https://padlet.com/27gredling/j4ij4npv508i8spg Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 14:22:07 UTC 2025-11-09 23:17:48 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Apple.png 27ahagopian https://padlet.com/27gredling/j4ij4npv508i8spg/wish/1066952584 I overall loved your story like when you were describing how hot the sand was or when you said its like being in a hot dessert. Another thing I like was when you also described the beach smell and said there were seagulls. I loved your story but it felt like you could have described how the beach looked or could have done a lot more inner thoughts. ]]> 2021-01-08 13:50:13 UTC https://padlet.com/27gredling/j4ij4npv508i8spg/wish/1066952584 27ndarmarajah https://padlet.com/27gredling/j4ij4npv508i8spg/wish/1074890118 I really like your piece. The lead was great. It got me so intriged wondering what the smell was. There was not even one though in my mind wondering if I should keep reading. I was just so focused on your piece. Another thing is you had great details to help me picture what was going on. I was able to picture it almost like a movie. Even though you have great details i think there could have been more. What did the beach look like as in the waves the sand maybe what you swimsuit looked like. But overall it was great!]]> 2021-01-11 16:35:26 UTC https://padlet.com/27gredling/j4ij4npv508i8spg/wish/1074890118 27npilgrim https://padlet.com/27gredling/j4ij4npv508i8spg/wish/1612520478 Hi Gia your creative writing piece was really good my star is that I liked how you went into detail about what would happen if your tooth brush came alive.My second star is that I loved the descriptive scene you put in the log. You really did a nice job.great work. ]]> 2021-06-17 15:34:56 UTC https://padlet.com/27gredling/j4ij4npv508i8spg/wish/1612520478