https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity Meaningful feedback activity - In your group, choose some of these examples of written feedback comments. Discuss the style and usefulness of the feedback and add a comment about this where you see 'Add comment'. en-us 2022-02-17 12:54:03 UTC 2026-01-25 19:54:30 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/714925646/ed4db582d80219eaa7cf211363f842a3/ANU_Vertical_logo.jpg melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053121595 Have a look at this site about structuring paragraphs. You’ve got the ideas and information, now take the next step and organise these according to essay structure for a more clear and detailed paragraph: https://www.anu.edu.au/students/academic-skills/writing-assessment/essay-writing/write-your-essay ]]> 2022-02-17 13:03:28 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053121595 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053123122 Good]]> 2022-02-17 13:04:18 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053123122 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053129671 Can you go deeper here?]]> 2022-02-17 13:07:50 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053129671 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053130618 An introduction needs to contain a thesis statement – a sentence that contains the main argument that you will be defending in your essay. How can you rephrase some sentences in this introduction to make your thesis clear? ]]> 2022-02-17 13:08:16 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053130618 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053131128 You have made an argument and developed it with the use of evidence but your essay structure was unclear, making it hard to follow your main argument. There were some references missing and some grammatical errors. Check the essay structure and think about how you can write clearly, critically and in more detail. These are important skills that you will need in future tasks. Use the resources I have suggested to help you develop your work. ]]> 2022-02-17 13:08:30 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053131128 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053132780 Rewrite this sentence ]]> 2022-02-17 13:09:25 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053132780 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053133901 Repetition of ‘shown’ – vary your vocabulary and avoid ‘show’ – try demonstrate, illustrate, etc ]]> 2022-02-17 13:10:02 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053133901 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053134260 Explain ]]> 2022-02-17 13:10:15 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053134260 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053134696 The next step is to have confidence in your judgement and give a critical assessment of the research. Are there limits? What is the significance? Try to go beyond stating the fact and discuss the ramifications of the fact ]]> 2022-02-17 13:10:27 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053134696 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053135771 You have not conformed to essay conventions. Your introduction focusses too much on vague, generalised statements and definitions. Your argument is not clear in each paragraph and you have not included a conclusion. ]]> 2022-02-17 13:11:04 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053135771 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053140785 Your paragraphs have a good foundation in evidence – keep this up and extend your research even further in your future essays. ]]> 2022-02-17 13:13:49 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053140785 melindadrummond https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053142429 ?]]> 2022-02-17 13:14:44 UTC https://padlet.com/melindadrummond/julcw2vc9l7myity/wish/2053142429