Draft Treatment Feedback by Faye Curry

Mary Thompson

fayecurry5 — 2013-12-19 14:41:40 UTC

WWW: Found a basic narrative that relates to the song.

Use of technical editing such as green screen.

EBI: Needs more planning - May be too much going on.

Bryony:-

fayecurry5 — 2013-12-19 14:43:29 UTC

www: I like how you've decided to use star motifs. The party theme is very conventional for the pop genre.

EBI - I like the idea of a birthday party but not the Christmas part, since it's not a Christmas song

Leah Gathergood

fayecurry5 — 2013-12-19 14:45:05 UTC

www: have included star motifs and a theme which fits the pop genre

ebi: A start, middle and end structure as it reads like a list of conventions

Stacey

fayecurry5 — 2013-12-19 14:46:57 UTC

Lots of conventions being used which all link closely to pop genre. However I would like to know more about the locations or backgrounds that will appear on the green screen.

How frequently will there be scene changes as at the moment is reads like you're just as a part or in front of a screen - what will be on it?

Simran

fayecurry5 — 2013-12-19 14:49:16 UTC

WWW: I like the ideas of matching the song lyrics to the video, it's a good narrative!

EBI: Are you going to have numerous people in your dance routine? If so it could be hard to make sure they all dance in time with each other?

Amy

fayecurry5 — 2013-12-19 14:58:37 UTC

www: follows lots of conventions linked to the pop music genre.

ebi: be more specific about what backgrounds on the green screen you will use.

beth

fayecurry5 — 2013-12-19 15:00:34 UTC

www - all your ideas are conventional of pop genres

and will look good when producing.

ebi - Add more structure and detail. e.g. scene changes.