https://padlet.com/28jdadlaney/h57zjvxcibqsd6y8 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 12:37:34 UTC 2022-04-29 17:23:07 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f973.png 28gribaudo https://padlet.com/28jdadlaney/h57zjvxcibqsd6y8/wish/2163139238 Hi Jada! A star is your narrative “Super Sensational-ish Shoes,” is your description. I love how you say  “my favorite yellow sun top, dark blue jeans and jet black sneakers…” I can really picture her. Another star is your strong word choice. For example hoe you use luxurious and atrocity. These words make your piece like 9 times better and stronger. One more star because I couldn’t think of a wish is your speaker tags. I love variations like “I confessed.”  It makes me feel like a real person is saying this to me. Not just a character in a book. ]]> 2022-04-28 18:22:59 UTC https://padlet.com/28jdadlaney/h57zjvxcibqsd6y8/wish/2163139238 https://padlet.com/28jdadlaney/h57zjvxcibqsd6y8/wish/2163139458 A strength of your essay was how in the beginning of the story you immediately wrote what the main character was wearing. I thought this was a great part of your piece because I was easily able to picture the character in my mind due to your amount of details. In addition, I also very much enjoyed your great word choice. For example, I liked how you used scrumptious instead of just saying good. To me as the reader the sentence just felt a little more satisfying. Lastly, I thought it was amazing how you included a large amount of inner thoughts into your story. I feel like with a lengthier narrative inner thoughts are a complete necessitie. Each inner thought helped me as the reader better understand your character's personality. :D]]> 2022-04-28 18:23:08 UTC https://padlet.com/28jdadlaney/h57zjvxcibqsd6y8/wish/2163139458