https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1 Made with belief in my Brain Babies en-us 2021-02-26 16:16:17 UTC 2021-02-26 20:41:43 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246885508 2 points.
Responds to the prompt and chooses a side in his thesis. Only receives one point for evidence because he only used two sources and it is mainly a combination of generalizations. Doesn't achieve sophistication point.]]> 2021-02-26 19:58:56 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246885508 mcdonald_ava https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246889383 1 point

This essay, although it has a thesis statement, is all over the place. This is hard to follow and completely strays from topic. We would give this one point because it has a thesis.]]> 2021-02-26 20:00:03 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246889383 daveyemily https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246890492 1 point for thesis (responds to prompt and takes a position)
2 points for evidence/ commentary (the line of reasoning is faulty/ unclear)
total: 3 points]]> 2021-02-26 20:00:23 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246890492 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246892059 Thesis- 1 point- took a side, responded to prompt
Row B- 2 points- gives some evidence but not specific, weak LOR
Row C- 0 points- not a sophisticated argument, language, or structure, very repettitive]]> 2021-02-26 20:00:51 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246892059 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246893247 Responds to prompt, has thesis statement. Lacks sophistication and evidence. 
1 point for thesis
1 point for evidence
0 for sophistication
Overall: 2 points]]> 2021-02-26 20:01:11 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246893247 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246896151 2 points
Writer achieves the thesis point by choosing a side. Writer receives one point for their evidence and commentary because it is repetitive and the writer doesn't include many examples. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:02:04 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246896151 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246897397 3 points- provides some specific evidence but does not address enough, the whole intro was confusing and lacked structure, the intro set the tone for sophistication which this essay lacked.]]> 2021-02-26 20:02:27 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246897397 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246900426 Thesis- 1 point- clear thesis, takes a stance
Row B- Specific evidence, supports a clear LOR, clearly explains evidence
Row C- 1 point- counterclaim, rhetorical choices strengthened the argument.]]> 2021-02-26 20:03:21 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246900426 mcdonald_ava https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246902165 4 points

This has evidence and commentary, a strong thesis, and restates the thesis properly in the conclusion. We would give this a 4 because although it was clear, it lacked sophistication and analysis in the last body paragraph.]]> 2021-02-26 20:03:51 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246902165 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246902916 4 points- had a solid thesis and addressed the prompt, sophistication compared to passage C is not on the same level, did provide evidence and commentary that supported the LOR. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:04:03 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246902916 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246903520 6 points
Writer achieves thesis point because they address the prompt efficiently and effectively. The writer receives four points for his evidence because they achieve ethos through the use of well known scholars. This writer also incorporates lots of effective commentary into their writing and also receives the sophistication point because of their complex understanding of the situation. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:04:13 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246903520 daveyemily https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246905396 1 point for thesis (responds to prompt and takes position)
2 points for evidence/commentary (some evidence not specific and commentary could be improved)
total : 3

]]> 2021-02-26 20:04:46 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246905396 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246905455 Had a strong closed thesis statement. Several grammar issues and had unclear connections that connect to the thesis. 
1 point for thesis
2 points for evidence
0 for sophisitication
Overall: 3 points]]> 2021-02-26 20:04:48 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246905455 corbit_isabella https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246909372 We believe that this essay deserves to get a 3 because the evidence is weak and the author went off topic.]]> 2021-02-26 20:05:51 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246909372 mcdonald_ava https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246913546 6 points

