Carta de aplicación, opción 1

Carta de Aplicación: Opción 1

- Good structure and register, and your use of language was clear and concise

- Good variety and use of tenses, especially the conditional and the preterite

-vocabulary is complex and varied

Points that need improving:

-speak in more specific terms about experience

-could make the introduction a little more formal

- speak more about skills aside from academics and perhaps some other life experiences

-look for alternatives to me encanta

Positive aspects:

- Wide vocabulary and good use of past tense

- Clear and concise outline of experience, balancing experience and attitude

- Good closing lines for the letter

Points for improving:

- Some confusion the use of the

gerundive

- Introduce what the letter is about and the job you’re applying for at the beginning before going into yourself

- A few generalisations like “other companies” which could be more specific in a job letter

*Brilliant cover letter, very informative of past experiences and your skills both from school and from your job.

*Good variety of tenses, especially Present Perfect and Conditional

*Your vocabulary is sophisticated and varied

Points that need improving:

*Your structure and the layout of your cover letter need to be more formal

*In some places you have missed accents

*On occasion you swapped pronouns e.g. 'me' instead of 'mi'-just needs a proofread

Well done!!

Positive aspects

Well-structured letter, gets to the point of fulfilling the specification

Good use of different tenses and varied vocabulary

Areas for improvement

Don’t capitalise English or Spanish

Couple of little errors - ‘idioma’ and ‘vivé durante tres meses’

Well done :) really good letter of application

Positive aspects:

- Good structure of the essay (although need a ‘:’ after apreciados señores)

- Varied use of vocabulary

- Good content of the application with a lot of examples

Points for improving:

- Interview – entrevista

-  Some sentence structures like “también hablo…” rather than hablo también

- Need to talk more about the requirements of the job – sticking to what they outlined in the job outline

Good grammar, some complex phrases used

Persuasive and has a good format

Areas for improvement:

“como estudiante de alemán durante cinco años” could be worded better

Other past tenses may have worked better in some places instead of the preterite in the paragraph about experience.

- Good, logical structure

- Each point made was backed up with specific evidence of your previous experiences

- Good Points for improving:

- At times confusion between the preterite and imperfect tense, e.g. you used "me trajo" after speaking about your experience of growing up (a continuous action) as opposed to a single event

- Sometimes overuse of object pronouns, e.g. using "hablar el francés..." the "el" is not necessary here

- Good structure with good mentioning of both experience and skills relevant for the job.

- Great variety of tenses, especially conditional, past perfect and imperfect.

- Good varied and complex vocab used.

Points to improve:

- Remember articles: soy un hablante.

- Find another way to say asi que.

The addition is brackets may not be appropriate for a job application.

Great work :)

Good structure with well defined separate paragraphs

Very persuasive

Good use of complex tenses and vocab

Areas for improvement:

Remember pronoun order: me ha ensañado

I would say ‘viviendo en Costa Rica por tres años’ (not durante)

- nice and clear structure

- Examples that clearly show your skills and strengths

- Vocabulary is complex

Point for improving:

- Which "Departemento de Ingles"

- on occasions you used the wrong preposition (para/durante; con)

- usage of mi/me

- Missing " : " after Apreciados Señores

Good range of tenses
Excellent use of examples to support your application
Largely accurate grammar
You have explained very well why you want the job and what makes you the best person for it

To improve:
Address the recipient in the opening of your letter
Be careful of spelling – appreder
Some slightly repetitive seeming structures (like …hablo 3 idiomas. Hablo…)

- clear structure

- varied use of vocabulary

- good use of examples presenting your skills including appropriate tenses

Points for improving:

-could use alternative word for 'regularmente'

-could include personal attributes that would ensure you were the right candidate for the job - e.g organised

Positive aspects:

-It’s written very positively.

-Shows your confidence.

-Has related work experience.

-Shows good academic achievements

-Appropriate tenses

Points that need improving:

-Could’ve done with a lot less facts and figure, you don’t really need to say the years for each qualification you did.

-At the end you’re just writing a list of your skills, but you need to evidence this!

-At the start you said“ As you can see from my CV” then you shouldn’t repeat what your CV says, you should expand on it and explain what you gained from the course and how this is relevant to the Job.

-Improve layout. Maybe separate academic achievements from work experience.

-Be precise! Don’t say, “I think”

-You show that you have some abilities required for the job

-You talked about your past experience

-You look motivated

Negative aspects:

-You could have developed a bit more

-The header should have more information, and you should put your full name at the end

-The body is kind of a big block, maybe you should let more space

Good variety of tenses

A clear structure informing the reader of skills and experiences

Varied use of alternative voacbulary

Points for improvement

Include more acadmeic skills as well as work experience

Could use more formal language

A very good cover letter! Well done!

- Wide range of vocabulary

-Clear routine of experience, relating directly to the job

- Good dressing of the recipient at the opening of your letter

-Logical structuring, good flow

-Little to no mistakes

Points for improving:

-Could use more future tense

- You could have included what you hope to gain/learn from working with them

- Really good display of skills and experience suitable for the job

- range of tenses employed

- good emphasis of language and communication skills

To improve:

- Employ a slightly more formal register, particularly in the first line

- emphasis more your personal qualities - what are you like as a person? eg hard working, dedicated etc

- Excellent detail in explaining qualifications & relevant experience

- Good use of tenses

- Good use of formal address

- overall a really well written and convincing job letter!

Things to improve: (not much!)

- explain a little more about yourself eg your character and traits

- explain why you are interested in that specific job role/University - what would the experience do for you?