Observations about the AP-Style Synthesis Essay by Larisa Owechko https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n Made with a quick smile en-us 2020-12-01 17:00:48 UTC 2020-12-01 20:32:56 UTC hello@padlet.com placeholder lowechko3 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977509812 2020-12-01 20:17:41 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977509812 placeholder lowechko3 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977510097 2020-12-01 20:17:45 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977510097 placeholder lowechko3 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977510232 2020-12-01 20:17:47 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977510232 placeholder lowechko3 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977510370 2020-12-01 20:17:49 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977510370 placeholder lowechko3 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977510505 2020-12-01 20:17:52 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977510505 group 2 gfurdelle03 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977531555 - 5 paragraphs
- 3 body paragraphs 
- restates the claim in the conclusion. ]]> 2020-12-01 20:23:34 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977531555 Group 1 gwyneth_holcomb https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977532077
  • Its a serious and formal tone
  • The student is treating this as if they are an expert on this topic
  • They only use words like our once. 
  • They use lots of numbers and dates to provide information, especially in the second paragraph.
  • They have long sentences 
  • Most are compound or complex sentences
  • They employ the use of commas primarily. 
  • They don’t really, they approach this topic with a formal tone
  • Only use lesser formal language in places to reference the fact of certain history. 
  • They also use the phrase some people, to refer to others. 

    • ]]>     2020-12-01 20:23:43 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977532077     Group 6 cfisher041 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977533113
  • Begins by rephrasing prompt slightly
  • Finishes intro paragraph with one-sentence claim
  • 5 paragraphs
  • Organized as intro, body, body, body, conclusion
  • Intro and conclusion short and concise
  • Body paragraphs much longer, 6-9 sentences
  • Ends with a restatement of claim
  • Very short conclusion, 3 sentences

    • ]]>     2020-12-01 20:24:01 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977533113     Group 1 brodriguez731 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977533415 1. Introduction - What is the opening line like? How do they start?
    -The writer begins with statements regarding growth from textbooks to cell phones
    -Writer sets the stage with some background information about the advancements in technology, production, and population
    -Claim is clearly stated and easy to identify

    2. Paragraphs - How many are there? How did they organize them? How long are the paragraphs? 
    -There are five paragraphs
    -There is an introduction, two body paragraphs, a conclusion, and a follow up paragraph after the conclusion
    -The body paragraphs are much longer, they contain most of the evidence and sources
    -Most paragraphs are at least six or seven sentences long(body paragraphs are longer)


    3. Conclusion - How does the essay end?
    -Writer restates the claim 
    -A follow up paragraph is added after conclusion
    -Shares some of the writers own opinions 


    ]]>     2020-12-01 20:24:05 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977533415     Group 2 rcampbell161 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977533795 They use four of the sources, but reference some of them multiple times.
    They integrate the source material by stating parts of the material within their point and then signifying which source that idea comes from after. 


    ]]>     2020-12-01 20:24:11 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977533795     Group 6 scoursey17 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977533816 throughout the essay the writer occasionally switched into 1st person and incorporated several "our's", "we's" and "I's".]]> 2020-12-01 20:24:12 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977533816 Group 1 swenger22 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534021 They answer the prompt really well. And the essay was boring, but that is due to the prompt. ]]> 2020-12-01 20:24:14 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534021 Group 9 wcarlson74 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534345 They claim in the introduction that libraries could become more prevalent but they never tell us why and in the conclusion they just say that they could maybe stay prevalent. Overall the conclusion and body paragraphs prove a different point than the introduction.]]> 2020-12-01 20:24:20 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534345 Group 6 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534450 - Uses evidence from sources: A, B, C, D.
    -Source C is most frequently used.
    -Most citations were paraphrases
    -6 total citations in their essay]]>     2020-12-01 20:24:22 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534450     Group 1 jaspromonte88 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534677
  • All body paragraphs have at least 2 pieces of textual evidence
  • Throughout they used 4 different sources
    • Used an interview, a calendar, an article, and a chart 
  • They only summarized or paraphrased the quotes into their body paragraphs 
  • The textual evidence was worded in their own words and the author made it flow nicely into their own commentary
  • Their commentary was added typically after the evidence 
  • This analysis allows readers to figure out the meaning behind the textual evidence 
  • It backed up what the evidence was saying
  • Their commentary connected how the textual evidence related back to their claim



    • ]]>     2020-12-01 20:24:25 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534677     Group 6 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534949 They didn't put quotation marks around quotes
    Very clear, very easy to read and understand -- handwriting was also very neat]]>     2020-12-01 20:24:29 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977534949     Group 9 opierson14 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977535091 The writer used source C the most, and cited their source after every sentence that had specific information. They frequently gave background info before integrating the source. ]]> 2020-12-01 20:24:31 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977535091 group 4 tclaussensadeh85 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977535403 written with a formal tone, uses first person in the introduction to show the writers opinion]]> 2020-12-01 20:24:36 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977535403 Group 9 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977536344 They used mostly simple sentences with varying lengths]]> 2020-12-01 20:24:52 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977536344 Group 8 twilson93 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977536967 1. Introduction - What is the opening line like? How do they start?
    The first sentences don’t mention the actual topic. The latter half of the introduction is good background information for the reader.

