https://padlet.com/26jbogdan/jmdy4q35175x Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 16:40:26 UTC 2019-12-10 16:44:37 UTC hello@padlet.com https://www.creativefabrica.com/wp-content/uploads/2019/02/Monogram-JB-Logo-Design-by-Greenlines-Studios-580x387.jpg 26bnatarenosantiago https://padlet.com/26jbogdan/jmdy4q35175x/wish/420850619 One thing that was good in your narrative is that you gave a good hook. The hook in " Skate Park" is good and it would anybody at your story. Another thing that you did great in your story was that you put a lot emotions for how Jack Hedge feels. The only thing that you could do better is to add a bit more detail in the settings like on how the skate park looks like but overall, it is a good story. ]]> 2019-12-06 16:35:47 UTC https://padlet.com/26jbogdan/jmdy4q35175x/wish/420850619 26nbeversluis https://padlet.com/26jbogdan/jmdy4q35175x/wish/422267945 When you wrote, “Oh god I thought to myself, I’m done for.” it helped me completely visualize how Jack was feeling. Another good part of your story was your description. The detail in your story kept me hooked and attached. The way the detail was crafted and added into your story was amazing. When you said, “I was instantly jealous when I noticed his bike. It had to be fresh out of the box. It’s chrome metal was gleaming in the sunlight and it’s slick black wheels were spotless. It didn’t have a scratch on it. A few moments later the kid seemed to realize me sitting alone by the halfpipe.” it kept me hooked and kept the flow of the story very strong and bold. Although your story is almost perfected, I do have one critique. In your next story, you may want to describe the speaker tags more. You might want to add body language after the character speaks, or describe how the character is acting. Overall great story, Justin! Great job!]]> 2019-12-10 16:44:17 UTC https://padlet.com/26jbogdan/jmdy4q35175x/wish/422267945