Summer Project Graphic Short Story: Review 2 by Rachel Lillie https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt Group 6 / 1.30 - 4.00 with Rachel Lillie en-us 2020-09-25 11:38:34 UTC 2026-03-16 22:44:50 UTC hello@padlet.com 1. READ THE WORK territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778828367 Spend time with each piece]]> 2020-09-25 11:40:32 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778828367 CONSIDER : territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778829245 THE MEDIUM
Image + text, process + materials used, colour, characterisation...]]> 2020-09-25 11:41:08 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778829245 CONSIDER : territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778830622 THE FORM
Use of the page, composition / the frame / use of text, narrative structure...]]> 2020-09-25 11:42:14 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778830622 CONSIDER : territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778832795 THE FUNCTION
communication, affect on audience, story message, readability...]]> 2020-09-25 11:43:48 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778832795 What other considerations? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778832955 2020-09-25 11:43:55 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778832955 2. Review the work territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778833145 - use the post-it notes as prompts
- add your comments to each piece in the comments section VVV]]> 2020-09-25 11:44:04 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778833145 3. Ask a question? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778833366 - write your question as a new post and connect it to the work
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'Connect to post']]> 2020-09-25 11:44:14 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778833366 Is the story clear? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778833614 2020-09-25 11:44:24 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778833614 End of feed territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778886579 2020-09-25 12:15:00 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778886579 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892079 2020-09-25 12:17:23 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892079 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892129 2020-09-25 12:17:24 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892129 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892191 2020-09-25 12:17:26 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892191 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892230 2020-09-25 12:17:27 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892230 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892258 2020-09-25 12:17:28 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778892258 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778905348 2020-09-25 12:23:26 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778905348 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778905368 2020-09-25 12:23:26 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778905368 Is the story engaging? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778987321 2020-09-25 12:52:48 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778987321 the society of... comic comment luciusrat https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778995822 while the writing was very nice and extremely well put into each panel, making the speech flow quite nicely, I cannot read the last word of the title, "cloat"? Even when repeated in the story I could still not think of what it means.]]> 2020-09-25 12:55:31 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/778995822 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779002624 2020-09-25 12:57:42 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779002624 k1916628 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779003239 Really amazing use of colour, such lovely images. Very interesting choice of composition as well. As the seed seems to be the main part of the story you could maybe characterise it more it give it more dialogue? ]]> 2020-09-25 12:57:53 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779003239 territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779008540 2020-09-25 12:59:38 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779008540 Are the pages easy to read and navigate? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779009951 2020-09-25 13:00:05 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779009951 Could the work be improved? Could the story or the artwork be more developed? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779012269 2020-09-25 13:00:50 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779012269 World building - are the characters convincing? Is the setting believable? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779026220 2020-09-25 13:04:43 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779026220 How does the work make you feel? What does the story evoke? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779038630 2020-09-25 13:07:54 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779038630 Is the story engaging? What makes it so? What is the reading experience like? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779045724 2020-09-25 13:09:40 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779045724 How is text / dialogue used? (if any) How does it lead the story with the story and interact with the images? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779047440 2020-09-25 13:10:06 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779047440 How does it begin? How does it end? Is the end satisfying? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779055732 2020-09-25 13:12:12 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779055732 Where does the story take you? Time and place? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779065569 2020-09-25 13:14:43 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779065569 How do the materials and processes used affect the reading of the work? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779076392 2020-09-25 13:17:28 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779076392 How well does the story read across two double page spreads? How is space used? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779082995 2020-09-25 13:19:10 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779082995 K1910580 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779084715 The concept design is simple and stunning. Your style is lovely but I would like to see more drawings in your frames. Tell a bit more story of your character. Perhaps adding more frames of their actions towards the drink, and their facial expressions to help it feel more dramatic. The compositions are great however, I want to get to know the character and what their personalities are. They are in their room surrounded by plants which is nice but add more story elements that tell a more interesting character.  You could have small frames within a frame to help illustrate the story. More colour would be lovely to have as an addition.]]> 2020-09-25 13:19:35 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779084715 What is the tone of the work? Dark, surreal, light-hearted, serious, funny, fantastical? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779121552 2020-09-25 13:28:03 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779121552 Interesting to see what types of stories are being addressed across the group: fiction / non-fiction, autobiographical, fantasy, topical, etc. territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779126755 2020-09-25 13:29:14 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779126755 SHALL WE MEET BACK ON TEAMS AT 3.15? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779146842 2020-09-25 13:33:59 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779146842 K1910580 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779149757 This is a beautiful design concept. I like your limited colour palette, and your compositions. The story is cute and funny as I did not expect that ending. I think to take this even further, you could have more dialogues added in such as "sighs"- to illustrate more of the main character mood (even though their facial expression clearly shows). You could have your onomatopoeias big and bold to help illustrate another character's dramatic entrance to the burger place as well the worker's nervousness.]]> 2020-09-25 13:34:40 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779149757 SHALL WE MEET BACK ON TEAMS AT 3.15? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779158162 2020-09-25 13:36:39 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779158162 Can you offer suggestions for improvement? What would you do? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779190106 2020-09-25 13:43:38 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779190106 SHALL WE MEET BACK ON TEAMS AT 3.15? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779263930 2020-09-25 14:00:58 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779263930 SHALL WE MEET BACK ON TEAMS AT 3.15? territoriesii1 https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779264682 2020-09-25 14:01:09 UTC https://padlet.com/territoriesii1/ghvt6aw2tmc04kpt/wish/779264682