https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw en-us 2017-09-29 12:56:33 UTC 2017-09-29 17:02:04 UTC hello@padlet.com tshephard1 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192426104 What areas of your narrative do you feel need more revision or development?

What areas do you feel strongly about? 

Be specific (dialogue, use of imagery, setting, plot, action, exposition, etc...)]]> 2017-09-29 12:57:00 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192426104 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538380 My narrative itself is so boring. I hate the topic and I feel like no one will be interested in it. I don't really like any of it. ]]> 2017-09-29 16:51:14 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538380 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538403 I think I could add more imagery, but I also introduce the characters as soon as the story starts. I should also add mare description in my main character's actions.]]> 2017-09-29 16:51:16 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538403 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538581 I could use some more imagery and I think the dialogue could be better, but the plot and characters are good.]]> 2017-09-29 16:51:38 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538581 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538668 I think what I call my characters is confusing to the reader. I don't really feel strongly about any piece of my narrative because it's not my best work

]]> 2017-09-29 16:51:51 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538668 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538683 I think the areas that could be improved is adding more dialogue in my piece. I could also work on the ending a bout more. I think the beginning is really strong and that the setting is clear.]]> 2017-09-29 16:51:53 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538683 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538762 I feel like it could be longer. I think I did well writing the dialogue even though there wasn't much. I also believe I wrote the conflict well especially with the emotion.]]> 2017-09-29 16:52:02 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538762 stszavala1 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538801 I need to work on the story telling (telling it more like a story than an essay)
I am strong in the use of describing the scene and imagery

]]> 2017-09-29 16:52:09 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192538801 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539089 I need to work on the legenth of the narrative and not repeating myself and saying the same thing. ]]> 2017-09-29 16:52:44 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539089 myeshaholloway369 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539170 I think I could improve more on  introducing the character and add more literary devices]]> 2017-09-29 16:52:54 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539170 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539174 The details/body paragraphs.
My opening/introduction]]> 2017-09-29 16:52:54 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539174 gpennix1025 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539290 I feel that my narrative is pretty decent aside from adding more description but other than that and a better conclusion its good. Its boring and its basic like omg this life changing experience so effective but it really wasn't and I'm just trying to not fail this class ]]> 2017-09-29 16:53:10 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539290 colin_ewing1 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539409 I feel like th🅰️t I needed to h🅰️ve 🅱️etter voc🆎ul🅰️ry.]]> 2017-09-29 16:53:25 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539409 lenepietrusza https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539497 i should probably finish my narrative and work on some more character development. ]]> 2017-09-29 16:53:34 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539497 teamflawless1070 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539539 An areas of my narrative I feel I need ore revision on is on my 2 paragraph because I think I repeated "and" & "I" too much. I really like my introduction because its gets the reader thinking.

]]> 2017-09-29 16:53:39 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539539 kiranchristophe https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539599 I think I need to work on describe the setting and environment of my narrative better.]]> 2017-09-29 16:53:47 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539599 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539878 I could improve on my run on sentences because I love to right really descriptive sentences . And Im good a describing, and creating imagery for the reader.]]> 2017-09-29 16:54:22 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192539878 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192540136 the transitions and I think I did]]> 2017-09-29 16:54:58 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192540136 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192540272 making it longer]]> 2017-09-29 16:55:19 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192540272 lillianwerling https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192540339 I probably need to show and not tell and make it more suspenseful and dramatic.]]> 2017-09-29 16:55:29 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192540339 unicornlover411 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/g1euc0cnw4tw/wish/192540655 Finding a good area to put quotes. Everything, its horrible.

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