Liana B.Peer Feedback 2022 - 2023 by Liana Benoit https://padlet.com/29lbenoit/hy55oh1wlv92dr1l Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 15:31:16 UTC 2026-01-18 04:43:41 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/26bd.png Lara Bugmann 29lbugmann https://padlet.com/29lbenoit/hy55oh1wlv92dr1l/wish/2355499805 One strength in your piece was all the detail you included in the beginning to really express your feelings. Another strength in your piece was your use of figurative language where you show how scared you were at first and how you were calmer after.one thing you should work on is being more specific about the fact that it’s a rollercoaster and not anything else.]]> 2022-10-25 13:58:47 UTC https://padlet.com/29lbenoit/hy55oh1wlv92dr1l/wish/2355499805 one thing I like was all of the details you added like when you said your mouth was watering. That made me paint a pitcher in my head. One other thing i liked was how you told the story it was smooth. One thing that i would work on is how long it is. I would make it longer. https://padlet.com/29lbenoit/hy55oh1wlv92dr1l/wish/2355618801 2022-10-25 15:02:03 UTC https://padlet.com/29lbenoit/hy55oh1wlv92dr1l/wish/2355618801 The star that I will give to you is that your description was amazing like when you said “i was a rocket flinging in the air ready to take off”hat was really cool.other star i will give you is that you thoughts were really personal in a way like when you said “its ok Liana s almost over can do it” and when you said “its ok Liana you can do it, open your eyes and look around”. Something i would do though is slow down some spots but other than that i loved it. 29ldankin https://padlet.com/29lbenoit/hy55oh1wlv92dr1l/wish/2356006068 2022-10-25 18:43:14 UTC https://padlet.com/29lbenoit/hy55oh1wlv92dr1l/wish/2356006068