    2. Paragraphs - How many are there? How did they organize them? How long are the paragraphs? 
    Five paragraphs that seem to be in order of sources. They get longer as the essay goes, roughly 7 or 8 sentences long each.

    3. Conclusion - How does the essay end?
    Brief restatement of the thesis, followed with the evidence they gave during the essay.


    ]]>     2020-12-01 20:25:02 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977536967     Group 2 nrhein99 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977537227
  • The student writer has a relaxed yet still factual tone.
  • They use simple vocabulary and repetitive points
  • This makes the essay easier to understand.
  • It almost feels as though you are having a conversation with someone.
    • ]]>     2020-12-01 20:25:06 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977537227     group 4 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977537931 The print was very clear and easy to read. 


    ]]>     2020-12-01 20:25:15 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977537931     Group 3 sortizmclendon88 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977538356 The writer paraphrased the information from the sources used (they used 4). They integrated the information smoothly into their sentences and included analysis simply but thoughtfully to explain their arguement. ]]> 2020-12-01 20:25:22 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977538356 Group 3 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977539501 --There is an intro, three body paragraphs, and a conclusion. 
    --The opening line talks about how people can observe how fast certain rates grow in different areas and this led to talking about technology. The writer believes libraries should adapt to today's times involving technology. 
    --The conclusion is short and states how libraries should stay relevant to society. ]]>     2020-12-01 20:25:39 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977539501     Group 3 ssussman21 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977539806 The writer had a formal tone throughout the essay. A lot of compound sentences. Sentences had a variety of lengths. ]]> 2020-12-01 20:25:42 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977539806 Group 3 astevens97 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977539944 The author did a great job creating a claim that could be easily backed by the sources provided.

    ]]>     2020-12-01 20:25:45 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977539944     Group 9 cwomack95 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977540593 INTRO
    *Starts off with the general idea of the topic.
    *doesn't start off with abrupt (keeps it basic).
    *The general idea pulls in the reader without overwhelming them.
    *Topic introduced well.
    Paragraphs
    *There are 5 paragraphs.
    *The body paragraphs are significantly larger than the intro and conclusion.
    *Paragraphs don't directly support the claim.
    Conclusion
    *The conclusion is short.
    *Strong conclusion but it does not connect to the claim and evidence.


    ]]>     2020-12-01 20:25:54 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977540593     group 8 dmattacola15 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977541723 the writer directly cites the sources when using evidence, often putting which source they used in parenthesis. for example, the writer will put (source C) at the end of a sentence in which they used evidence from source c to support their claim. ]]> 2020-12-01 20:26:13 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977541723 Group 7 rimthurn83 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977542106 Conclusion repeats the thesis at the beginning and then lists the subclaims (reasons). The essay isn't finished and ends mid-sentence.]]> 2020-12-01 20:26:20 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977542106 8 group ngardere12 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977542352 -the child sounds Like a librarian. Kinda monotone, not really into it. I get little passion due to the lack of any adjectives.

    -the sentences are usually 2 and a half lines. Plenty of comas to extend their lengths, kinda feels like a list.]]>     2020-12-01 20:26:23 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977542352     Group 2 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977545397 the author took the prompt and well integrated it with their writing. Their claim was well written. ]]> 2020-12-01 20:27:10 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977545397 Group 4 schristy90 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977548366 They used 4 sources, citing them 6 times total, with source C being cited three times. They generally followed their evidence with analysis. Their analysis took up more room than the evidence.]]> 2020-12-01 20:27:57 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977548366 Group 4 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977548697 1. Introduction - What is the opening line like? How do they start?
    They start with a strong claim that brings the reader into the essay with lots of questions. 
    2. Paragraphs - How many are there? How did they organize them? How long are the paragraphs? 
    There are around 5 paragraphs within the essay. They slowly bring evidence to each thing they claim in their thesis. 
    3. Conclusion - How does the essay end?
    They close their essay by stating their thesis slightly different then before, the by stating their opinion they can round out their point. 
    ]]>     2020-12-01 20:28:02 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977548697     Group 7 rimthurn83 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977549876 - they used 4 sources

    -They paraphrased information within their argument (brought it in as specific evidence)

    - commentary generally is both before and after a piece of evidence (sometimes only one or the other, but it isn’t consistent)

    - commentary is elaboration/more detailed versions of subclaims]]>     2020-12-01 20:28:21 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977549876     8 group ngardere12 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977553142 the placement of verbs such as "lastly" give the illusion of finality despite the actual placement, thus giving the reader a sense of ease, and makes continuations far more accessible, and whilst I may be looking into this esseys specific wording far too much, i need to put something here. ]]> 2020-12-01 20:29:10 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977553142 how was your day https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977553932 2020-12-01 20:29:23 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977553932 Group 7 rimthurn83 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977563063
  • varied and interesting sentence structures
  • there doesn’t seem to be a standard sentence length
  • uses unusual sentence structures
    • lists things after colons
    • rhetorical questions
    • uses some longer sentences, some really short and simples ones

    • ]]>     2020-12-01 20:31:50 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977563063     Group 7 rimthurn83 https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977566338
  • reads kind of like a narrative
    • each paragraph generally starts in the past, and then makes its way to eventually projecting the future

    • ]]>     2020-12-01 20:32:40 UTC https://padlet.com/lowechko3/k5sdvrwhr943fi9n/wish/977566338