notebook, pencil, crayon, small packet

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Visit Chiya Zen Temple

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how to print

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let us understand the outline of the project

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I understand the texture and the landform more clearly

The first moodboard reads as more about doors, material (wood), perhaps even windows. It's very well put together as a moodboard in itself but somehow feels less about sound and more about space.

It's great to see your cover design. The exploration between type and image is really interesting but try to aim for a higher degree of legibility. It would be great if possible to also upload your mindmap so I can understand your topic a bit more and help you to articulate its essence in the cover.

R

It's so great to see you approach a challenging subject and express/communicate it through visual art, fashion and 3d design. You've demonstrated a high level of maturity here in your approach. Really well done!

Just a couple comments:

Can we make it look more like a zine? Perhaps the arrangement of content can be more like a digital publication, rather than a website that displays information by scrolling down. Either that - or we can perhaps even consider the relationship between text and image. The powerful aspects of a zine are really that dialogue between text and image. So let's try and play with that a bit more.

In the section on Semiotics - it would be great if you could additionally use some of your own images.

Overall this is really great work. You are attempting to push the boundaries of the brief which is really great to see.

Thank you so much for your submission. You have a strong concept that is throughly explored. The Zine successfully captures your design intentions. It's great to see you expand your thinking across your own experimentation as well as through relevant industry examples. Perhaps you can be a little more playful with the format and layout - of how the work is presented. This is one of the key aspects of Zine culture. Although I understand your approach as well - given your subject nature. Great work!

Ravin

Thanks,

Ravin

The foldout book is a really lovely expression of your concept. It seems like you've really put some thought and effort into articulating your concept. I wonder - is there going to be a text element as well? Perhaps that has not been included in the documentation yet. Remember this is a Zine so we would need to see the interaction between type and image. Looking promising!

Thanks,

Raivn

What a wonderful conclusion of the unit for you. Your process and experimentation has been a delight to observe. You've demonstrated that you're capable of articulating as well as executing design concepts. It would be great now to create a print version of this Zine so you're able to tweak some of the finer considerations. Moving forward - try to be even more consistent with layout, type and hierarchy. You've clearly got incredible aptitude for editorial design. All the best!

Thanks,

Ravin