Patrick B. Google Sites Peer Feedback 2020 - 2021 by Patrick Boyle https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 13:04:39 UTC 2021-06-21 14:03:47 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f355.png 27sboland https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1066953168 Avatar of Santiago Boland
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star :I really like the start of it. It has a lot of detail .
wish : can you tell us why you chose to go down instead of up right or left.
star : i like how you go 5 100 dollar bills mad right now.

overall a great story very in detail and lot of jokes]]> 2021-01-08 13:50:23 UTC https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1066953168 The way the story was put was very cool because I love the way how you wanted to find that treasure and the way how you worked with your mother it was as if you were a pirate trying to find treasure . .i also think that you can work with descriptives and I think that you can add how the place felt what it looked like 27arajadhyx https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1067170075 -anshul.r]]> 2021-01-08 14:40:21 UTC https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1067170075 kaiden mirzwa 27kmirzwa https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1067706783 i really like your story has good detail about how you were trying to find treasure has lots of humor also detail also that minecraft background on your main page is very good]]> 2021-01-08 16:32:44 UTC https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1067706783 Bella Makras https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1074577382 I absolutely LOVE this! It’s very detailed and descriptive! And very well thought out. Quite the creative masterpiece! It’s also a very unique Piece and I don’t think I’ve ever seen something like this before! Your title is splendid and goes very well with your Piece. I also had a good laugh, AMAZING JOB PATRICK!!]]> 2021-01-11 15:42:14 UTC https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1074577382 Persuasive essay https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1503448580 Good job on your description about common occurrences that happen whilst gaming. I liked how you showed evidence of why games are good for kids.
I think that in the future for the first paragraph you should not use the same evidence for the data part of the paragraph and the reason part of the paragraph.
]]> 2021-05-07 17:48:52 UTC https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1503448580 Bella https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1617710760 Hey, Patrick! I love your creative writing piece! I like how you added a lot of detail into it. Your story is very funny! I definitely laughed a lot, you were also very smart with the ideas you had and how you planned out the story! Although, Luckily I don’t have a wish for you! I loved all your pictures and animations you put into your slideshow too. GREAT WORK! ]]> 2021-06-21 14:01:24 UTC https://padlet.com/27pboyle/ivibmxfat7ebwep8/wish/1617710760