Harper's Writing Feedback by Harper Shimko https://padlet.com/27hshimko/glorhqecymu3aubv I hope you enjoyed my writing piece! Please leave some kind and helpful comments. en-us 2021-01-12 16:50:33 UTC 2021-01-29 19:31:20 UTC hello@padlet.com https://cdn.pixabay.com/photo/2012/04/18/03/53/write-36784_960_720.png 27rricher https://padlet.com/27hshimko/glorhqecymu3aubv/wish/1141411722 Hi Harper! WOW, is the one word that I can think about when reading you’re description of you’re story for example. When you said “ babumb. And that's when my heart shook, time stopped, and my world instantly became a land of milk and honey.” This was amazing because it helped paint a picture in my mind on how much you loved the puppies. My heart stopped , for good reasons obviously. I also was beyond impressed with your lesson. Whenever something does not go my way I will think of your lesson! I would have clarified what you were saying about why you were still in a relationship with the puppies. I was very 
impressed with your writing. Keep up the good work.


]]> 2021-01-29 16:38:02 UTC https://padlet.com/27hshimko/glorhqecymu3aubv/wish/1141411722 Small Moment 27czerilli https://padlet.com/27hshimko/glorhqecymu3aubv/wish/1142214989 Hey Harper!  I really enjoyed reading your story about the puppies Polly and Bosco.  The increase of suspense is really what kept my attention.  I never knew what was going to happen next.  It wasn’t until the very end where you knew what your story was actually about!  I thought you did an exceptional job about describing the setting.  Some of the words that you used were very descriptive, like an evergreen chuckling.  For your next piece, I would try to expand on a little bit more dialogue with some conversations between people.  Overall, I think you did a great job!]]> 2021-01-29 19:31:16 UTC https://padlet.com/27hshimko/glorhqecymu3aubv/wish/1142214989