Introduction structure (see p69-72)

- Link to current life

- Background info on two subjects

- Topic sentence i.e. what you want people to know about these two people (what the essay is about)

- Points of comparison and contrast

Body consideration (See p72-73)

- Will you use block or point by point structure for the body?

Homework (Set Tuesday 16th September. Due Thursday 18th September)

- Finish your introduction before next class (Thursday September 16th)

- Print in out and bring in to class ((Thursday September 16th)

Format

- Include a title

- Font 12; times roman/calibri/ariel

- Spacing 2

Lesson 4

Body Structure (Tell - Tell - Show - Show - Remind)

- Topic sentence: To show the reader exactly what the paragraph will deal with.

- Developing sentence: Going deeper into the topic or narrowing the scope of the topic.

- An example: To provide evidence for the topic of the paragraph.

- A further example or developing the original example: To show that the writer has researched more than one area of the topic.

- A concluding sentence: To provide a satisfying ending to the paragraph and to show the reader you will move onto a different point.

Use: (p72-78)

- Structure

- Show and tell examples

- Compare and contrast signals

Important: Grammar and accuracy are secondary to

- Structure

- Organisation

- Clarity

- Purpose

- Logical flow of ideas

Homework (Set Thursday 18th September. Due Monday 22nd September before 1pm )

- Improve your introduction 

- Finish body paragraphs

- Email to me (see date and time above)

- Print in out and bring in to class (Tuesday September 23rd)

Format

- Include a title

- Font 12; times roman/calibri/ariel

- Spacing 2

Lesson 5

Conclusions 

Practice: http://padlet.com/barryelliott2/UIWrSep2014Con

Microsoft Office or Facebook which program do people often use? Two figures in the era of InformationTechnology made a magnificent influence on our modern daily lives by creating Microsoft and Facebook company. Bill Gates created the software 'Windows' and 'Microsoft Office' which are ran on by more than 80% of computer nowadays. Mark Zukerberg set up the social network site 'Facebook' which is now broadening interaction not only for human but for different area of business. At first glance, business for both companies are not easily distinguished. However, it is important to focus on two figures' different juvenile background and how these differences lead to a distinct business model. For the last, influences effected by two companies to our modern lives.

BODY PARAGRAPH

Points

1. Effect from their parents, educational background, different juvenile interest.

(Topic sentence) Even though both Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerburg commonly have high educational support from their parents, they had different juvenile experience which lead from their different parental influences. (Developing sentence) As the family of Bill had originally lived in the US for a long time, Bill Gates was born in a quite stable upper middle class while Mark Zukerburg's parent emigrated from Bulgaria having more diversified cultural background than Bill. (Example) Bill's father was prominent lawyer and mother was board of director of a financial system company. Bill enrolled exclusive private school at the age of thirteen excelled in computer programming but not hooked on other area than computer science. However, Mark, who also attended the private school, excelled classics and science and claimed on his college application that he could read and write four languages; Hebrew, Latin, ancient Greeks and French. (Further example) Influenced by his psychiatrist mother, Mark was more outgoing and interpersonal than Bill. Mark have lead the fencing team in high school as a captain and belonged to the Alpha, Epsilon, Pi a Jewish fraternity and Kirkland house in a Harvard University.

(A concluding sentence) Despite both figures commonly standout for their high educational achievement during the juvenile ages, Mark was more focused on interpersonal relationship compared to the Bill who was more into the development of program itself.

2. Different Types of business

Microsoft which developed 'Windows' and 'Microsoft Office' which helped efficiency of work. The company business is focused on various kinds of operating system for vehicle and mobile. Also it had extended to the video game and

Facebook is social network platform most of revenues came from advertisement however it expand to the analysis of human behavior and psychology related to the marketing data.

(Topic sentence) The business of Microsoft and Facebook are distinguished by interactivity of their users. (Developing sentence)Most of the software by Microsoft are products for users to actually purchase it as a tool for computer work. On contrary, Facebook provide a social network service as a business which provide a platform for users to interact. (Example)Therefore, most of the Microsoft's revenue came from sales of Windows a operating system and Microsoft Office(Further Example)(A concluding sentence)

3. Their influence on modern life

Conclusion

It is amazing to find out about the formative ages of successful figures and see how it resulted to the different business. Bi

Barry.elliott@ britishcouncil.or.kr

The financial crisis in 2008 aroused controversies on diverse affairs about economics. Two Nobel prize laureates in economics, Robert Lucas and Paul Krugman, are two of the most prominent economists who had differing ideas on this crisis. While Lucas is a intransigent free market supporter, Krugman defends traditional Keynesian solution. Despite their clear differences, I will not judge which one of them got things right. I will just make it clear what their contrasting characteristics are. Those are the means they expressed their ideas, their basic perspectives on the government intervention, and their responses to the financial crisis.

