Proofreading Padlet 012 and 039 by Michelle Felix https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73 This is where you will post your work about correcting errors that you have in your narration and description essays. To create a new post, select the plus sign in the lower right corner of the Padlet or double click on the Padlet. en-us 2017-10-09 20:13:00 UTC 2023-05-28 21:45:06 UTC hello@padlet.com Wyomi Jones https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196478121 I am focusing on working on my fragments. When I start off a sentence with "but" or "which" when I could have just combined the sentence before it by using a comma. "Which was funny for him to say that because I depended on him." and "But this family night was without Anthony". Fragments are incomplete sentences. Fragments are pieces of sentences that have been disconnected from the main sentence. One of the easiest ways to correct them is to remove the period between the fragment and the main sentence. https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/620/1/  So my correction would be "He is the type of brother to remind me that I am beautiful and never depend on a man for anything, which was funny for him to say that because I depended on him."]]> 2017-10-12 15:16:58 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196478121 Nate Watkins https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196478665 The error I'm focusing on is comma splices."I don't even know where to begin, my life was extremely hectic." Here instead of using a comma at begin, I could of used a period. Its a full sentence. A comma splice occurs when two independent clauses are connected with only a comma. So my correction is to do this:"I don't even know where to begin. My life was extremely hectic." Makes it complete and understandable.https://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/CommonErrors_CommaSplice.html heres a link to help you guys! 

EXAMPLE: Comma Splice: My family bakes together nearly every night, we then get to enjoy everything we make together.
  • Correction 1: My family bakes together nearly every night. We then get to enjoy everything we make together.
]]> 2017-10-12 15:17:42 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196478665 Proofreading Makayla Ramsey https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196478839 In my paper, a few errors that I am focusing my attention on is making sure that I use the correct form of a word and that I am not substituting semi-colon's for commas. In my first paragraph, I wrote, "I live in a community where my generation of young black men and women have adopted social media as a need in their life and tend to use it in a negative way." Instead of lives, I used life and I dropped we from the sentence as well. The corrected sentence looks like, "I live in a community where my generation of young black and women have adopted social media as a need in their lives and we tend to use it in a negative way." Another example, this time showing the wrong use of a semi-colon is, "In my community and also all around the world, my generation revolves around social media; we eat, sleep, and breathe social media; and its only getting worse as we grow older." While the first semi-colon is correct, the second one however, is not. It should have said, "In my community and also all around the world,  my generation revolves around social media; we eat, sleep, and breathe social media, and its only getting worse as we grow older."
https://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/Semicolons.html
A semicolon is used in a single sentence to link two related ideas together. A comma is used to separate independent clauses when joined by coordinating conjunctions. ]]> 2017-10-12 15:17:58 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196478839 Essay Corrections-Clarity khangkf https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196479457  
Currently my sentences need clarity. Clarity in a sentence allows a clear and concise read when you're following text. It helps readers understand what idea the writer/author promoting. 

Here are some example errors I made in my essay: " Everyone is unique in their own way, but we try so hard to become someone else we can’t be." and "you don’t have to duplicate others to show the world what you can do and trust yourself in."
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The errors are a bad habit need fixing; so if anyone need the same help as I do here's a link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/600/01/ 

Example corrections from source:
Clear (subordinate clause at the end):
Industrial spying is increasing rapidly because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information.
Clear (subordinate clause at the beginning):
Because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information, industrial spying is increasing rapidly.
Not as clear (subordinate clause embedded in the middle):
Industrial spying,because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information, is increasing rapidly.
]]> 2017-10-12 15:18:55 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196479457 Narrative & Illustrations Essay garca148 https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196479991 Corrections - I noticed that within my essay I made several little errors. Some of those errors include incorrect grammar, comma splices, and lack of description.
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"...he immediately bought a one way ticket to Mexico for him and his son."
- In this sentence, I made two grammar errors. Since I am talking about my brother in law and his son, it is insinuated that both tickets (plural) are one way. The correct way to have written this sentence: "...he immediately bought one-way tickets to Mexico for himself and his son."

