PEER FEEDBACK XI IPA D by Nicholas Sioputra https://padlet.com/5801nicholas/k7fhnencrnrmpfdd Text Analysis - Argumentative Paragraph Writing en-us 2021-09-02 03:59:23 UTC 2026-01-09 07:44:49 UTC hello@padlet.com Reviewer: 17 / Nicholas Sioputra | Writer: 18 / Patricia Daniella 5801nicholas https://padlet.com/5801nicholas/k7fhnencrnrmpfdd/wish/1729549694 1. Missing points that the text doesn't provide / points that need to be revised: 
  1. The text doesn’t provide a more solid argument why students need to be vaccinated to attend school. I think the text could be better if it provided a more solid argument to support it.
  2. There are some ineffective words that are used in text, such as the “won’t get long covid.” I personally think that sentence needs to be rephrased.
  3. The text could be better if it provided a source where it got the data from. For example “Quoting from Kompas.com, 1 out of 8 people in Indonesia who are infected by COVID-19 are children.”
  4. There are some typo in the text that needs to fixed

2. Some good points of the text: 
  1. Less solid arguments aside, I think the arguments that are in this text are already enough to explain why students need the vaccine to attend school.
  2. The text already used the correct format of argumentative text that consists of introduction, main argument, and a conclusion.
  3. Even though the text doesn’t provide any source where it got the data from, the facts that are stated in the text are true and reliable.
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