The choice in language does an excellent job of catching your attention as soon as you start reading; for example, the opening quote (and others in between paragraphs) and the first paragraph opening with the word “f&*%”. The language throughout this piece of writing catches your attention because of the phrases such as: “treasure chest”, ”tunnel down there”, in place of the actual word. 

I really enjoyed reading the first three paragraphs because it is a real life issue that is still a present issue. I did not like the direction that she took with the final paragraph because it talks about sex as if it is something that is bound to happen whether you like it or not.

The line that i thought was well written and descriptive was:

“In the locker room after swim class, you huddle up with a dozen other girls underneath the hair dryer—a rusted udder whose nipples blow tornadoes of hot air at your scalp”

I go more into details of my opinion on that line in my Discussion #2 submission.

The choice of language, details, and characters used to narrate this story was perfect. The life lesson that i took away from this writing is everyone has probably been the “loser” or the person that everyone “singles out”, but the spotlight can quickly change when new drama arises. 

The author catches the reader's attention with it taking place during a game of Football while giving a real life example of bullying. It gives well written examples of the different feelings and thoughts that the Quarterback and Receiver has running through their minds.

In my opinion the line that was really well written was: 

“He has a headache, sure, and some double-vision when he turns his head in a certain way, but at least he’s not that other kid, who is a total loser.”

It is an example of how fast things can change and how quick kids can “get over” and move on in situations like this story. 

 

The main character and the narration is from the author’s first hand experiences. He also makes it a point to mention who he was with and encountered. His mom, sister, friends, people in the community, and communication with Matt Hale were characters that made up the storyline as well.

I liked that the author gave their detailed childhood memories of driving in the car with his Mom and sister. It was very descriptive in what he saw through the eyes of a child leading up to the 2000s when they were gathered around a friend's computer “trolling” Matt Hale. 

The line(s) that are very well written are:” In 2003 Matt Hale is arrested and later sentenced to 40 years in prison for soliciting the assassination of a judge. Relief passes through the community. He’s gone. It’s over.

I, too, am guilty of this line of thinking.”

The language choice that the author uses to write this informational, with details of what to expect during this surgery, in my opinion the “character” is that person that is going to have this procedure done. 

The author gives a very “cut and dry” explanation of what to expect from beginning to end in great detail. 

A line that was very well written and used an excellent comparison was:

You’ll find, too, that the crown capping your broken molar will feel fake when you bite hard together, and your skull, under your fingers when you wash your hair, feels stretched in the direction of the blow. You will wonder if there’s room, in the dark matter of your brain, for thoughts to circulate reliably or if they get hot and frantic as they squeeze too close to the point of impact.

 

The main character in this writing is herself and she gives detailed language describing how the other characters (people she encountered) judged her based on the color of her skin. 

The author catches the attention of the reader by telling her own real story that others can relate to when they have been judged by their appearances. 

In my opinions the line that was well very well written was:

“In my more generous moments, I tried to believe the locals were using anger to mask their fear of living in a dying town in a changing world.”

In my opinion the line that was really well written was: 

“In November, you ace your film studies midterm and strut back to your dorm in your new North Face jacket and Uggs, purchased with the $400 your mom sent after pawning her earrings. She wanted you to be ready for the cold.”

This line is a well written example of one of the many sacrifices that parents for their children. It is a true display of what a parent will do to give their child the things that  “everyone else has”.