Eng 201-911 Proofreading Help by Michelle Felix

Comma Splice

2017-03-08 14:42:34 UTC

Here is the sentence that has an error:
"One thing I saw as positive is that since I got my work done quickly, I had a lot of free time to do whatever I really wanted."

The error I made was a comma splice. You can find ways to correct his by looking at pages 196-197 in rules for writers. I also just discovered another helpful resource for correcting comma splices at https://www.thoughtco.com/what-is-comma-splice-1689897g

Now here's the corrected version:
"One thing I saw as positive is that I got my work done quickly, so I had a lot of free time to do whatever I really wanted."

--Robert Grohall

Things I have trouble with: using colons, compulsively creating lists, and making dumb jokes.

fillmerj — 2017-03-09 00:34:28 UTC

Error:
The smell of the Ranch is something I don’t think I’ll ever forget. It is a wonderful smell. If you

walk into a casino, you’ll get pretty close; heavy upholstered furnishings and carpets, strangely

complimenting perfumes, swirls of cigar and cigarette (but mostly cigar) smoke, and air conditioning.

I should have used a colon and not a semicolon when introducing a list.
The rules for colon usage are listed on pp. 319-321.

A web resource I found on the topic was found on http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/colons.asp

Correction:
The smell of the Ranch is something I don’t think I’ll ever forget. It is a wonderful smell. If you

walk into a casino, you’ll get pretty close: heavy upholstered furnishings and carpets, strangely

complimenting perfumes, swirls of cigar and cigarette (but mostly cigar) smoke, and air conditioning.

Comma Splice

2017-03-13 00:09:26 UTC

Here is the sentence that had the error.
Well I thought about this for a while and came up with a couple of things that this quote could mean or be related to.

I should of placed a comma before and.
The website i used as a reference
https://owl.english.purdue.edu/engagement/2/1/34/
This error can be found on page 294 in the rules book.
Corrected version
WellI thought about this for a while, and came up with a couple of things that this quote could mean or be related to.

Trisha Winkler

Comma Error

curbsy — 2017-03-13 01:46:39 UTC

Essay 1 Narration and Description

Page 2, last paragraph, sentence 5

There were two other little girls in neo-natal care that were born about the same time; but they were sick.

The semi colon should be a comma. According to Rules for Writers, pg. 316, it should be used instead of a semi colon because it is between independent clauses joined by and, but, or, nor, for, so, or yet.

In support of this, I found parallel information on Purdue University’s Online Writing Lab that showed this same rule.

“Use a comma after the first independent clause when you link two independent clauses with one of the following coordinating conjunctions: and, but, for, or, nor, so, yet.”

Comma Error in Essay

jozefgrayned — 2017-03-13 03:38:39 UTC

Jozef Grayned

This sentence had a few errors;
Around 6:40 I would have to walk up to 35th & Center and catch a couple city buses to 93rd & Good Hope all with the heaviest Nike bag full of books.

I missed a comma after "6:40".

I found this tip, in the book on page 294.

My corrected sentence is;

Around 6:40, I would have to walk up to 35th & Center and catch a couple city buses to 93rd & Good hope all with the heaviest Nike bag full of books.

Comma Error in Essay

reevesa4 — 2017-03-13 21:33:36 UTC

This sentence had a comma splice error in it.

We are in this life together, we must carry

the efforts along that have been made to make change for the better and continue our purpose

on this earth, to continue in doing so and marking our permanent footprints towards a better

environment. We must get back to what Dr. Martin Luther King Jr. taught us and stand in

solitude to speaking up towards what matters.

My corrected sentence should read as followed.
We are in this life together and must carry

the efforts along that have been made to make change for the better and continue our purpose

on this earth we must continue in doing so and marking our permanent footprints towards a better

environment, We must get back to what Dr. Martin Luther King Jr. taught us and stand in

solitude to speaking up towards what matters.

I found assistance on comma splices on pg. 26 of Models for Writers.
i also found help on
this website.
http://www.chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm

My error

2017-03-20 17:05:26 UTC

"The shadow on the ground is someone in need, or a problem we don’t want to

face."
This sentence has a comma splice. I should remove the comma from the sentence. I did this a couple times in my essay.

Page 2 Models for writers has a comma splice section.
I also referenced https://owl.english.purdue.edu/engagement/2/1/34/

-Michaela Miller