https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 17:27:30 UTC 2023-06-14 17:42:41 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/26be.png https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2355917129 You did a great job! A strength in your memoir, “Final steps” is your elaboration on the piece. You really elaborated on the color green, and you included a lot about a single color. Another thing you did well on was your inner thoughts. You chose very active inner thoughts. You also were doing well on the “talking to yourself” part. My favorite inner thought was “you made a promise you would not break pace! Don’t listen to the weak side of you. One thing you need to work on is your ending. It was kind of short, and I didn’t really see the moral of the story.  I think you could’ve done better on the ending, but overall, you did great!]]> 2022-10-25 17:49:28 UTC https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2355917129 29dsanchez https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2490236135 In your persuasive essay, Homework: The Key to a Good Life, a star I have is that your explanations were very good and long. They explained the evidence very well and you made them very clear to read. Another star I have for you is that your essay was very long and gave a lot of evidence that supported your opinion. A wish I have for you is that there were a couple of grammar mistakes so I would fix that. ]]> 2023-02-21 20:15:01 UTC https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2490236135 https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2525812798 Hi, Ben! A strength in your theme analysis paragraph “learning from lifted” how you add life lessons in it. For example when you say “while he does not know what he is doing he keeps learning and just needs a little practice. It matters because one can see that in the video the alien after practicing for a bit does get the human into the spaceship.” This shows that it’s fine to not know what you're doing. You just need to take a little time and practice.In addition, I like how you describe the characteristics of the alien in the beginning. For example, when you say “To elaborate in more detail, at this time the little alien clearly has no idea what he is doing but does not give up” I like how you explain what he looks like and what he is doing and showing his mind set.However, I feel that if you changed up your word choice it would be better. For example you could’ve changed many words so it wouldn’t sound bland like you use the word because many times and is many times.]]> 2023-03-21 17:33:24 UTC https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2525812798 https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2533478967 In your timed paragraph, a star I had was that your explanation was very good. It explains the theme in amazing detail and really helped me understand what you were saying much better. Another star I have is that your theme was good. It was different from mine and actually made a lot of sense. A wish I have is that you could’ve added some commas throughout the paragraph.]]> 2023-03-27 17:24:18 UTC https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2533478967 https://padlet.com/29bhalpern/g4hpflqk0o6eyln0/wish/2623656424 Hi, Ben! A strength of your informational presentation, “Xbox: Slightly addictive but amazing” is all your creative word choice. I really like it when you say it allows you to drive into the world. This really made me think, should I buy this? It was really great how you used so many different word choices. In addition, I like your creative hook. I like how you got the cons out of the way but you also said it was still amazing showing the reader not to play so much but also, to buy the item. However, a suggestion that I can offer for improvement is to perhaps fix your font. I feel that in your slideshow you used a color font and it was really hard to read. Otherwise, good Job!

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