Responds to prompt, original, specific, is very sophisticated and to the point. We would give this a 6.]]> 2021-02-26 20:07:04 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246913546 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246914029 Writer includes a strong thesis statement and connections throughout passage. Each paragraph has evidence, commentary, and analysis uniformly. Also has very specific subclaims
4 points for evidence
1 point for thesis
1 point for evidence
overall: 6 points]]> 2021-02-26 20:07:12 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246914029 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246915388 5 points- sophistication was very evident, thesis was present and took a stance, commentary and analysis followed LOR]]> 2021-02-26 20:07:35 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246915388 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246916135 -1 points
The writer does not include a thesis statement. The writer does not have any evidence or commentary and clearly doesn't achieve a sophistication point. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:07:50 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246916135 corbit_isabella https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246916512 We think this passage gets a 3 because it has a strong claim and elaborated on evidence well. It would have been more sophisticated. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:07:57 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246916512 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246917601 Thesis- 1 point- clearly responds to prompt, takes a position
Row B-4 points- Lots of specific evidence, clearly connects to LOR
Row C- 1 point- sophisticated rhetorical choices and structure, consistent, vivid]]> 2021-02-26 20:08:17 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246917601 corbit_isabella https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246919467 5 - had a strong claim and elaborated on their evidence. Used multiple sources of evidence and was sophisticated.]]> 2021-02-26 20:08:48 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246919467 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246919900 1 point- no thesis, no sophistication, intro contains quotes with no commentary, the whole essay was all over the place and didn't have LOR addressing the prompt. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:08:56 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246919900 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246920040 3 points
The writer clearly takes a side and receives the thesis point because it was very concise. The writer get two evidence points because she has a few examples but the commentary and evidence needs a lot of elaboration. The writer does not get the sophistication point because it didn't introduce/show a complex understanding of the topic. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:08:59 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246920040 corbit_isabella https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246922327 This passage gets a 1 because it does not have a thesis statement and used a quote as the entire introduction. There is no LOR.]]> 2021-02-26 20:09:39 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246922327 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246923878 Writer doesn't include a thesis statement, the body paragraphs were irrelevant to the prompt and lacked sophistication. 
0 points for thesis
0 points or evidence
0 points for sophistication
Overall: 0 points]]> 2021-02-26 20:10:05 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246923878 corbit_isabella https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246925280 This passage gets a 4 because they take a strong stand on the topic, and has a good LOR. The evidence is just not supportive and there is little commentary on how it links back. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:10:31 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246925280 daveyemily https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246926873 1 point for thesis (responds to prompt and takes a stand)
3 evidence (relates to LOR)
1 sophistication point (style is consistent and vivid)
total : 4]]> 2021-02-26 20:11:00 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246926873 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246929097 0 points
A thesis is not present in their response (even though he almost achieves it in the last paragraph). The writer doesn't have any commentary or evidence and they don't get the sophistication point because there wasn't a demonstration of a complex understanding. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:11:40 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246929097 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246930713 3 points- intro had thesis and was sophisticated but the essay contained personal experiences of the writer rather than addressing the prompt, one personal account could have been beneficial but multiple accounts were not, lacked sophistication in body but had commentary. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:12:11 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246930713 corbit_isabella https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246930933 2 - this passage had a very weak claim with basically no thesis. The passage was very short and the author fails to create a clear LOR or develop their stance well.]]> 2021-02-26 20:12:15 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246930933 mcdonald_ava https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246931333 1 point

It lacks evidence and thesis, so there is not much to analyze. Very informal and unsophisticated. We would give this a one.]]> 2021-02-26 20:12:23 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246931333 corbit_isabella https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246934682 This essay gets a 3 because it talks about general experiences and takes a good stance. Uses specific evidence but does not have a thesis statement. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:13:23 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246934682 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246935248 Writer includes a strong thesis and takes a position. There are several grammar mistakes but a present LOR connecting writers ideas. 
1 point for thesis
3 points for evidence
0 points for sophistication
overall: 4]]> 2021-02-26 20:13:32 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246935248 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246936511 2 points
A point is awarded for the thesis statement and the understanding of the topic. They also receive one point for their evidence but don't get the sophistication point. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:13:56 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246936511 daveyemily https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246937113 0 thesis (no thesis present)
0 sophistication 
1 evidence (no specifics)
total : 1]]> 2021-02-26 20:14:07 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246937113 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246940579 Thesis- 0 points- no clear thesis, didn't take a position
Row B- 0 points- no evidence leading to little commentary
Row C- 0 points- no sophistaction in rhetorical choices, does not address other arguments]]> 2021-02-26 20:15:13 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246940579 mcdonald_ava https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246940881 4 points

They would not receive a sophistication point, but they have a thesis and a clear lor. There is evidence and analysis incorporated well into the essay]]> 2021-02-26 20:15:19 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246940881 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246944327 Writer does not include a thesis statement in introduction (4th paragraph). Lacks sophistication. Has some evidence but hardly any.
1 point for thesis
0 points for evidence
1 point for evidence
Overall: 2]]> 2021-02-26 20:16:18 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246944327 mcdonald_ava https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246946829 1 point.

