https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 18:36:43 UTC 2019-12-10 18:53:29 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f92a.png 26nbeversluis https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/421703871 A strength your story has is when you used metaphors. The way you perfected your metaphors, is awesome. When you wrote, “Rumors about him spreading around like butter.” it really made me focus on the details in your story. Metaphors like this make your story interesting! You should definitely include this in your next story because it makes the story very interesting to read. Also, I loved the way you describe the character’s body language. In the story you said, “Charlie’s whole body shaked as if there was an earthquake.” and I completely loved the way you did that. It showed how good your descriptions were and how well you can describe how the character it feeling. Even though your story was practically perfect in every way, I can dish you a few tips for next time. When you add dialogue, you may want to describe the character’s body language when they are speaking. This may help your writing technique and all. Awesome work, Kristina! Keep it up!

]]> 2019-12-09 16:46:21 UTC https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/421703871 26eroof https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/421782834 In your story, The Loser, your story has gotten bigger and better than it already was. I like how you described Charlie’s rumors as butter. That was a great descriptive sentence. In that paragraph I also loved how you described the children's laughter in the hallway. Overall I love your story so far. It is very descriptive and you very rarely tell the reader. But you did show the reader a lot. I also love how you said the pearly white adidas. But overall I love your story.A suggestion I can offer is that you describe Charlie’s gray sweatshirt instead of only saying that it is gray.

]]> 2019-12-09 18:41:15 UTC https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/421782834 26jlugo https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/422237343 Something that made you narrative even better is when you were describing how Charlie’s mom JoJo left him it was really descriptive and I felt like I was apart of the story reading this part. Another strong point was when you were describing how Tammie stopped being friends with Charlie. This made it seem like it could be part of a show or movie. However, I suggest putting more detail for when JoJo comes back. If you do this you could really see this in a movie. Other than that, I love your piece!]]> 2019-12-10 15:59:10 UTC https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/422237343 26eroof https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/422335998 In your story, The Loser, it has very good detail. You show the reader not tell. I  like how you described the smell in the hallway as Charlie and Jack did their secret handshake and when they went to class. Your story has gotten better and it is amazing. I love how you showed the reader how long the hallways are. I also loved how you showed the reader that they are best friends by saying that they have a secret handshake with each other. Everyone knows that best friends have a secret handshake. Overall your story is amazing and great. A suggestion I can offer is that you explain in some parts that might not have a lot of details.

]]> 2019-12-10 18:22:41 UTC https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/422335998 26ramberg https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/422354178 I love your story it is amazing!! I absolutely love how Charlie got to meet his mom! I really liked how Charlie stood up for himself and everyone wanted to be friends with him! I also loved how much description you put in your story, it was very descriptive and made me feel like I was really in the moment. I think you should write many more stories just like that!

]]> 2019-12-10 18:48:31 UTC https://padlet.com/26knitro/gqcobhepmtsl/wish/422354178