of the abyss, know how to respond to the mysterious forces that create the tide.


The new tone shows respect and reverence towards the tide]]> 2017-01-13 20:03:37 UTC https://padlet.com/rbush2/kdlzn1n3depp/wish/147146153