https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn Place your observations here in regards to the 2016 AP free response synthesis release en-us 2016-11-02 10:53:43 UTC 2025-10-12 14:37:22 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137699565 Taylor Schott

]]> 2016-11-15 13:25:47 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137699565 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137699746 2016-11-15 13:26:17 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137699746 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700009 I noticed the last is all one paragraph ]]> 2016-11-15 13:27:00 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700009 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700256 1) I noticed that the writer had poor grammar and punctuation, that lead to confusion

2) I wonder why the writer only used two sources in the first body paragraph and only one in the 2nd. I felt like it weekend the 2nd paragraph.

3) The analysis says that English speaking countries are at a disadvantage when they limit foreign languages.

4) The writer says his/her thesis. In the body paragraph starts off by stating the thesis and then it connect it in its explanation. It was kind of confusing because she presented the opposing view in a poor manor. ]]> 2016-11-15 13:27:36 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700256 19zmp01 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700393 1) The writing was very hard to read , but they had great organization in their piece.
2) We wonder what plan he had before he wrote the piece.
3) The analysis is saying that being multilingual helps you succeed in the world today
4) It says it in a very formal and proper way and presents the topic in the beginning paragraph. Then it goes into their opinion towards the end.]]> 2016-11-15 13:28:01 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700393 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700566 I wonder if the writer had little time to write this and spent most of their time on reading. ]]> 2016-11-15 13:28:32 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700566 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700714 1) There's no paragraph where they state their point of view.  Several spelling and grammar errors.  No separate body paragraphs.  Used "I" (Which I agree of ...).  No connections between points; it's all just one big paragraph.  One of the warrants was "... because you never know."  There was also no conclusion where they restate their claim and summarize their information. They don't explain the information they take from the sources.

-Alex N., Logan D.

]]> 2016-11-15 13:29:03 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700714 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700881 I wonder if they thought this was a good paper when turning it in.]]> 2016-11-15 13:29:30 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700881 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700925 1) I noticed that the writer repeats multiple times that foreign affairs rely on knowledge of multiple languages. Though this is his/her main idea it seems redundant.

2) I wonder what this person got as a score on their writing. It has a lot of mistakes and flaws however the main idea a point comes across therefore i don't think they did horrible.

3) The analysis says that knowledge of foreign languages is important as it is useful in foreign affairs. If this person did poorly, I'd assume it would be due to the fact that they answered what everone else said. ]]> 2016-11-15 13:29:37 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700925 19gkb01 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700960 2016-11-15 13:29:43 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137700960 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137701138 1) The author uses minimal sources to back up his rebuttals (2 sources, 1 per argument.)]]> 2016-11-15 13:30:08 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137701138 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137701638 2016-11-15 13:31:29 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137701638 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137701911 I noticed that the last essay doesn't include a reliable thesis. It also has terrible punctuation and grammar, which makes the argument sound weak. I wonder why this essay is so short, the author could've included more details and explanation to further convince the reader.The analysis says that english speakers are at a disadvantage, but it's doesn't properly explain the claim, and evidence. The author restates the synthesis question and answers it with "yes", which very unprofessional and weak.]]> 2016-11-15 13:32:15 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137701911 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702017 They say that if you speak only 1 language you are at a disadvantage. They start by asking a question, then directly answering with a simple yes. ]]> 2016-11-15 13:32:29 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702017 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702122 The first essay was difficult to read because of the messy handwriting but when looking at the content it is very well written. The author has a strong introduction and uses a plethora of formal language and vocabulary. This essay is also separated into paragraphs unlike the last example. The author also obviously has a good understanding of the writing because they mention the tone of the pieces. I wonder]]> 2016-11-15 13:32:46 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702122 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702148 The essay had 5 paragraphs that were well written for the most part. There were some topic issues with the thesis because it focused monolingual being a disadvantage to a country versus being a disadvantage to monolingual English speakers. Their first paragraph also focused on this and I thought the evidence supported their thesis, but they did not answer the prompt. In addition, there were some spelling and grammar mistakes as well, but not too much where it overwhelmed the paper. I thought the lack of vocabulary made the essay underwhelming, and I wonder why the author did not choose to incorporate more.

