https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme Welcome to my padlet page. Please remember, this is a positive zone only. Do not be rude and ruin my aura. en-us 2018-02-01 17:40:37 UTC 2026-03-18 01:54:27 UTC hello@padlet.com 23vlegerme https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/237075610 Great work! I really enjoyed reading it! I like the line "Overall, both of the authors/speakers should work together to fix this problem instead of being one lonely voice." You made the sentence have a creative flow in it, which I was very impressed by. I like how you added question in your story to point out what you were really trying to say. A suggestion I have for you for future notice is  to set extra time of checking sentence fluency.
-Veronica Legerme

]]> 2018-03-01 18:01:10 UTC https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/237075610 23rbaumgartner https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/237407604 Good job! I can relate to this because I do spend quite a lot of time on my phone, PS4 and Xbox. I really liked how you were very dramatic during the writing piece because it will show people what the internet has been doing to teens. I strongly agree with your writing piece. Another thing I liked was how you used a lot of statistics in your writing piece. For example, you said about 5,000 teens die a year from car accidents. Something that I would fix would be to not have so much drama in just one paragraph. Maybe add some to the others. Overall great job!]]> 2018-03-02 14:34:06 UTC https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/237407604 23egonzalez https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/237408574 Hey Reality (Riley),
I enjoyed reading your persuasive editorial, you gave great information about the topic and interested me first at the start.I liked the "expression" you gave to the editorial. Overall GREAT JOB!

]]> 2018-03-02 14:36:10 UTC https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/237408574 https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/237458893 Star: I loved your beginning it really hooked me in and made me want to read more.

Star: I liked how put so much  voice in your story I could tell this was written by you.

Wish: I future, I'd suggest you describe your settings a little bit more.
-Gavin]]> 2018-03-02 15:53:08 UTC https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/237458893 23nashie https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/246987377 Star: I would like to commend you on your great use of voice, throughout you entire piece I could crystal clearly hear the tone of voice from the dialogue! I absolutely loved how you said cookin´ instead of cooking. It made the southern accent of the character really come to show.

Wish: Through overall you did a wonderful job, I would suggest to have a more make it or break it climax, (what I mean be this is make the climax almost like what you are trying to get across isn´t going to happen) which makes the piece even that much more interested\
-Naa Dei Ashie]]> 2018-03-28 16:48:41 UTC https://padlet.com/23rvierschilling/gxd50rsfwme/wish/246987377