"...she had ran away with her boyfriend but we knew that she was to young..."
- In this sentence, I made two grammatical errors. I was talking in the present future participle. I also slipped the wrong  version of 'to'. The correct way to have written this sentence: "...she had run away with her boyfriend but we knew that she was too young..."

"With the knowledge that she had just come back..."
- In this sentence, I used an excess amount of words and created a sentence that did not flow. The correct way to have written this sentence: "The knowledge that she had just come back..."

"I didn't understand why that was at first, I had just been told..."
"I kept thinking to myself that it wasn't possible, she was only 12 years old..."
- In these sentences, I used comma splices. There was no need to have separated two independent clauses. https://owl.english.purdue.edu/engagement/2/1/34/ 
The correct way to have written these sentences: " I didn't understand why that was at first but I had just been told..."
"I kept thinking to myself that it wasn't possible because she was only 12 years old..." 

"As we were all eating a late night dinner, you could sense the negative energy." 
"There was a tension in the air that no one spoke of when my cousin had messaged..."
- In these two sentences, I lacked deeper illustration and description. The correct way to have written these sentences: "As we were all eating a relatively warm pizza as a late night dinner, you could sense the negative energy."
"There was a tension in the air as we were eating on the floor of the living room that no one spoke of when my cousin had messaged..."



]]> 2017-10-12 15:19:41 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196479991 Cierra Kanady https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196480008 I need to work on using comma's less in my papers ]]> 2017-10-12 15:19:42 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196480008 Kamryn Nelson https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196480306 I need to improve on my usage of comma splices.  ]]> 2017-10-12 15:20:14 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196480306 Proofreading Padlet - Niya https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196480996
I noticed that I often misuse commas. Example : A sentence from one of my papers said, "Despite that, the motto I have chosen to live by is, Do what makes you happy, even if it makes everyone else miserable." I didn't need to place another comma after the word is.
Sentence Correction: "Despite that, the motto I have chosen to live by is to do what makes me happy, even if it makes everyone else miserable." Purdue's online writing lab says, "commas should be used to separate independent clauses when they are joined by and, but, for, or , nor , so , yet." Here is a link for more rules about commas.  https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/607/01/
Below is an example of how crucial the proper use of commas is.]]> 2017-10-12 15:21:21 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196480996 Alerina Franco https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196484070 The proofreading error that I'm focusing on is comma splices. "Everything was great, it was the last months of freshman year and I was ready to get out of that dreadful school" . That could have been divided into two different sentences or combined instead of using the comma.  To correct my mistake I think it should have sounded like this  " Everything was great. It was the last months of my freshman year and I couldn't wait to get out of that dreadful school."  Another sentence I said was " He told me he loved me when he left, who ever knew that would be the last time I heard that." The correction to this sentence would've been "Whoever knew that would be the last time he told me he loved me." To correct comma splices you could either break the sentences into two or adding a conjuction.

The link that helped me was https://owl.english.purdue.edu/engagement/2/1/34/]]> 2017-10-12 15:26:07 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196484070 Johnathon Vivas https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196486789 i need to work on my setup]]> 2017-10-12 15:31:17 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196486789 Donna Hentnik hentnidm https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196488511 In looking at my illustration essay I made a big mistake in my first paragraph by not not making clear points so that my following paragraphs could give examples. I need to think like a researcher while putting my ideas together. I looked in The Rules for Writers Eighth Edition which I read that I need to become engaged and choose a focused question and to being too broad and stay focused.

]]> 2017-10-12 15:34:13 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196488511 Jason Vue https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196488928 One of my many errors that I believe I need a bit of help on are commas and how to use them to set phrases apart. I could put a comma in between   
"It was then on the eighth or ninth day of
school where Mr.Lazzari really started to engage each and every single student, even the
disobedient students to really take part in this class of Social Studies." I could easily use a comma in between the word, "students" and "to". ,"even the disobedient students, to really take part in this class of Social Studies."
]]> 2017-10-12 15:34:52 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196488928 Thabrianna Ashley: Essay Review! https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196490522  A. I mainly focus on my comma splices, spacing, and my spelling errs. It is my main focus because that's where most of my mistakes where made. 
B. Erra Example / Illustrations Essay :  
- My four qualities have stories behind them that makes me the women that I became.
(Space Erra)(Next Paragraph 
 