First, I will talk about how they influenced the economic ideas of their age. Robert Lucas mainly had a effect on his era through his articles that were published in academic journals. With his esoteric mathematical formulas, he convinced economists in his time that conventional Keynesian idea was misleading. On the other hand, Paul Krugman carried a liberal torch through his lifetime by writing regular columns in the New York Times. Although his main contribution to economics rests in international trade, not macroeconomics or public policy, he still had a enormous impact on public opinion about macroeconomics problem with his lucid prose. Lucas and Krugman took distinguished roads to raise their voices to the public.

Secondly, they showed fundamental difference in their opinion when it comes to government intervention. Lucas strengthened the belief that government intervention is bound to fail. He demonstrated that economic agents could make rational choices of their own only when governments remain hands-off. Contrary to Lucas, Krugman defended traditional Keynesian solutions claiming that they definitely work in the short-term. Indeed, what he argued was that government can amend market failure, not that government should always control the whole market. Both of them also was different each other in their perspectives on government intervention.

Given these two divergent opinions they proposed contradicting views on the 2008 financial crisis. Lucas reprimanded the measures the Federal Reserve Bank took in 2008 because he believed that the bailout would mean the denial of laissez faire principles and cause shameful moral hazard of those who are to blame for this crisis in the end. Be that as it may, Krugman considered the financial crisis as evidence that the market could go astray without proper government regulation. He dismissed Lucas' argument and strongly publicized his idea that unless the government stepped in and stimulated the economy in order to get away from secular stagnation, the lives of people would remain devastated.

 (Conclusion #1) Lucas' and Krugman's visions seem incompatible even though both of them are obstinate mainstream econoimsts who claim their methodology to be close to exact science. They differed in the way they affected the world, their views on government intervention and their opinion on the financial crisis in 2008. It is quite hard to reject one over the other. Both of them have some points and some fundamental blind spots. Conscientious and prudent debate for the time being is required. This mission is up to all of us. As John Maynard Keynes told us, "Practical men who believes themselves to be exempt from any intellectual influences are usually slaves of a defunct economist."

 (Conclusion #2)Lucas propagated his antiKeynesiN opinion through complicated academic articles while Krugman expressed proKeynesian ideas through columns in a newspaper. They subsequently reaced conflicting positions. No one knows whose thoughts wouldI suppose Krugman would win the race. Actually his major academic achievement in international trade was possible because he tried to develop a mathematical model which was more firmly rooted in reality. Even if many of his columns were based on ad hoc assumptions in terms of an academician, he nevertheless succeeded in getting a lot of cogent and eloquent points that had to be respected in his columns. However, Lucas tended to come up with distorted facts that fit into his theory. Admittedly, my assertion is just tentative. This is too complicated a prediction that one cannot deal with in this short essay.

In a few months, there is going to be a big match, El Classico, in the Spanish premier league. El Classico is a match between the two top teams in Spanish football. This match always attracts the eyes of the world and brings discussion about who will be the man of the match. There are two top football
players in each team; Cristiano Ronaldo of Real Madrid and Lionel Messi of Barcelona and they are currently considered as best football players in the world. It, however, often brings a big controversy among the fans who is the best football player between Ronaldo and Messi. In my opinion, neither is vastly superior to the other but there are some differences and similarities in three important areas; dribbling, physical attribute and impact on a game which will be examined in this essay.

To begin with, dribbling style is one of the two football players' major attributes. When you look more closely, you can see that both players have totally different dribbling styles. For example, Messi usually likes to dribble in the center of the field and does not really use fabulous skills to go past players.
Nonetheless, he seems like he is not putting much effort into his dribbling skills. Compared to Messi, Ronaldo often dribbles on the side of the field because he started his position as a winger in Manchester United. Also his posture is higher than messi and he moves his arms back and forward widely when dribbling. Moreover, he uses a variety of different skills to go past players and those skills look very interesting and eye-catching. Due to these reasons, we can see that they have developed their own dribbling styles respectively.

