VIVID LANGUAGE IN A NARRATIVE by pctrodel (Del Pino, Olga)

Olga Marinchenko

pctrodel — 2024-08-30 18:46:49 UTC

Original: She giving me asvice.

Rewritten: She suddenly offered an incredibly insightful piece of advice to me.

Camila Cuevas

2024-09-05 22:43:45 UTC

Original:

We also cheer each other up when we have unfinished or large projects, just like when I was crocheting a blanket for my bed, which took me four months to finish.

Rewritten:

We also cheer each other up when we have unfinished or large projects, just like when I was crocheting a granny flower blanket for my bed. It had yellow, orange, fuchsia, cherry, purple, and dark purple, like the color of grapes, and it took me four months to finish, but it felt like forever.

Astrid Coronel

2024-09-05 22:43:53 UTC

Original: As soon as you entered the premises Spanish was not spoken.

Rewritten: From the moment you walked in the classroom, Spanish was left at the door.

Anita Castro

2024-09-05 22:43:59 UTC

Original: When the day of the evaluation came, my friends and I were very nervous, the reason it was the first time we were taking that exam.

Rewritten: When the day of the evaluation came, my friends and I were very anxious, the reason it was the first time we were taking that test.

Jimena Ortega

2024-09-05 22:44:15 UTC

Original: I was afraid of not expressing myself correctly.

Rewritten: I feared that my words might fail to communicate my thoughts clearly.

Karen Lavado

2024-09-05 22:44:26 UTC

Original: Learning English has helped me in my studies and will continue to help me in my future career.

Rewritten: Mastering English has significantly enhanced my academic journey and will be a vital asset in advancing my professional career.

Adriana Millones

2024-09-05 22:44:52 UTC

Original: I've made friends

Rewritten: I've made friends from around the globe, bonding over our shared love for a British TV show

Manuel Concha

2024-09-05 22:44:54 UTC

original:"In many ways, my childhood was defined by these linguistic shifts."

rewritten: "These linguistic shifts played a central role in shaping my childhood."

Cristopher Alcántara

2024-09-05 22:45:03 UTC

thanks to my parents, I learned English without even realizing it.

Without even realizing it, I picked up English, all thanks to my parents

Fabrizzio Chávez

2024-09-05 22:45:18 UTC

Original: My earliest memories involve family conversations around the dinner table in Spanish, where I learned not only how to speak but also how to express emotions and navigate complex topics.

Rewritten:

My earliest memories include family conversations in Spanish around the dinner table, where I learned to speak, express emotions, and discuss complex topics.

Allisson Morales

2024-09-05 22:45:20 UTC

original: When the teacher congratulated me, it gave me a huge confidence boost.

Rewritten: When the teacher congratulated me, I was surprised, I hesitated before answering, but when she smiled and said, “that’s correct, well done”, the praised she gave me in front of the class gave me a confidence boost.

Nicolás Fredy Torrejón Gonzales

2024-09-05 22:45:20 UTC

original : Whenever I could, I practiced at home, outdoors and even with strangers

rewritten : Whenever the opportunity presented itself, I eagerly honed my skills whether within the familiar walls of my home, under the open sky

Maria JESUS

2024-09-05 22:45:20 UTC

Original: I remember going home, showing the test to my parents, and breaking down in tears. Through tears, I told

them that I missed my old school, my old house, and most of all, my friends. Rewritten: I remember going home, showing the test to my parents and feeling my vision blurring. My voice broke as I felt my cheeks wet with tears.

Tessy De la Cruz

2024-09-05 22:45:21 UTC

Original: I learned that this can also apply to textbooks

Rewritten: It was the moment that I realized that this knowledge can be applied in the textbooks.