 I grew up in church as a quiet and conservative church girl. I had never been a
troublemaker, ( Comma Splice) I kept to myself and followed rules.
C. I've captained multiple Comma splices rules that ill apply to my essays through this site. https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma-splice/ My personal rule is "Commas are tricky because there are so many different ways you can use them, but one of the most common ways to use commas is to separate two main clauses that are connected by a coordinating conjunction".
D. Corrections 
- My four qualities have stories behind them that makes me the women that I became.
 I grew up in church as a quiet and conservative church girl. I had never been a
troublemaker I kept to myself and followed rules.
E. More Information
http://www.chompchomp.com/rules/csfsrules.htm
   

]]> 2017-10-12 15:37:40 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196490522 apostrophes for possession felixm3 https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196491618 Use an apostrophe to show that something belongs to someone or something.]]> 2017-10-12 15:38:40 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196491618 Kquelon Echols-Allen https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196492953 Proper noun capitalization is sometimes a common error that writers make. Noun such as names of people, places and titles should be capitalized. For example, President Obama.

]]> 2017-10-12 15:41:04 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196492953 Proofreading Padlet - Alexis ?Gransbeerry gransbea https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196496832
The Proofreading error I'm focusing on is Sentence Fragment. I notice that one of my many mistakes is that I tend write incomplete sentences.
]]> 2017-10-12 15:48:06 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/196496832 Katie Jackson KatieJackson0499 https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/197804542 My 2 problems with proofreading were comma splices and sentence fragments. A comma splice connects two independent clauses incorrectly (using only a comma). " I didn’t want to feel anything, I wanted to become numb to the sadness that followed over me like a dark cloud." This was a comma splice that I could have easily put into two sentences. One sentence about how I didn't want to feel anything and then one about how I wanted to be numb to the sadness. Correction: "I didn't want to feel anything anymore. I wanted to become numb to the sadness that followed over me like a dark cloud." Another comma splice example I had was " Over and over I asked, to me it felt like a thousand times." To correct this, I could have put "Over and over I asked and to me it felt like a thousand times."
The last error I had was begining a sentence with a fragment "A sobbing that came directly from the heart, stemming from a pain that hadn’t been felt since her own mother was killed in front of her." A sentence fragment looks like a sentence, but it is not because it doesn't have an independent clause. To make this a full sentence, I could have said "This was a sobbing that came directly from the heart, stemming from a pain that hadn’t been felt since her own mother was killed in front of her.". And by adding those 2 words at the beginning, it becomes a full sentence. 
study.com/academy/lesson/what-is-a-sentence-fragment-definition-examples-quiz.html
 
]]> 2017-10-17 14:17:32 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/197804542 Malaika Moses https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/197879658 In my illustration essay, the common proof reading errors that i made were comma splices.
The error i made was 'it's strange, I never adopted this motto until ..', the other comma splice error i made was 'in that moment my hate grew, I quietly became more and more withdrawn from my family.'
A comma splice occurs when two main clauses are connect by a comma. As shown in the examples above. A comma splice can be corrected four different ways. The first is by using a period plus a capital, semi-colon, subordination and finally a comma plus coordinating junction. I will be using the a period and a capital to fix my comma splice errors.
For example 'it's strange. I never adopted this motto until ..', and finally,  'in that moment my hate grew. I quietly became more and more withdrawn from my family.'

Below is a link to helpful information regarding comma splice errors.
http://www.chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm

]]> 2017-10-17 16:10:50 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/197879658 Alexis Gransberry https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/202800889 The proofreading error i'm focusing on is Sentence Fragment . I notice that one of my many mistakes that I tend to write incomplete sentences.
 Sentence Fragments are groups of words that look like sentences, but aren't. To be a sentence groups of words need to have at least one independent clause. An independent clause is any group of words that contain both a subject and a verb and can stand on its own. For Example  " I'm determined on my motto . To be a better person". To correct that sentence I could've made it into one whole sentence . " I'm determined on my motto to be a better person . "]]> 2017-11-02 08:13:33 UTC https://padlet.com/felixm3/gvkocf636f73/wish/202800889