https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai How can we write the following lines with appropriate tone & register? en-us 2021-05-10 02:18:29 UTC 2021-05-10 04:20:46 UTC hello@padlet.com yitsunchan https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507468591 Dear Sir, 
Very curious about the matter 

]]> 2021-05-10 02:19:51 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507468591 yitsunchan https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507469701 Why was one of your staff not wearing gloves while kneading the dough??]]> 2021-05-10 02:20:22 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507469701 yitsunchan https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507471138 This shows that your standard of hygiene is terrible!]]> 2021-05-10 02:21:01 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507471138 yitsunchan https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507472136 I think you should do better by getting your staff to wear gloves. ]]> 2021-05-10 02:21:30 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507472136 yitsunchan https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507673900 Suggestion with an appropriate tone & register]]> 2021-05-10 04:08:08 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507673900 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507678988 I would like to inquire and understand why gloves were not used when one of the staff was kneading the dough.]]> 2021-05-10 04:11:46 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507678988 dogebag47 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507680859 I would like to believe that You Tiao Man has held a high standard of hygiene in their business. However what I have witnessed has shown otherwise, as such, I would like to clarify this issue of hygiene standards.

-sparkletots preschool]]> 2021-05-10 04:13:07 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507680859 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507681214 I suggest that it would be more ideal for your staff to wear gloves while preparing the food to ensure better food hygiene. ]]> 2021-05-10 04:13:18 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507681214 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507681588 Question 1
Dear Sir/Madam
Good morning I am _____ from sparkletots. I am writing to you to enquire about the hygiene of your food. ]]> 2021-05-10 04:13:33 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507681588 mineboyofficial965 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507681846 Why was one of your staff not wearing gloves while kneading the dough??]]> 2021-05-10 04:13:45 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507681846 xinhuichoeng https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507681998 Q3

Error/mistake: 
- tone of the sentence was impolite
- punctuation used was inappropriate

Corrected sentence:
I think that your standard of hygiene can be improved. 



]]> 2021-05-10 04:13:52 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507681998 serenayanny https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507682092 Q1 
Dear Sir, 
I am a staff member from the organisation Sparkletots. I am writing this email to inquire and understand about certain concerns of the hygiene of your store. ]]> 2021-05-10 04:13:55 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507682092 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507682211 i would like to know why gloves were not worn by one of your staff members while they were kneading the dough?]]> 2021-05-10 04:14:00 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507682211 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507682312 With all due respect, I feel that the standard of hygiene of making the You Tiao is not very ideal.]]> 2021-05-10 04:14:05 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507682312 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507683774  Question 2
May I inquire the reason behind why gloves were not worn by one of your staff while kneading the dough. ]]> 2021-05-10 04:14:57 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507683774 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507685029 Error / mistake: The tone is too imposing and commanding, it addressed the person/company directly instead of a third person point of view, vocabulary usage is not of adequate level which causes the register to be informal, no reason is stated for their suggestion.

Corrected sentence: I would like to suggest that the employees of your establishment wear gloves when doing tasks where hygiene is of concern.]]> 2021-05-10 04:15:50 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507685029 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507685336 Dear Sir,
Good morning/afternoon, my name is______ from Sparkletots.
I am writing to you as I am curious about the level of hygiene in your store.]]> 2021-05-10 04:16:04 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507685336 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507685900 I wish to enquire the reason for why one of your staff not wearing any gloves while kneading the dough.]]> 2021-05-10 04:16:29 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507685900 mineboyofficial965 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507687024 May I inquire on the reason why one of your employees were not equipped with gloves whilst handling dough 
:/]]> 2021-05-10 04:17:20 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507687024 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507687350 Q3:
This shows that your standard of hygiene could be improved.]]> 2021-05-10 04:17:37 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507687350 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507687609 May I ask why a member of your staff was not wearing gloves while handling the dough >:’( ]]> 2021-05-10 04:17:46 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507687609 https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507690254 Xiao Qian and Tan Ching

Dear CEO of you tiao man,

Good morning, I am Sally Wong from the organisation Sparkletots, an audience of the show where you tiao man was featured. I am writing this letter to you as I was concerned about the hygiene  when I saw you tiao man making the food with bare hands. ]]> 2021-05-10 04:19:16 UTC https://padlet.com/yitsunchan/fq4r2kwv55pevtai/wish/1507690254