https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 17:59:49 UTC 2021-06-17 14:53:19 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f47e.png 27alourenco https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1075035376 I like how you use the repetition for effect for example when you did clang ring clang ring i thought it helped the reader understand what you heard in that moment. 
I also liked how you used inner thought it brought out the emotions you were going through when dealing with your loss.
My wish is that when i was reading towards the end i got a little confused but overall your piece was great.]]> 2021-01-11 16:59:40 UTC https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1075035376 27jacevedo https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1502606832 I love the emotion you put into the warrant ]]> 2021-05-07 14:52:11 UTC https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1502606832 27jacevedo https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1513721098 Hi Sam! I really liked the detail you put into the essay. I could get a very clear visual of the kid playing a video game. It was as if I was in his room watching him play the game! In addition, I love the conclusion paragraph! The paragraph can really put a lot of emotion into the reader while reading it. If someone who were against video games read this, they would definitely change their mind! I honestly can’t think of a wish because this writing piece was perfect!


]]> 2021-05-11 15:02:03 UTC https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1513721098 27alourenco https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1518073491 Hey sam In your essay “games are good” I liked how you were able to find a good reason for kids to be playing video games. For example when you said the kids who play violent video games are less likely to be bullies, I thought that made it a valid reason to play violent video games. My next star, I liked how you talked about how kids could learn culture that they wouldn’t be able to learn outside of video games. This gave a good reason for kids to explore in the fictional world of video games. My wish is that you would include a descriptive scene in your essay i think it’s would bring a lot into the piece.]]> 2021-05-12 15:58:47 UTC https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1518073491 27alourenco https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1612430961 Hey what’s poppin don’t mind me just droppin. My first star is the character James grem, i liked him because he acted as if he was sort of the James Bond of the story. My second star is that i like dhow you were able to spread the message that you should wash your hands but also tell a story in a funny way. My wish is that I got kinda confused in the middle of the story when you were talking about Logan.]]> 2021-06-17 14:52:25 UTC https://padlet.com/27ssaraiva/iuvbxzej0nxop2tm/wish/1612430961