https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 16:40:25 UTC 2025-10-22 11:13:22 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f3ca-2640.png 26yklieger https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/420792963 Its yael and I loved your story so much!!!!!!]]> 2019-12-06 15:26:24 UTC https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/420792963 https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/420857247 Your story "Mortal Enemy and Me" is a wonderful story. A really good part is when Jessie states to Logan  “Don’t call me that! I hate you, Mom. How could you? Do you not care about Dad? Do you not care about me?” This was really good because I loved how Jessie has so much attitude to snap back at Logan. Another really good part ]]> 2019-12-06 16:45:11 UTC https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/420857247 26vvirga https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/420861337 Your story "Mortal Enemy and Me" is a wonderful story. A really good part is when Jessie states to Logan  “Don’t call me that! I hate you, Mom. How could you? Do you not care about Dad? Do you not care about me?” This was really good because I loved how Jessie has so much attitude to snap back at Logan. Another really good part is when you fully describe her crying in the beginning of the story. It really helped my visualize what she looked like. Something that could be better was not making her change so subtle. She didn’t really have a life changing event that helped her get to this trait. Your story was really good. 

]]> 2019-12-06 16:51:06 UTC https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/420861337 26jbogdan https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/421709061 I really enjoyed your story "Mortal Enemy and Me." One of my favorite things is how Jessica finally realizes that everyone is human and even if Logan used to be horrible, that doesn’t mean he can’t change. Another reason I like this story is because it shows that we have to have acceptance for other people even if they have done one single thing to change your view of them. The one thing I think you need to work on is developing the other characters like Sam, Logan and Jessica’s mom. I say this because throughout the story I didn’t really understand their full traits. I could’ve just been my understanding too but overall you wrote a great story.

]]> 2019-12-09 16:53:38 UTC https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/421709061 26kwright1 https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/424624655 One thing I like about your story is that you used a lot of dialogue to show the characters' emotions. Another thing that was good was that you used realistic speaker tags and not sad, said, said. One thing I can offer for improvement is to use stronger words when describing the setting.]]> 2019-12-16 17:01:56 UTC https://padlet.com/26nbeversluis/gfxdjjz28s2u/wish/424624655