Random DBQ Issues by Robert Bradburn https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg What's a problem area you saw? en-us 2017-05-04 15:09:04 UTC 2017-05-04 19:56:20 UTC hello@padlet.com I couldn't really understand some sentences rbradburn https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170039187 2017-05-04 19:25:01 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170039187 Lots of quotes but not explained rbradburn https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170039214 2017-05-04 19:25:11 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170039214 Grammar needs a lot of improvement https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043899 2017-05-04 19:49:43 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043899 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043923 they didnt go back to the claim like why the information they chose should be put in a textbook.]]> 2017-05-04 19:49:49 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043923 Many sentences had no meaning and were not clear to the reader. https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043947 2017-05-04 19:49:57 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043947 The elaboration was strong but should have put more https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043949 2017-05-04 19:49:59 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043949 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043955 Too much sentences that start with "The Soviet Union]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:00 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043955 The quotes did not flow with the sentences. https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043962 2017-05-04 19:50:03 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043962 No actual ARGUMENT https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043963 2017-05-04 19:50:04 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043963 Clarify, clarify clarify! https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043966 I have noticed with the essay i read the thesis is not clear and the intro of each paragraph is not clarified. I am confused what each paragraph is about and may have seen some repeats. Also whats written are just facts and not reasons why the topic should be used in a textbook

]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:04 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043966 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043968 Too much flower writing. Some parts need to get to the point quicker.

]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:04 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043968 topic sentences could be more related to the prompt https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043971 2017-05-04 19:50:05 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043971 Confusing Russia and the Soviet Union https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043974 Their mistaking information of the Soviet Union as information about Russia

]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:05 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043974 600017406 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043977 Most sentences did not connect very well and they gave examples that really did not match with their topics


]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:06 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043977 The writer could have explained certain parts better and with more detail. https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043978 2017-05-04 19:50:06 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043978 It is hard to see how the evidence supports the claim https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043979 2017-05-04 19:50:06 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043979 They did not explain why these topics should be stressed about. https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043981 2017-05-04 19:50:07 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043981 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043984 too many sentences start with "The soviet union"]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:08 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170043984 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044003 A lot of repeat sentences and background information is weak.]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:10 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044003 They are not making their stance clear for the reader https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044004 2017-05-04 19:50:10 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044004 Phrases listed are to vague resulting in a unclear claim. https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044006 2017-05-04 19:50:11 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044006 The document information is clear and supports the thesis but their arguments could be stronger and expanded. https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044007 2017-05-04 19:50:12 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044007 Their claims weren't really connected to their CLAIM https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044009 2017-05-04 19:50:12 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044009 The writer was very good and explained their claim very descriptively https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044015 2017-05-04 19:50:14 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044015 Where are the counterclaims https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044017

]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:14 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044017 Feedback https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044018 Instead of comments, I would rather go on an hour long rant to this person about his or her essay's flaws.]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:14 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044018 Needs more details https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044032 2017-05-04 19:50:19 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044032 It's so vague, there is no expansion, it's all flower writing. https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044040 2017-05-04 19:50:23 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044040 Sentences keep dropping off. It hurts my brain https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044041 2017-05-04 19:50:23 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044041 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044049 This person said the ussr's economy was so bad because they spent too much money on ballet]]> 2017-05-04 19:50:26 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044049 they gave a lot of dat https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044053 2017-05-04 19:50:27 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044053 unnecessary and extra words that make sentences hard to understand. also a lot of repetitive things https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044057 2017-05-04 19:50:28 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044057 Sometimes didn't explain the quote fully https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044062 2017-05-04 19:50:29 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044062 "In document..." https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044067 2017-05-04 19:50:31 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044067 Analyzing is ehh https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044100 2017-05-04 19:50:39 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044100 they gave a lot of data but their information was very dry https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044113 2017-05-04 19:50:43 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044113 Said the detail about the Soviet Union, but never expanded on it or explained the significance https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044137 2017-05-04 19:50:49 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044137 Does not explain, just states the facts then leaves me hanging https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044172 2017-05-04 19:51:01 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044172 600017406 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044189 they had problems with connecting the sentences and gave random info, like connect the sentences and their examples did not go well with their topics


]]> 2017-05-04 19:51:06 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044189 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044223 A lot of choppy sentences and not very many transitions. Some points are unclear 

]]> 2017-05-04 19:51:17 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044223 Reminds me of the short Ghandi essay https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044225 2017-05-04 19:51:20 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044225 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044268 There is no argument and not a clear stance]]> 2017-05-04 19:51:24 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044268 JUST GIVING DATA but no argument is being made at all https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044305 2017-05-04 19:51:38 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044305 Only Facts and like one sentence of explaining https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044315 2017-05-04 19:51:40 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044315 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044316 There are a lot of run on sentences]]> 2017-05-04 19:51:40 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044316 Although this really isn't something we needed to look at, their grammar was a bit off and had many typos. Spell/grammar check anyone? https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044330 2017-05-04 19:51:48 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044330 https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044345 if i could write more helpful comments i would]]> 2017-05-04 19:51:53 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044345 no counterclaims https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044381 2017-05-04 19:51:54 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044381 The writer OBVIOUSLY knows how to write with proper grammar. https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044426 2017-05-04 19:52:08 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044426 ONLY FACTS NO ARGUMENT https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044443 2017-05-04 19:52:14 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044443 "Strong" paragraph is weakest out of all of them https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044495 2017-05-04 19:52:36 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170044495 Wrote as if they were speaking to a person https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170045001 2017-05-04 19:55:34 UTC https://padlet.com/rbradburn/gnp0m420sclg/wish/170045001