7th grade writing by Amanda Birck https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky Leave me feedback, or not, I honestly don’t care. en-us 2022-01-31 17:41:32 UTC 2022-03-10 18:06:19 UTC hello@padlet.com Persuasive Essay https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2023424645 I really liked how you had strong words which helped create a strong argument. Your essay was persuasive and strong. You were very creative while writing. I enjoyed reading it. -Meg Coppock-Huegel ]]> 2022-02-01 14:27:30 UTC https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2023424645 Haidyn👸 Haidyn_B https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2023437542 1st Star:
I really like how you used a very wonderful descrword in this phrase from your writing piece:
“Students rush to gobble down their lunches in school.”
‘Gobble’ is such a nice word to use to draw the readers in into continuing with your story. 

2nd Star:
In your 2nd paragraph you make a very great point on why children need this extra time to eat lunch:
“Lunch should be a social time, a time for eating, and a time where someone can make new friends” 
This is a very good point made and put across because in the school day we only ever get to see our friends after and before school. 

1st Wish:
I wish your counter argument you would have made a stringer and more clear point.
“Longer lunches will cut back on the waste factor exponentially, and cause students to get a boost from the uproar of nutrients.” 
Although i liked your word choice, this wasn’t the best counterargument that i think you cauldron have written. 

Bye!,
Haidyn👸
]]> 2022-02-01 14:32:46 UTC https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2023437542 2 stars and a wish https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088367844 hi gurl! I just saw your slideshow for your product, and 1st off that was a really good idea! I wish they sold these in real life lol, but none the less it was a good idea :’) 
Im gonna just get started with the stars and wish 🥲

Star #1 💫
I really liked how your slide presentation was organized! I think you did a good job explaining what the product was and etc. it was clear and easy to understand for the most part!! (p.s. I love the gif you added in at the end of all the food!) also there was no part when I was reading your presentation that I felt confused or what not :’)

Star #2 💫
I think the way you explained what your fridge does is useful and also toward the end (slide 5) was a very useful slide because, you provided answers to a lot of questions that you probably already had, so by adding in this slide that explains literally everything it helps a lot!

Wish 🌝
My wish is that maybe instead of jumping right into the product and the slide itself, that you add a hook or a slide in the beginning right after the title that might hook the viewer, I think if you jump right into it it might not be as affective to the reader!

Overall, you slide was so cool! It was very good and it was wonderful!! Good job 👏🏼👏🏼
Byeeee :)))
- maddie

]]> 2022-03-10 13:55:08 UTC https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088367844 Bonjour 🗼 Haidyn_B https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088431224 Hi, i really liked the Find It Fridge. I’m probably being stupid, but is the Find It Fridge an organizer FOR YOUR fridge or is it actually a full on fridge? You were very clear on every aspect of your slideshow, including were you want to sell it and how much you were offering. Anyways, i really enjoyed your slideshow and would have enjoyed it more if i had seen your presentation. 

Your 💀 inside bff,
Haidyn ]]> 2022-03-10 14:23:34 UTC https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088431224 Buy My Product! 27mcoppockhuegel https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088466931 Hello Amanda! I loved your slideshow! It was totally relatable about how the food spoils quickly. I loved your product and the idea! I thought you had very creative ways of wording the slides! My only wish is that you had a picture of the prototype or if you did a virtual prototype, a link to the prototype. I would have loved to see it!-Meg]]> 2022-03-10 14:38:40 UTC https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088466931 Buy my Product 27mbickford https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088540142 Hello I just had taken a glance at your slideshow for the Find It Fridge product and here are my 2 stars and a wish. My first star is I liked the main ideas on how they fridge can help sort out types of food you have on how spoiled they are so your able to eat the food before it goes to waste without wasting any money. I also liked how you made it affordable price for a product I will be using quite often. My wish is that you weren’t so repetitive with the functions it has wording it a little different on each slide but other then that it was great. - From Max ]]> 2022-03-10 15:11:53 UTC https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088540142 BUY MY PRODUCT 🗿=0 27bcardenas https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088792409 hi manda. First off, thank you for creating this awesome product. 10/10, would use, thank you have a nice day. Star 1= my first star was the format of your slideshow, because it was easy to read and it was a aesthetically pleasing to look at. Star 2= My second star was the visuals in your presentation that helped show how it worked, how it would look, and stuff like that. I have no wishes :)))))))))))

-brian c. ]]> 2022-03-10 17:14:30 UTC https://padlet.com/27abirck/jotnzw5eib615zky/wish/2088792409