https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 16:44:10 UTC 2021-06-17 18:04:45 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Apple.png 27sward https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1067418962 I liked your snapshot peice "Finally a Hill Bomber" 
I like how you made the reader wait and then wait again before you actullay took off on the skate board,that really made the story much more interesting cause it felt like I was there  experiancing the same moment.
I also like how you said you were an ice stature it helped me understand how you were feeling in the moment and what you were  thinking as you tried to get on the skate board.
Finnaly if I could change one thing i would change is that you should describe your self more instead of your friend because even though she was there the story is about you. ]]> 2021-01-08 15:33:04 UTC https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1067418962 27edoran https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1075862073 I liked your snapshot piece. there was a lot of good wording and description. I really felt like I was there with you. i wish you did dicribe a little less about your friend there was a lot about your friend.]]> 2021-01-11 19:25:14 UTC https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1075862073 https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1502669667 Star- Kaylin, I liked how much you Elaborated on your body paragraphs in your essay “We Can’t Fight Biology”. It really showed the reader how much sleep teens need verses how much sleep they get. You really dug deep and persuaded the reader very well.
Star #2- Something else I loved about your paragraph is how well you really set the moment and painted that picture for your anecdotes. My favorite anecdote of your was the first one because it was very realistic and relatable, because I too feel very rushed In the morning.
Wish- As I loved your essay and it was so great, one thing I would change in your paragraph is your zinger because I would try and leave it on a higher happier note!

]]> 2021-05-07 15:05:10 UTC https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1502669667 27gcapece https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1513667084 Star #1 -Kaylin I liked how you put a lot of details in you body paragraphs I especially like how you said Blaming children for their imperfections in school is so upsetting for a child. It gave me a idea on how the students are feeling in that moment really caught my eye.

Star#2- Another thing that I liked about your paragraph is how well you described everything I really got a visual on what your pieces  was really about and the meaning to it I also loved the question that you had in your body paragraph

Wish-What I wish you can improve on is giving me a little more of a hook at the beginning of you paragraph.]]> 2021-05-11 14:51:03 UTC https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1513667084 27edoran https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1612328082
hi Kaylin. I star in it's raining cats and dogs is that i loved the way the story all added together it was like a mystery story  and it really hooked me. I also like the way you made the pictures match with my story perfectly like when you were talking about the missing girl you even made or found a missing person sign and there was rain in the background which i think made it look even nicer. I don’t have any wishes your story was really good. ]]> 2021-06-17 14:08:26 UTC https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1612328082 https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1612811662 Star- Hi Kaylin, I really liked your peice “It’s Raining Cats and Dogs”. I loved how you described the scientists as if they were real. It was very interesting and funny. I almost thought that I was reading a nonfictional piece.

Star- Another thing I liked was that you talked about the girl Lucy Kane. It was very creative and interesting to read. I also liked the missing image you made of her.

Wish- To be honest yours was so incredibly amazing i was so proud, but if i had to change something I would put the example of what happened to Lucy in the beginning. Beside that your peice was awesome.]]> 2021-06-17 18:04:45 UTC https://padlet.com/27klowe1/hm3n6214zm6zvrut/wish/1612811662