Period 4 Turning Point Peer Feedback by Jacquelyn Jarrell https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90 Post a video with a targeted request for feedback. Share your draft so the link is "Anyone with the link can comment." Respond to 3 other peers in your class period. en-us 2025-08-29 17:24:23 UTC 2025-09-18 17:38:14 UTC hello@padlet.com "LEARNING TO FISH" - Ms. Jarrell jjarrell10 https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3576779372 LINK: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13zvj76T9idrNKsEs0z11_NJCgIt9tAnpIqJIkjJp1YQ/edit?tab=t.poglnpd56ad3


I would like feedback on my ending. I only wrote two sentences and I think it doesn't make sense. Can you ask me questions to give me ideas?

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I would like feedback on how discriptive the story is.

]]> 2025-09-09 21:49:40 UTC https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3576796899 when I changed my opinion on Minecraft by zane zlee9570 https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3576797119 watch video and read my story and tell me whats wrong pls. I wrote about my time I changed my opinion on Minecraft.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ItwXDSgyRmaZ9PL0kVthZOc3aGHlXmnJ8PkOZTMUjec/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ockcdWvXPTUaaDCaEAeTC6RnL352De8iT_hN1JgsWwA/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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I would like some feedback on my Turning Point. I feel like it's pretty good so far, but there is still room for improvement.

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Make sure to go to slide 2

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]]> 2025-09-09 23:25:48 UTC https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3576859925 Sixth Grade- Aleia P. apine4299 https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3576888261 Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OgPnTkr3tz9CNC0lgRjvkh25OMRuM8CnCz0lsIUxZm8/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y#heading=h.mwxsdtewj0rt

I would appreciate feedback on my title and hook, because I'm not very sure what I'm doing for those.

]]> 2025-09-09 23:52:25 UTC https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3576888261 "Going to voice/choir"- Penelope Johnnides pjohnnides2115 https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3577013925 I would like feedback on how I can make my story longer, and more interesting.

penelope johnnides - Turning Point Narrative - Google Docs

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Can you guys please give me feeback on how I can add more details to my story and how i can make it more interesting.

]]> 2025-09-10 01:52:00 UTC https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3577119563 Life lesson https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3577588798 I would like feedback if I should put more dialogue and add more details https://docs.google.com/document/d/18AnrXvLwXgdTUEfxW53QCxBqaO6cDd6iGZsdpiiqBg0/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

]]> 2025-09-10 06:15:51 UTC https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3577588798 zariah spencer zspencer4686 https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3578958839 I need help with my turning point, and my personal narrative writing is about I also want some details for it

]]> 2025-09-11 00:08:33 UTC https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3578958839 "The day I kept going" Taimane https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3578962022 https://docs.google.com/document/d/16LcKB3Q5wumaNurb0AOCilc8vvFprlqKEm3pdzDsH5A/edit?tab=t.0

I need help with revising my reflection and turning point, adding more details, and making it more engaging.

]]> 2025-09-11 00:10:38 UTC https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3578962022 "From New York To Paradise" mpruitt9724 https://padlet.com/englishhta/fntfc62nj78i0f90/wish/3578968104 link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1b5OHgQ64HS6cbAEiCF2XJgsCZZYwkypaEBBytHDespA/edit?tab=t.0

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I would love some feedback on how to make the turning point more descriptive and exciting to make the readers feel like they are in that moment. Thank you!

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