-Hannah]]> 2016-11-15 13:32:50 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702148 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702218 I've noticed that this essay is shorter than all the other ones. It also doesn't use correct punctuation throughout the paper. It never really stays on one topic and it does't make sense.]]> 2016-11-15 13:33:02 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702218 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702224 2016-11-15 13:33:03 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702224 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702251 I noticed that the writer uses 2 sources per body paragraph and uses a variety of different sources. The person also explains the evidence and how it is important. Also, the writer addresses and refutes the counterargument, and uses good diction throughout the essay. I wonder why the writer uses alliteration in the essay.]]> 2016-11-15 13:33:06 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702251 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702354 The first thing I noticed is the messy handwriting. It make it very difficult to read; however, you're able to easily point out the stance of the writer. In addition, there's many words or sentences crossed out which makes me wonder if this person went back and reread what he had wrote. The way it was written was very formal.]]> 2016-11-15 13:33:25 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702354 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702364 2) Did they thoroughly analyze their sources? Did they plan how they were going to format their writing?

-Alex N., Logan D.]]> 2016-11-15 13:33:27 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702364 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702516 2016-11-15 13:33:48 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702516 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702608 2016-11-15 13:33:59 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137702608 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137703665 The author was very organized in the way they decided to write their essay. The hand writing is a bit messy, however it is not difficult to understand or read the words. The author also decided to instead of using sentences as the quotes, they deced to just use snipets which help get rid of excess writing and makes his points clear.]]> 2016-11-15 13:36:07 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137703665 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137703706 The first writing has a level of hang writing that is difficult to read, yet I do too. But even though that's the case the writer of this created a great piece of work. It's obvious what there claim was and the evidence to support that was added in precisely.

]]> 2016-11-15 13:36:11 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137703706 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137703867 This essay has a lot of grammatical errors and is hard to follow. It is also just one big block of text , I think it's just one big paragraph]]> 2016-11-15 13:36:30 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137703867 19aev01 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137703912 I wonder if the writer wasted a lot of time on reading the docs and had little time to write]]> 2016-11-15 13:36:37 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137703912 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137704133 1-  I noticed how he graphed his essay, he stated a brief explanation of the second paragraphs point when he was ending in the first paragraph, making a smooth connection.
2- Why he/she only used quotes in a way where the sentence was half formed in a custom made sentence, this does make the sentence flow smooth, but can interpret to the reader that the quote is being used out]]> 2016-11-15 13:37:07 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137704133 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137704423 I believe the first essay does have good point in it, though they are often not explained as well as they could be. The author used 3 sources, had a lengthy essay, but it was very messy, and I didn't really see their opinion formulate. There were also sentences that did not make sense to me. It was the better of all the essays, but I don't believe it deserves an 8 or 9.]]> 2016-11-15 13:37:45 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137704423 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137704623 3) Monolingual English speakers are at a disadvantage today.

-Alex N., Logan D.]]> 2016-11-15 13:38:15 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137704623 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137705293 I notice that there is very little crossed out and also that the organization of this piece is a little odd. The structure and wording of this essay makes it difficult to read and therefore, understand. I wonder if the author had had more time, would they go back and reword any unclear sentences. Although the thesis is not straightforward, I believe the main point is that those who are only fluent in a single language are at a disadvantage.]]> 2016-11-15 13:39:50 UTC https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137705293 https://padlet.com/mrnorton/2016FRsyn/wish/137705536 The writer of the last paragraph obviously didn't put much effort into their paper. It had random capital letters, incomplete sentences, and no transitions between thoughts. Its abrupt ideas made it hard to figure out the writer's stance on the topic. It also didn't have any new ideas and was just a summary of the sources. Throughout the essay there were many sentences that didn't make sense and that had poor grammar. I wonder if the writer reread their paper or understood the question being ask. 

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