Korinne's Personal Narrative by Kevin Van Dyke

Maddie Crocker

2014-04-22 13:49:11 UTC

My favorite part of the story was when u said '' the beatiful long grass is waving and the wind was blowing softly''

Jaden Brand

2014-04-22 14:25:23 UTC

Korinne my favorite part of the story was when you felt the mud squishing in between your toes and also I thought you were really good and very descriptive with your words and how you felt with the nature all around you

Denali Conover

2014-04-23 14:03:12 UTC

My favorite part in your story is when you said the water was still and clear. I love how you described everything. I also liked the " knee deep water". It reminds me of wyoming, I loved your story because I can make a connection to it.

Dylann Huyser

2014-04-24 13:49:36 UTC

Korinne-

You did an amazing job on your personal narrative! You really took the time to capture the best moments and then you slowed them down. My favorite part about your writing was the fact that your ending sentence had so much power! "This memory reminded me that I've always enjoyed the sights and smell of nature." Keep up the powerful writing! - Dylann

Hadley

2014-04-25 13:47:37 UTC

That was a really good story! my favorite part of the story was when described the mud between your toes. I really liked how you explained things really well! I felt like I was there myself. I can't wait to read more of your writing!