What do I need to work on?:

Time management (have a specific time limit for each paragraph)

Use more good examples to support my point (research)

Sentence structure (read more and analyse texts/ practice)

Vocabulary (read and note down unfamiliar words)

Development of my essay (better conjunctions, discourse markers, good peel structure)

Planning (don't take too long, try to conjure general and easy points that can be easily and strongly supported and explained)

Need more variety of ideas/points (Be flexible)