Next, physical attribute also plays a pivotal role in playing football and it may affect one’s playing style and being utilized in a football strategy. Both players have very different physical attribute along the height and body balances. Messi is very well known for his short-height and people might think this could affect his playing ability. He, however, has a very good body balance due to his low center of gravity so he can change his dribbling direction quickly and go past players very easily. Ronaldo is a tall football player and shows many tricks with his long legs. He gets more chances to score when a ball is in the air. Also he has a muscular body and it makes him not to lose physical challenges from other players. Although they have very different physical attributes, it is no matter for them to show their great performance in the game.

Lastly, though football is played by 11 players for each team, there is always one key player who Has a huge impact on a game. Ronaldo and Messi have the ability to turn the tables in one's favor when losing or their team is in a difficult situation. Both are most important forwards for their each team and play almost every game. They both are good at free kick and always make creative ways to move the game. Their team’s performance is very different when Messi and Ronaldo are not on the game; it usually affects badly for their teams. They have been the top scorers for their team for 4 or 5 years and also assist to other teammates a lot as well. There is no doubt that they have been the best players for their team due to their contribution in the games.

To sum up, though Ronaldo and Messi have a major impact on their games, the two football players have different styles of playing football particularly. based on this I cannot say that one is better at football than one another. There, however, will still be argument about which one is the best football player because every football fan has different tastes and preferences towards football. Rather than argue about who is better, we should appreciate the fact that we are able to watch them playing live.

- there is no superiority for one over the other - neither is vastly superior to the other

- football plays by 11 players - is played

- gives so much impact - has a huge impact

- make the tables are turned in one’s favor when losing or it is placed in a difficult situation to their team - turn the tables in ............................................................................ their team is in a difficukt situation

-

Jonghun PArk: made a magnificent influences - who have been major influences - Bill Gates had (delete had) created - which is ran on more than 80%

Baek: with their differing opinion on this crisis. - who had differing .... - can claim to have had a tremendous impact on

General: Don't use contraction (there's - use there is) in formal essay writing

- Need to make purpose clearer: Use phrases like - I want to highlight that ..... / This essay will explain in further detail how .... / There are major similarities and differences in these people in ....... and these are waht I will deleve further into /

Hillary Clinton and Condoleezza Rice have had the successful careers as a politician. They were both appointed as the United States secretary of State. As for Rice, she became the first African-American women secretary of the states serving under the George Bush. On the other hand, Hillary Clinton was not only the 67th secretary of the state, serving under President Barack Obama, but also the first lady from 1993 to 2001 the period that Bill Clinton was a president. Also, when she was elected to the senate in 2001, she was the only American First lady to ever hold national office. It is undeniable fact that both have successful profession as a politician.

In terms of their background, they are uttely different in family, race, education, and their political views. Hillary was born in a white middle-class family, and raised in a politically Conservative household, but later she changed her allegiance to republican. She wanted to be a lawyer, and did so.  Whereas Hillary was raised a white family, condoleezza born in African-American family. At that time the south of the United States was racially segregated. Then, her family concentrated on education to improve her situation. Through those education, at first she wanted to be a professional pianist, but she thought she does not have enough innate musical talent. So, she majored in political science. About her political view, she changed her political party from Democrat to Republican. From their early life, 

Public opinions about Hillary and Condoleezza vary. Even though they are both politicians, the respectability of them was different. While Hillary was first lady of the U.S., she faced the Monica Lewinsky scandal. Her ability to handle the crisis was admired by the public because of her strength, and poise, but also many people sympathized with her. At that time her approval rating reached about 70%. In her career as senator, senators were elected by voter, so she had to have the supporters. Later, she became one of candidates to be a president, so through result of the election for president candidate, it is proved that how much public on her back of  large . However, Condoleezza Rice was under the Bush Administration. She had a strong image as an administrator, so she received a lot of criticisms. When government's policies were failed, she was tarnished by these failures. The collapse of the Bush administration made Condoleezza Rice disliked person. Moreover, her announcement and perspective on the war also affected her standing. She agreed with the war with Iraq, but it failed. Even though she worked hard for her nation, the only thing left was tremendous critisims for her. 

Hillary and Condoleezza have not only similarities, but also differences. It is meaningful that the comparison could be helpful for students who want to be a poltician.