This lacked sophistication, evidence, analysis, or any clear line of reasoning. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:17:06 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246946829 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246947432 1 point- multiple examples but no connection between them and the prompt, no sophistication, no thesis. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:17:17 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246947432 daveyemily https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246949270 1 thesis (responds to prompt)
2 evidence (relevant, but vague)
0 sophistication]]> 2021-02-26 20:17:43 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246949270 mcdonald_ava https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246949326 2 points

There is no conclusion, clear thesis, and little evidence. Lacks sophistication, but there is somewhat of a lor.]]> 2021-02-26 20:17:44 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246949326 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246949570 3/6
1 point for thesis, 2 points for evidence/commentary (general examples but only one main subclaim) and no sophistication point (sentences don't flow, weak line of reasoning).]]> 2021-02-26 20:17:49 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246949570 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246951171 Writer doesn't include a thesis statement. There are no quotes and evidence is there but weak..."If someone..." and lacks sophistication overall. 
0 points for thesis
3 points for evidence
0 points for sophistication
Overall: 3 points

]]> 2021-02-26 20:18:16 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246951171 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246956588 Thesis- 0 points- no clear thesis
Row B- 1 point- some evidence, not very supportive to argument
Row C- 0 points- no sophisticated rhetorical language to further the argument]]> 2021-02-26 20:20:01 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246956588 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246958510 2 points- no thesis, some specific evidence but mainly commentary, there is no conclusion, follows LOR vaguely. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:20:35 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246958510 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246958963 5/6
1 point for thesis (clear closed thesis that lays it out), 3 points for evidence/commentary (provides specific examples for almost all subclaims with commentary), and 1 point for sophistication for nice style and rhetorical choices.]]> 2021-02-26 20:20:44 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246958963 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246960114 4 points
This one lacked sophistication though it used good loaded language and had a clear line of reasoning. It had a good amount of analysis and commentary that was tied in but, there was too much summary included. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:21:07 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246960114 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246961031 Thesis- 1 point- takes a side, sets up LOR
Row B- 3 points- clear sub claim and evidence, only personal evidence
Row C- 0 points- no sophistication]]> 2021-02-26 20:21:23 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246961031 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246966373 Thesis- 0 points- no clear thesis, does not take a position
Row B- 1 point- didn't relate to topic or argument
Row C- 0 points- multiple spelling errors, no rhetorical choices]]> 2021-02-26 20:23:05 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246966373 francischarlotte https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246966740 We gave this student a solid 6/6. They had a thesis statement, followed by a presise line of reasoning throughout the paragraphs. The evidence was prominet, and quotes were even used. Evidence and commentary were clear, and it had a solid sophistication throughout the piece.]]> 2021-02-26 20:23:11 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246966740 francischarlotte https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246978098 We assigned this student a 0/6. The first paragraph was spent restating the prompt and copying the quote. There was no evidence, commentary, or analysis throughout the piece, and it failed to attain to the prompt. There were major organization and gramatical errors.]]> 2021-02-26 20:27:00 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246978098 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246978753 4/6
1 point for thesis because it took a position in the end, 3 points for evidence/commentary for specific examples and even quotes that were connected, and 0 for sophistication because it was unorganized and wordy.]]> 2021-02-26 20:27:11 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246978753 https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246980123 2 points 
There was no sophistication that was included throughout. This one had one point for thesis and one point for evidence. ]]> 2021-02-26 20:27:39 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1246980123 daveyemily https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1247014070 1 thesis (responds to prompt, takes stand)
3 evidence (offers some specific evidence and relates to LOR)
1 sophistication (broad experiences)]]> 2021-02-26 20:38:49 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1247014070 daveyemily https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1247018675 1 thesis (responds to prompt and takes position)
4 evidence (evidence relates to LOR)
1 sophistication (thought is sophisticated)]]> 2021-02-26 20:40:27 UTC https://padlet.com/garnerl2/hmvvnti4kun0mag1/wish/1247018675